Gone Not Gone
Endless consequences...5 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like this! Powerful image and well complemented verse conveying the horror of conscience and those guilty thoughts that will never be suppressed. Your rhyming verse fulfills the brief well in this haunting monologue from his victim's ghost. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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I like this! Powerful image and well complemented verse conveying the horror of conscience and those guilty thoughts that will never be suppressed. Your rhyming verse fulfills the brief well in this haunting monologue from his victim's ghost. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Debbie.
Comment from TPAC
A serious serial killer. Your words chilling to the bones, finding myself pondering the next occurrence. Strong statement in my given viewpoint prevailing this particular read.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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A serious serial killer. Your words chilling to the bones, finding myself pondering the next occurrence. Strong statement in my given viewpoint prevailing this particular read.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate you reading my work.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word poem, Gone Not Gone, has the proper word count and finds the dreamer haunted by his actions which have killed who he loved and cursed his mind forever more.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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This one-hundred-word poem, Gone Not Gone, has the proper word count and finds the dreamer haunted by his actions which have killed who he loved and cursed his mind forever more.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Bill.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.
I just posted a poem, kind of about the same thing. It wasn't an affair specifically, but it was about a woman who can't get any attention from a man who was cold and heartless.
But this sounds like a wife or girlfriend or fiancé who's discovered that he's had an affair. And now he's restless in his sleep because of the guilt and remorse that he has.
But she is sticking by him even so. I think a lot of of us have been in her shoes. I know I have twice been in those shoes
And it hurts It really does hurt
You portrayed the emotion really well. She still loves him in spite of his affair.
In one of the affairs that affected me I loved him enough to stay with him and we became married and we were together for 45 years. So I'm glad I forgave him
If this person is you, it might be ok to stay with him and give him a second chance. But if he blows that second chance, I would not stay with him.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that.
I just posted a poem, kind of about the same thing. It wasn't an affair specifically, but it was about a woman who can't get any attention from a man who was cold and heartless.
But this sounds like a wife or girlfriend or fiancé who's discovered that he's had an affair. And now he's restless in his sleep because of the guilt and remorse that he has.
But she is sticking by him even so. I think a lot of of us have been in her shoes. I know I have twice been in those shoes
And it hurts It really does hurt
You portrayed the emotion really well. She still loves him in spite of his affair.
In one of the affairs that affected me I loved him enough to stay with him and we became married and we were together for 45 years. So I'm glad I forgave him
If this person is you, it might be ok to stay with him and give him a second chance. But if he blows that second chance, I would not stay with him.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Pam, for your very considered review.
Luckily, it's not autobiographical :)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought your poem beautifully shared the struggle of supporting a loved one through their inner turmoil. The tenderness of your words shows the depth of your care and the helplessness that comes with witnessing someone's distress. It's a powerful and touching piece. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I thought your poem beautifully shared the struggle of supporting a loved one through their inner turmoil. The tenderness of your words shows the depth of your care and the helplessness that comes with witnessing someone's distress. It's a powerful and touching piece. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Michael.
