2024 Japanese Poetry
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12 total reviews
Comment from mermaids
Aaaah... a feeling of romance comes through your words. There is also a mystical feel and flow to your poem. You have descriptive words that create a clear scene. "Embraced in your scent of ocean breeze and too tired to get up" are my favorite lines. After a night of romance, one is too tired to get up. Excellent poem that takes the reader to another place.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Aaaah... a feeling of romance comes through your words. There is also a mystical feel and flow to your poem. You have descriptive words that create a clear scene. "Embraced in your scent of ocean breeze and too tired to get up" are my favorite lines. After a night of romance, one is too tired to get up. Excellent poem that takes the reader to another place.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much,
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Love your poem. The words you used are so descriptive and heartfelt. The pictures are also beautiful. Well written.
Grear job.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Love your poem. The words you used are so descriptive and heartfelt. The pictures are also beautiful. Well written.
Grear job.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Brenda. I appreciate the exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
This is a gently sensual poem rich with imagery and feeling.
'a string of wild horses
gallop on the meadow
and a charm of finches
chirp and chatter
on the bough'
This brings a sense of unity to inside and out depicting a perfect moment in time.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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This is a gently sensual poem rich with imagery and feeling.
'a string of wild horses
gallop on the meadow
and a charm of finches
chirp and chatter
on the bough'
This brings a sense of unity to inside and out depicting a perfect moment in time.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Shirley
Gypsy 😊
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi MariVal,
This suite give strong images of in inside of her room and the nature that surrounds it outside.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend.
Joan
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Hi MariVal,
This suite give strong images of in inside of her room and the nature that surrounds it outside.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great weekend.
Joan
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Joan, you stay healthy too.
Gypsy 😊
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You are most kindly welcome, MariVal.
Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this wonderful passionate and romantic poem with us. I enjoyed reading. I could feel the emotion as I read. You did a wonder job with this presentation.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you for sharing this wonderful passionate and romantic poem with us. I enjoyed reading. I could feel the emotion as I read. You did a wonder job with this presentation.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Barbara. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from shelley kaye
lol - too tired to get up - nice ending!
great imagery with the horses and the finches
and the love from dusk to dawn
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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lol - too tired to get up - nice ending!
great imagery with the horses and the finches
and the love from dusk to dawn
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley
Gypsy 😊
Comment from jake cosmos aller
great gogyoku poem you should post it your Japanese poetry contest page love the way you build the tension building toward the end -like the last few lines the best
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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great gogyoku poem you should post it your Japanese poetry contest page love the way you build the tension building toward the end -like the last few lines the best
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Jake
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Jasmine Girl
What an erotic poem. Good for you to write one. As I grow older, I don't write about it anymore. I have written quite a few erotic short stories before and took me a long time to publish them. They have been published but not many read it.
Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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What an erotic poem. Good for you to write one. As I grow older, I don't write about it anymore. I have written quite a few erotic short stories before and took me a long time to publish them. They have been published but not many read it.
Well done.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Erotic? I thought I kept it pretty mild passion. Maybe that is just me.
Thank you very much, Lisa
Gypsy 😊
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Yes :).
Comment from royowen
I think I've been too tired to get up, but in recent memory not really anything other than that heh heh, beautifully written Gypsy, always superbly written my friend, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I think I've been too tired to get up, but in recent memory not really anything other than that heh heh, beautifully written Gypsy, always superbly written my friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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hahaha ... I know what you mean.
Thank you very much, Roy
Gypsy 😊
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Well done
Comment from lyenochka
What a sweet way to wake up even though the narrator doesn't feel like waking up after remember the passionate night. I liked your use of the unusual collective nouns and all the senses of sounds and smells and touch referenced.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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What a sweet way to wake up even though the narrator doesn't feel like waking up after remember the passionate night. I liked your use of the unusual collective nouns and all the senses of sounds and smells and touch referenced.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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thank you very much, big sister 😘
love
marival