Comment from SimianSavant

Good

Hey friend, there are a couple issues with this piece:

-a comma instead of an apostrophe (God,s where I assume you meant God's)

-you have eight syllables in your second line, which would get this piece disqualified

I took off a star to get your attention, so you have a chance to correct this in time. Message me back after fixing and I will add a star.

Regard,

🦍

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024

Thank you

reply by SimianSavant on 10-Aug-2024

You still have eight syllables in the middle line, FYI

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024

Where are the 8 syllables I am not understanding I checked the dictionary red - orange is 2 syllables

reply by SimianSavant on 10-Aug-2024

It's three. "Orange" is two syllables. Some American dialects might pronounce it as one, but in the dictionary it is listed as two.

reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024

God's bright tapestry



Red-0range leaves carpet the ground
The second line has 7 syllables red-orange is 2 leaves is 1 carpet is 2 the is 1 ground is 1
That makes 7 or am I reading this wrong?

reply by SimianSavant on 10-Aug-2024

You are reading it wrong. Red-orange is 3:

red - 1
orange (or-ange) - 2

reply by SimianSavant on 10-Aug-2024

Ok so I'm reading there is actually a fair bit of controversy on this subject. Maybe it can be one or two. I'd just hate to see the judges insist it is two, and DQ you. I don't know what they will say.

Comment from Lindsey Russell

Excellent

I love the oranges and reds of autumn leaves too! You have captured that love beautifully in this poem. Great job! Good luck with this poem and happy writing!

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2024

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reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024

Thank you so much 🙂