Endless
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Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your poem on "loneliness" and you described how long and tiresome a day alone can be. I like the double meaning of this "day is broken". Hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Great job with your poem on "loneliness" and you described how long and tiresome a day alone can be. I like the double meaning of this "day is broken". Hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much! I'm pleased you caught the double meaning, no one else has mentioned it so wasn't sure it caught. I appreciate it.
Comment from Wendy G
You have captured well the feeling of loneliness in your well expressed poem, a fine answer to the prompt requirements. The repetition of meaningless actions and rituals as each day comes and goes is well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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You have captured well the feeling of loneliness in your well expressed poem, a fine answer to the prompt requirements. The repetition of meaningless actions and rituals as each day comes and goes is well done. Best wishes.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from karenina
What a profound entry for this contest. The tone was set in the first lines and I felt that familiar tug at my heart. I've been there before...it's so difficult to feel untethered from everything. Best of luck to you --and Happy Birthday as well!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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What a profound entry for this contest. The tone was set in the first lines and I felt that familiar tug at my heart. I've been there before...it's so difficult to feel untethered from everything. Best of luck to you --and Happy Birthday as well!
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you so very much for the nice review and the birthday wishes!
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You are so welcome!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I thought this was so well written. Your poem shows the quiet emptiness of a solitary day with such clarity. The way you convey the mundane details such as junk mail and cheese and crackers was brilliant. I shares picture of a day that feels both ordinary and empty. I think this is a perfect entry for this contest. Good luck!
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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I thought this was so well written. Your poem shows the quiet emptiness of a solitary day with such clarity. The way you convey the mundane details such as junk mail and cheese and crackers was brilliant. I shares picture of a day that feels both ordinary and empty. I think this is a perfect entry for this contest. Good luck!
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review. I was feeling a bit down & re-thinking this one cuz another reviewer said I was depicting boredom, not loneliness. I appreciate your comments.
Comment from Bill Schott
The free verse, Endless, paints a picture of true loneliness where the insular person has become a victim of his/her own inability to make connections with others. Now life is a prison, and the sentence is for life.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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The free verse, Endless, paints a picture of true loneliness where the insular person has become a victim of his/her own inability to make connections with others. Now life is a prison, and the sentence is for life.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much!
Comment from Nicki.B
This is just sad. And real. The poem I read previous to this was all about treasuring moments with your kids etc as life goes by so quickly, to move to this poem of being alone and life feeling monotonous.
Very well writren, a great entry for the contest, best of luck
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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This is just sad. And real. The poem I read previous to this was all about treasuring moments with your kids etc as life goes by so quickly, to move to this poem of being alone and life feeling monotonous.
Very well writren, a great entry for the contest, best of luck
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from zanya
Yes loneliness, they say, is one of the great problems of our times and we don't seem too sure how to cope with it - we talk a lot about it and how it impacts our lives but we don't seem to be able to find meaningful answers.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Yes loneliness, they say, is one of the great problems of our times and we don't seem too sure how to cope with it - we talk a lot about it and how it impacts our lives but we don't seem to be able to find meaningful answers.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from RodG
In 15 lines the Speaker describes his day which seems no different from any other. He is apparently alone throughout the day, but I get the impression he is BORED, not lonely.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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In 15 lines the Speaker describes his day which seems no different from any other. He is apparently alone throughout the day, but I get the impression he is BORED, not lonely.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thanks for your review.