Dodie Rae
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "The mission"A young woman unwilling to submit to abuse.
15 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
She needs to send the cards as well, but I'm sure she has every intention of doing so. What a good way to kill all the abusers; perhaps next she can go after the child abusers!! Lol. Another great chapter, Steve! :)) Sandra
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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She needs to send the cards as well, but I'm sure she has every intention of doing so. What a good way to kill all the abusers; perhaps next she can go after the child abusers!! Lol. Another great chapter, Steve! :)) Sandra
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Great idea about going after child abusers.
Thank you, Sandra for this excellent review.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Dodie Rae is enjoying her inner beast and is very pleased with herself for getting rid of some miserable, brutish husbands. She doesn't seem to think there is any chance she will be discovered. I suspect she thinks she is doing the world a lot of good, which she is, but . . . GOOD STORY LINE AND I"M NOT SHOUTING< MY COMPUTER IS CRAZY AGAIN>
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Dodie Rae is enjoying her inner beast and is very pleased with herself for getting rid of some miserable, brutish husbands. She doesn't seem to think there is any chance she will be discovered. I suspect she thinks she is doing the world a lot of good, which she is, but . . . GOOD STORY LINE AND I"M NOT SHOUTING< MY COMPUTER IS CRAZY AGAIN>
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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LOL! Computers have a mind of their own at times. Thank you Carol for the excellent review, my friend. I'll put the next chapter out sometime tomorrow. Dodie Rae is definitely feeling invincible.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from nomi338
Men who abuse women are usually low self esteemed individuals. Any man confident of his masculinity never feels the need to mistreat a woman. As a matter of fact, he will often be the first one to celebrate her and her femininity.
I love it.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Men who abuse women are usually low self esteemed individuals. Any man confident of his masculinity never feels the need to mistreat a woman. As a matter of fact, he will often be the first one to celebrate her and her femininity.
I love it.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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100% My friend. Well stated, I've never understood how or why this happens. I would imagine it's about control. Thank you for this excellent review.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Friend,
I have just read this and love this chapter. The book, which I think I got in on in the beginning, is great. I need to go back and read more.
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Hi Friend,
I have just read this and love this chapter. The book, which I think I got in on in the beginning, is great. I need to go back and read more.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Rhonda, for this excellent review. I hope to release Chapter eleven tomorrow. I am stoked that you're following the book.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from F. William Lester
Good story. My memory of the plot is lacking as I've read only one other chapter somewhere near the beginning. I like your humor, and I think the story is moving along at a good pace. I have a couple of comments: Sam and Dodie Rae were talking when I read this phrase, "...about news on our husband's killer..." Our husband's killer? I thought he was Dodie Rae's husband. Sounds like he's husband to both of them. I realize I may have missed a key element, which would easily explain my confusion, but it stuck out to me. One other comment about your dialog. It tends to sound stilted, formal. When we talk, our conversations are clipped, incomplete thoughts or sentences riddled with contractions. Several of the dialogue exchanges are too spot on; too exact. Take a look at them and see if my comment makes sense. Thanks for sharing it. Have a great weekend and be well.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Good story. My memory of the plot is lacking as I've read only one other chapter somewhere near the beginning. I like your humor, and I think the story is moving along at a good pace. I have a couple of comments: Sam and Dodie Rae were talking when I read this phrase, "...about news on our husband's killer..." Our husband's killer? I thought he was Dodie Rae's husband. Sounds like he's husband to both of them. I realize I may have missed a key element, which would easily explain my confusion, but it stuck out to me. One other comment about your dialog. It tends to sound stilted, formal. When we talk, our conversations are clipped, incomplete thoughts or sentences riddled with contractions. Several of the dialogue exchanges are too spot on; too exact. Take a look at them and see if my comment makes sense. Thanks for sharing it. Have a great weekend and be well.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
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Thank you for this excellent review, my friend. I am Samantha from a support group whose husband was killed by the same creature as Dodie Rae's. Dodie Rae is the creature, a Rougarou, which is a Louisiana werewolf. I will look at the dialogue, I tend to be a perfectionist at times.
God bless,
Steve
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You're welcome. A Louisiana werewolf. That helps make the plot much clearer. Thank you.
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Comment from Jesse James Doty
This tale about Dodie Rae is entertaining as well as full of surprises. As the tale went along I didn't know what was going to happen next. Other than the load of swearing going on the dialogue was rich and believable.
By the way, the print size was nice and large so I could easily read it since my eyesight is not the best.
Thanks for sharing this wild and humorous tale of how two women go about tailing the police.
Jesse
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
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This tale about Dodie Rae is entertaining as well as full of surprises. As the tale went along I didn't know what was going to happen next. Other than the load of swearing going on the dialogue was rich and believable.
By the way, the print size was nice and large so I could easily read it since my eyesight is not the best.
Thanks for sharing this wild and humorous tale of how two women go about tailing the police.
Jesse
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Jesse, for this incredible review, my friend. I am happy it was easier for you to read; I also need a large font. I stoked that you're enjoying this story.
God bless,
Steve
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You're welcome, Steve.
After reading this chapter I will continue to follow the book along.
Enjoy the weekend.
Jesse
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What an honor, Jesse. Thank you.
