Comment from lancellot

Good

I read this one over three times. You seem to paint and scene, but as for Story, with story elements, I have to be honest. I don't really see them. The structural writing and editing are sound, but the story itself needs more to reach and hold the readers.

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024

Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

Guess Charles had the urge to find something different in life and without a word to anyone, he slipped out and disappeared. But of course, he left his mark on the Manor. Good luck in the contest.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2024

Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya