Nature's Cycle
Ode to Autumn6 total reviews
Comment from Andrea Kepple
I like how you address the cycle of life in your poem, that the red leaves of autumn need to detach and fall to the ground so eventually there will be room for new leaves to appear. Great imagery in so few words.
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I like how you address the cycle of life in your poem, that the red leaves of autumn need to detach and fall to the ground so eventually there will be room for new leaves to appear. Great imagery in so few words.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
Comment from jaded831
Your poem felt like it had a spiritual feeling. Truly unique and a joy to read. Life, I
feel is rebirth. We die in winter to be born again in spring, autumn and summer are the days of our lives.
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Your poem felt like it had a spiritual feeling. Truly unique and a joy to read. Life, I
feel is rebirth. We die in winter to be born again in spring, autumn and summer are the days of our lives.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This is a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Your poem is not only a 575 poem. It is actually a haiku with a good Satori line at the end.
You may already know what Satori means. It means that it's a surprise, that it's unexpected.
So you could've entered this in the haiku contest, any haiku contest anywhere in the world
Nice job
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Hi
This is a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Your poem is not only a 575 poem. It is actually a haiku with a good Satori line at the end.
You may already know what Satori means. It means that it's a surprise, that it's unexpected.
So you could've entered this in the haiku contest, any haiku contest anywhere in the world
Nice job
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thanks you for your review.
I have heard mention the satori line when talking about haiku but never known what it means. Thanks for clearing that up.
Comment from jessizero
The only problem I see is that the contest required that you use the word "autumn" in the poem. You used "fall," but it's not the same. You got the syllable count right. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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The only problem I see is that the contest required that you use the word "autumn" in the poem. You used "fall," but it's not the same. You got the syllable count right. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you Jess, that passed by me completely. Looks like it did the same to the committee. Now fixed.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Nature's Cycle, has the proper formatting and seems to promise the leaves their next chance at riding in the trees. New leaves will hear this too.
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This 5-7-5, Nature's Cycle, has the proper formatting and seems to promise the leaves their next chance at riding in the trees. New leaves will hear this too.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
Comment from Lindsey Russell
This is a beautiful reminder that all of life has a cycle. Death and wilting must happen in order for new life to appear. Good job with this and happy writing!!!!!
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This is a beautiful reminder that all of life has a cycle. Death and wilting must happen in order for new life to appear. Good job with this and happy writing!!!!!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024