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Awsome.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Interesting thriller story. I'm afraid Dodie Rae is going to get into trouble.. she is poking the bear. Good dialogue and character development.
Well done
Gypsy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Interesting thriller story. I'm afraid Dodie Rae is going to get into trouble.. she is poking the bear. Good dialogue and character development.
Well done
Gypsy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy. Dodie Rae is ballsy, for sure. I can't wait to see what happens next. I have an idea, but she keeps railroading me, lol.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's usually dialogue that ruins most stories for me, but I never have to worry about yours, as it's always spot-on believable and sounds like what the characters might say. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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It's usually dialogue that ruins most stories for me, but I never have to worry about yours, as it's always spot-on believable and sounds like what the characters might say. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Ric, for this excellent review. I feel the same way about dialogue. The comments you made about my dialogue has me glowing, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Dodie Rae now has the addresses of these women and so she can continue to kill their abusers, all under the disguise of sending thank you cards. Good idea. You're doing a good job writing this story.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Dodie Rae now has the addresses of these women and so she can continue to kill their abusers, all under the disguise of sending thank you cards. Good idea. You're doing a good job writing this story.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. I'm enjoying this journey and have found a new passion Writing in novel form is invigorating as well as challenging.
God bless,
Steve
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You're doing and excellent job.
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Thank you, Barbara.
Comment from Jim Wile
Dodie Rae's character is really rounding into nice form with each chapter. Here we get to see how clever she is, but I'm not quite certain yet what she intends to do with those thank you cards she worked so hard to get the addresses for.
She is getting quite gutsy and really seems to get off on tweaking the police. I love it!
One simple suggestion: I like to use the Description field following the Title field on the posting input screen to say briefly what the chapter will be about. This is helpful to readers who may want to try to find something in the story, but don't remember exactly which chapter it's in. With a description of the chapter, it makes that much easier when you look at the list of chapters for the book.
You are currently using the chapter Title field for this, but the titles you've been using tend to be too short and not informative enough for determining what the chapter was about. That's fine, but if you do that, then you could make use of the Description field to identify what takes place in the chapter more clearly since FanStory already automatically puts in "A chapter in the book Dodie Rae" for you.
I didn't start really doing it this way until fairly recently. Some of the earlier chapter descriptions in my current book are also a bit brief and cryptic, such as "Smitten." Now I get a little more descriptive. Someday I may go back and change these and say, for example, "Brian is smitten by Sandi MacReady."
The reason I like to use the Title field to say, the book's title and chapter number (despite the warning to never use chapter numbers in that field) is because that helps you distinguish a novel chapter from a story on FanStory's homepage. I like to know at a glance which stories on the right side of the screen are book chapters vs short stories, flash stories, essays, etc. Therefore, I try to use the Description field wisely to tell what the chapter's about.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Dodie Rae's character is really rounding into nice form with each chapter. Here we get to see how clever she is, but I'm not quite certain yet what she intends to do with those thank you cards she worked so hard to get the addresses for.
She is getting quite gutsy and really seems to get off on tweaking the police. I love it!
One simple suggestion: I like to use the Description field following the Title field on the posting input screen to say briefly what the chapter will be about. This is helpful to readers who may want to try to find something in the story, but don't remember exactly which chapter it's in. With a description of the chapter, it makes that much easier when you look at the list of chapters for the book.
You are currently using the chapter Title field for this, but the titles you've been using tend to be too short and not informative enough for determining what the chapter was about. That's fine, but if you do that, then you could make use of the Description field to identify what takes place in the chapter more clearly since FanStory already automatically puts in "A chapter in the book Dodie Rae" for you.
I didn't start really doing it this way until fairly recently. Some of the earlier chapter descriptions in my current book are also a bit brief and cryptic, such as "Smitten." Now I get a little more descriptive. Someday I may go back and change these and say, for example, "Brian is smitten by Sandi MacReady."
The reason I like to use the Title field to say, the book's title and chapter number (despite the warning to never use chapter numbers in that field) is because that helps you distinguish a novel chapter from a story on FanStory's homepage. I like to know at a glance which stories on the right side of the screen are book chapters vs short stories, flash stories, essays, etc. Therefore, I try to use the Description field wisely to tell what the chapter's about.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Thank you for this excellent review, Jim. I wasn't sure how this worked and have been winging it. When I have the opportunity I will play around with this and probably do this in all of them.
Thank you for being a great friend.
God bless,
Steve
Question: Should I give a brief Synopsis of the chapter I'm presenting and what happened in the last chapter?
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Totally up to you. I don't synopsize (is that a word?) the current chapter, only the previous one. It's extra work but it's often much appreciated by readers, especially those who start the book several chapters in and want to catch up. I tell them to read the chapter recaps for that to save reading the whole thing.
Also, I often read those when other novelists provide them, just to get my mind back to where we are in the story. I read so many postings, and my memory isn't what it used to be, so I will usually go back and skim through the previous chapter before reading the new one. A good recap prevents the need to do that.
An interesting thing about that: I found that I write the recaps in present tense, whereas the story itself is always in past tense (but may include some present tense--but that's a whole nother discussion we might have some day).
I don't know why I started doing it that way, but I always have and wasn't really aware I did that until I discovered it one day.
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You are a wealth of knowledge, my friend.
