Survive
a senryu5 total reviews
Comment from royowen
Yes, many children in this world are victims of an accidental life, were poverty and abuse was rained upon them, despite their innocence, such a terrible shame, it's a lifetime of suffering for them, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
Yes, many children in this world are victims of an accidental life, were poverty and abuse was rained upon them, despite their innocence, such a terrible shame, it's a lifetime of suffering for them, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Roy
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Most. Welcome
Comment from Lisa Carter1
True. I work with elementary school age kids Monday through Friday and I can appreciate this poem. I see that everyone has a story and this is why kids may act the way they do
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
True. I work with elementary school age kids Monday through Friday and I can appreciate this poem. I see that everyone has a story and this is why kids may act the way they do
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thanks, Lisa
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was a thought provoking poem I think there is a lot of truth to that! There is some responsibility to remember your parents. Very creative and you say a lot with just three lines.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
I thought this was a thought provoking poem I think there is a lot of truth to that! There is some responsibility to remember your parents. Very creative and you say a lot with just three lines.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thanks, Michael
Comment from jessizero
I am not a real poet, but I think this is a great senryu. The statement was great. However, I keep counting one too many syllables in that second line. I could be wrong, but you may want to double-check it. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
I am not a real poet, but I think this is a great senryu. The statement was great. However, I keep counting one too many syllables in that second line. I could be wrong, but you may want to double-check it. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Jessizero. I change a word and tried to keep a hold of the sense of it.
Comment from Shanbreen
Yes, what you state is true. I suspect there are studies that show a link between children's upbringing and their parents' involvement in their lives.
Nicely summarized by your senryu. However, the poem seems to suggest that it is the recalling of the "great parents " rather than actions of their great parents.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
Yes, what you state is true. I suspect there are studies that show a link between children's upbringing and their parents' involvement in their lives.
Nicely summarized by your senryu. However, the poem seems to suggest that it is the recalling of the "great parents " rather than actions of their great parents.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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I fixed that line because it was too short. Thanks.