Chasing Your Dreams
A Poem about men chasing thier dreams.5 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Congrats on your 50th post! It's a thoughtful piece that for me shares the complexities of pursuing one's dreams. I love your imagery. For me what stood out was the crumbling mountains, fallen fruit, and unreachable horizons. That beautifully shares the sense of searching and longing. This was a wonderful read!
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Congrats on your 50th post! It's a thoughtful piece that for me shares the complexities of pursuing one's dreams. I love your imagery. For me what stood out was the crumbling mountains, fallen fruit, and unreachable horizons. That beautifully shares the sense of searching and longing. This was a wonderful read!
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Well, thank you Michael for your review.
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on your milestone post! You provided a great poem for this milestone. It was captivating and definitely food for thought. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Congratulations on your milestone post! You provided a great poem for this milestone. It was captivating and definitely food for thought. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Well, thank you Jessi. I really appreciate your kind words. Best wishes to you as well!
Comment from SimianSavant
I like this little poem very much. There's a lot of truth in it. "Follow your dreams", they tell you. No matter what, you end up dead. How do we measure success?
I looked for the oceans tide <= maybe you meant "ocean's"? It could also just be written as "ocean".
Thanks for a fine read,
🦍
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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I like this little poem very much. There's a lot of truth in it. "Follow your dreams", they tell you. No matter what, you end up dead. How do we measure success?
I looked for the oceans tide <= maybe you meant "ocean's"? It could also just be written as "ocean".
Thanks for a fine read,
🦍
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Thanks for catching that Simian. I apprecaite you and your review.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Harry
It's very true what you say. One man's dreams may be another man's nightmare. It is known as a universal truth
You give examples within this theme that are good examples
I could not totally figure out your rhyming scheme because it seemed like in some stands as you rhymed the first and third line and some others you rhyme two lines in a row and then in stil others you rhyme the second and fourth line
Maybe there only two lines per stanza, but it's hard to tell because the length of each line is different
And within the lines, some things rhyme with each other
I think sometimes it looks like there are multiple lines because like I said each line is a different length
It just seem to be inconsistent on the rhyming. But like I said, maybe you should put periods at the the ends of your lines.
I'm sure I confused you by all this, but I didn't mean to
There is no set meter obviously
Here. It would be nice to not have two seems in the same sentence
"you can't seem
to find them it seems"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Hi, Harry
It's very true what you say. One man's dreams may be another man's nightmare. It is known as a universal truth
You give examples within this theme that are good examples
I could not totally figure out your rhyming scheme because it seemed like in some stands as you rhymed the first and third line and some others you rhyme two lines in a row and then in stil others you rhyme the second and fourth line
Maybe there only two lines per stanza, but it's hard to tell because the length of each line is different
And within the lines, some things rhyme with each other
I think sometimes it looks like there are multiple lines because like I said each line is a different length
It just seem to be inconsistent on the rhyming. But like I said, maybe you should put periods at the the ends of your lines.
I'm sure I confused you by all this, but I didn't mean to
There is no set meter obviously
Here. It would be nice to not have two seems in the same sentence
"you can't seem
to find them it seems"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Thank you Pam.
Comment from jmdg1954
Do we ever stop dreaming?
Were our dreams bigger when we were younger?
Are some more attainable now as I'm older?
Does it bother a person when they were not able to achieve the dream?
So many questions and so many more.
Good poem which gets the mind working...
John
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Do we ever stop dreaming?
Were our dreams bigger when we were younger?
Are some more attainable now as I'm older?
Does it bother a person when they were not able to achieve the dream?
So many questions and so many more.
Good poem which gets the mind working...
John
Comment Written 14-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 14-Aug-2024
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Yes it does. Thank you John for your kind review. I really appreciate it.