My Poetic Muse
He's always with me...5 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, My Poetic Muse, presented with seven ABAB-rhymed quatrains, connects the muse here with family and those types of sources to inject heart into the written word. Nice.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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This poem, My Poetic Muse, presented with seven ABAB-rhymed quatrains, connects the muse here with family and those types of sources to inject heart into the written word. Nice.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read my poem. :)
Comment from SimianSavant
Pretty neat animated GIF. The rhyming works well here. I think the meter could use a bit of smoothing in places. Here are some examples in no particular order:
for gifting me with poetry,
for it's truly what I love.
^^ I would drop the second "for", in order for the first accent of the second line to land on TRUE. Otherwise, you'll have to read the text before it as a triplet instead of a duplet for it to sound natural, which will also make it sound rushed, which is best avoided at the end of a poem in particular.
Alternate option to the suggestion above: "for it is what I love"
I'm keeping my muse busy,
for I have so much to write. <= this puts the accents on KEEPing MY muse BUSy. But the subject is your muse, so don't you want that word to be accented? Possible alternative: "my muse has been so busy"
Stanza 4: try to avoid accenting "of". It's just a preposition, and the words around it are more important.
Thanks for the read and hope this was helpful,
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reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Pretty neat animated GIF. The rhyming works well here. I think the meter could use a bit of smoothing in places. Here are some examples in no particular order:
for gifting me with poetry,
for it's truly what I love.
^^ I would drop the second "for", in order for the first accent of the second line to land on TRUE. Otherwise, you'll have to read the text before it as a triplet instead of a duplet for it to sound natural, which will also make it sound rushed, which is best avoided at the end of a poem in particular.
Alternate option to the suggestion above: "for it is what I love"
I'm keeping my muse busy,
for I have so much to write. <= this puts the accents on KEEPing MY muse BUSy. But the subject is your muse, so don't you want that word to be accented? Possible alternative: "my muse has been so busy"
Stanza 4: try to avoid accenting "of". It's just a preposition, and the words around it are more important.
Thanks for the read and hope this was helpful,
🦍
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you for reading my poem and for your great suggestions. Both are very appreciated. :)
Comment from royowen
Beautifully written, I like people's opinions, as long as they're not forced Down my throat, it becomes hard to digest, heh, heh. Love your poem, it's well written, and it gently assail the writewaves, nicely done, my friend, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Beautifully written, I like people's opinions, as long as they're not forced Down my throat, it becomes hard to digest, heh, heh. Love your poem, it's well written, and it gently assail the writewaves, nicely done, my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for taking the time to read mt poem, it's very appreciated. :)
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Most welcome
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your muse is alive and kicking in this well rhymed poem about the process of writing poetry, I wish you luck with the contest, a pleasurable post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Your muse is alive and kicking in this well rhymed poem about the process of writing poetry, I wish you luck with the contest, a pleasurable post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for reading my poem. :)
Comment from bonespur
This is a great candidate for the contest. The flow of the poem is smooth and the rhyming scheme comes natural and doesn't seem forced. The content of the poem itself was great. You're like myself. You write about what inspires you to want to write.i really enjoyed reading this. Thank you. Great job and good luck. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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This is a great candidate for the contest. The flow of the poem is smooth and the rhyming scheme comes natural and doesn't seem forced. The content of the poem itself was great. You're like myself. You write about what inspires you to want to write.i really enjoyed reading this. Thank you. Great job and good luck. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you for this exceptional review, I'm honored. :)
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You're welcome
