There Is No Sky
A lonely poem7 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
For a happy married guy, you sure nailed lonely.
In a room full of people you can be lonely.
When you are never alone, you can be lonely.
When someone is holding your hand you can be lonely. Three boxes left, then organization, and picture hanging. I have a full life. :-)
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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For a happy married guy, you sure nailed lonely.
In a room full of people you can be lonely.
When you are never alone, you can be lonely.
When someone is holding your hand you can be lonely. Three boxes left, then organization, and picture hanging. I have a full life. :-)
Comment Written 07-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thank you.
Too bad it came in next to last in the voting. I was counting my chickens.
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There is no accounting for taste. As far as I was concerned you won. Want me to mail you a ribbon? :-)
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blue?
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blue?
Comment from Esther Brown
I loved it. Desperate loneliness for a lost love. Rejection, abandonment and the dark blanket of heaviness. You described it so well! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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I loved it. Desperate loneliness for a lost love. Rejection, abandonment and the dark blanket of heaviness. You described it so well! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Nicki.B
This is such a sad and lonely story, put together beautifully. How when left behind by the love of your life leaves on the grieve a living soul, that left and won't be coming back. The want to do nothing, interest for all things gone, feeling of emptiness, you've captured loneliness so well in this poem. Well done good luck with the contest
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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This is such a sad and lonely story, put together beautifully. How when left behind by the love of your life leaves on the grieve a living soul, that left and won't be coming back. The want to do nothing, interest for all things gone, feeling of emptiness, you've captured loneliness so well in this poem. Well done good luck with the contest
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much!
As a non-poet, your words mean a lot.
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You are no longer and non-poet. You are a very good one! Have a great day x
Comment from Wendy G
Very well done. I think you captured the essence of loneliness here. The relationship is broken but you have conveyed the sense of abandonment and rejection perfectly with the imagery you chose - the meaninglessness of trying to fill the hours with trivial pusuits - a jigsaw puzzle, one piece a day, pointless perusal of news etc and the rereading of the book. Excellent. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Very well done. I think you captured the essence of loneliness here. The relationship is broken but you have conveyed the sense of abandonment and rejection perfectly with the imagery you chose - the meaninglessness of trying to fill the hours with trivial pusuits - a jigsaw puzzle, one piece a day, pointless perusal of news etc and the rereading of the book. Excellent. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you. You made my day.
And thank you immensely for the six stars!
Comment from bonespur
I certainly hope this poem isn't about yourself. If it is I'm sending you a big virtual hug. Very good writing and the flow was good as well. Good job and good luck. Have a blessed day
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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I certainly hope this poem isn't about yourself. If it is I'm sending you a big virtual hug. Very good writing and the flow was good as well. Good job and good luck. Have a blessed day
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you.
No, it is pure fiction.
(I would bring in the mail even if I didn't open anything.)
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Well. This is a unique post for this contest.
I have seen three entries for this contest including yours
One of the other ones has the same theme as yours
The other one was just about feeling alone in the world
The protagonist in this poem, lost his love and feels that nothing else matters included the groceries on his stoop. I don't know whether he keeps getting mail and just ignored it, but if that happened to me, my mailbox would overflow in a week. I get so much junk mail.
It is interesting how you pirouette around the sky. I like how you compared your agony to a one jigsaw piece-at-a-time sky
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Well. This is a unique post for this contest.
I have seen three entries for this contest including yours
One of the other ones has the same theme as yours
The other one was just about feeling alone in the world
The protagonist in this poem, lost his love and feels that nothing else matters included the groceries on his stoop. I don't know whether he keeps getting mail and just ignored it, but if that happened to me, my mailbox would overflow in a week. I get so much junk mail.
It is interesting how you pirouette around the sky. I like how you compared your agony to a one jigsaw piece-at-a-time sky
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much.
FYI - The USPS retrieves mail after 10 days assuming you are gone. The theory is that the mail belongs to the sender until it is accepted and they want it back.
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Wow. It would be illegal for them to do that here.
Comment from Bill Schott
The free verse, There is No Sky, gives voice to the one left behind and who is losing his grip on the devices we normally use to fill time. The qualities of life have been removed and now there is no sky.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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The free verse, There is No Sky, gives voice to the one left behind and who is losing his grip on the devices we normally use to fill time. The qualities of life have been removed and now there is no sky.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you.
I appreciate your very nice review.