Evisceration
a 80 word horror story12 total reviews
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!
It's the combination of your words and the effective artwork that made your story so disturbing.
It really made my stomach turn and twist .
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Ciao!
It's the combination of your words and the effective artwork that made your story so disturbing.
It really made my stomach turn and twist .
Comment Written 24-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Ah, tempeste, I truly appreciate your ongoing support of my writing, and the great rating you gave this story. Thank you so much. Rod
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You are welcome ! 😋
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Rod,
I count exactly 80 words. Nice entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction contest! Your small intestine became a dinosaur, "devouring and ingesting, encircling my stomach, my chest, my neck. Insatiable appetite, gobbling up everything, organs, bones, skin, even itself." A late-night burrito will do that, I guess. Off to a dreamy nightmare!
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Hi Rod,
I count exactly 80 words. Nice entry for the 80 Word Flash Fiction contest! Your small intestine became a dinosaur, "devouring and ingesting, encircling my stomach, my chest, my neck. Insatiable appetite, gobbling up everything, organs, bones, skin, even itself." A late-night burrito will do that, I guess. Off to a dreamy nightmare!
Good Luck in the contest!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Kimbob. I must discipline myself especially on the weekends. Have a good one! Rod
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, sometimes our unbearable cravings cause us to ingest what we know won't be agreeable to our tummies. But we eat them anyway, and I for one am the worst. LOL. Thanks for sharing. And it's always nice to see talented writers jumping outside their comfort zone.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Yes, sometimes our unbearable cravings cause us to ingest what we know won't be agreeable to our tummies. But we eat them anyway, and I for one am the worst. LOL. Thanks for sharing. And it's always nice to see talented writers jumping outside their comfort zone.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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FanStory is not accepting my replies today, Ric, but I am delighted to hear from you. Rod
Comment from Debra White
Hello Rod :)
Thank goodness it was all a dream! It's strange how physical discomfort can manifest itself into a nightmare. Also how consuming certain food and drink too late in the day can interfere with our sleep.
Let your horror story be a lesson to us all!
I enjoyed reading your flash fiction and wish you the best of luck for the contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Hello Rod :)
Thank goodness it was all a dream! It's strange how physical discomfort can manifest itself into a nightmare. Also how consuming certain food and drink too late in the day can interfere with our sleep.
Let your horror story be a lesson to us all!
I enjoyed reading your flash fiction and wish you the best of luck for the contest.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Yes, thank goodness it was only a dream, but I learned my lesson about when and what to eat. Glad you enjoyed this, Debra. Thanks for sharing.
Rod
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I've had heartburn and discomfort from Mexican food before, but never anything like this!
A very good entry for this contest, Rod. I wish you more luck than you have with the food you eat:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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I've had heartburn and discomfort from Mexican food before, but never anything like this!
A very good entry for this contest, Rod. I wish you more luck than you have with the food you eat:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Still trying to thank you, Pam. Rod
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, you stomach was ready to explode and you made me smile as you were consumed by the pain after eating here Rod, you made me laugh, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Ha ha ha, you stomach was ready to explode and you made me smile as you were consumed by the pain after eating here Rod, you made me laugh, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Hi, Dolly. I am delighted this shortie made you laugh. Thanks so much for sharing. Rod
Comment from lyenochka
Uh-well! You did describe a horrific scene indeed! And I'm glad it's not a real horror in terms of zombies and aliens eating humans etc.
Your final line made it understandable!
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Uh-well! You did describe a horrific scene indeed! And I'm glad it's not a real horror in terms of zombies and aliens eating humans etc.
Your final line made it understandable!
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Hi, lyenochka. Always glad to hear from you. Many thanks for sharing my shortie. Rod
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
Oh my! Been there-done that! I love your title and the horror story that follows. It kind of put a damper on my dinner tonight. This could also work as a humorous story!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Oh my! Been there-done that! I love your title and the horror story that follows. It kind of put a damper on my dinner tonight. This could also work as a humorous story!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Still trying to thank you, Verna. Rod
Comment from mermaids
You surprised me at the end with the mention of the burrito. You have a clever and creative use of words. An upset stomach can cause very weird dreams which you captured perfectly in your short story.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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You surprised me at the end with the mention of the burrito. You have a clever and creative use of words. An upset stomach can cause very weird dreams which you captured perfectly in your short story.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, mermaids, for your very kind praise of my shortie. Rod
Comment from prettybluebirds
I love the twist at the end of your story. Although it is listed as a horror, I found it more humorous than anything. I enjoyed this story immensely. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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I love the twist at the end of your story. Although it is listed as a horror, I found it more humorous than anything. I enjoyed this story immensely. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Prettybluebirds. I am delighted you enjoyed my story and found it humororous and not too horrific. Rod