In Vino Veritas
The marriage feast at Cana comes to a different conclusion3 total reviews
Comment from SimianSavant
I was driving just now and had Siri read this to me in her super robotic voice. This made it even funnier. The satire is dry and subtle, aided by your extensive vocabulary. A superb entry all around that should be a serious contender in this contest.
There appear to be some unintended line breaks here and there in the entry, which I did not particularly notice since I had it dictated to me, but you might want to fix those and also increase the font size to make sure that you get the votes you deserve from older readers with declining eyesight.
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I was driving just now and had Siri read this to me in her super robotic voice. This made it even funnier. The satire is dry and subtle, aided by your extensive vocabulary. A superb entry all around that should be a serious contender in this contest.
There appear to be some unintended line breaks here and there in the entry, which I did not particularly notice since I had it dictated to me, but you might want to fix those and also increase the font size to make sure that you get the votes you deserve from older readers with declining eyesight.
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Terrific review, Mr. Savant. Thank you.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.
This was well written, well edited, and had no mistakes that I found. I tend to look pretty hard.
This sounds like a Bible story and maybe it is but I'm not familiar with who Cana is.
I'm familiar with Mary and Jesus of course. And of course Jesus forgives their sins. It's kind of unrealistic to say nobody ever drink wine, especially when in church they give you wine that is symbolic for Jesus' blood on the cross.
I think he just means don't drink the excess. One glass of wine in the evening is probably OK.
An original way of telling a Bible story
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.
This was well written, well edited, and had no mistakes that I found. I tend to look pretty hard.
This sounds like a Bible story and maybe it is but I'm not familiar with who Cana is.
I'm familiar with Mary and Jesus of course. And of course Jesus forgives their sins. It's kind of unrealistic to say nobody ever drink wine, especially when in church they give you wine that is symbolic for Jesus' blood on the cross.
I think he just means don't drink the excess. One glass of wine in the evening is probably OK.
An original way of telling a Bible story
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
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So very generous. Many thanks.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
What a thought provoking take on the Marriage Feast of Cana! Your descriptions and dialogue did a great job of bringing it to life. It's an impressive piece that challenges us to think about the nature of miracles. Great job!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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What a thought provoking take on the Marriage Feast of Cana! Your descriptions and dialogue did a great job of bringing it to life. It's an impressive piece that challenges us to think about the nature of miracles. Great job!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Many thanks, Michael. Your generous comments are much appreciated.
