Punk Son
an essence poem9 total reviews
Comment from Nicki.B
An essence poem, my first time hearing of these.
I really like this one along with the imagery, it has good use of alliteration and rhyme in such a select usage of words.
Thanks for giving an explanatory and more samples for all of us learners!
Good luck in the contest. Well done
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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An essence poem, my first time hearing of these.
I really like this one along with the imagery, it has good use of alliteration and rhyme in such a select usage of words.
Thanks for giving an explanatory and more samples for all of us learners!
Good luck in the contest. Well done
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Nicki.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
There is no internal rhyme in the first line. You have time to correct. Bunk,clunk,dunk,funk,gunk,hunk, junk, lunk, plunk, stunk, spunk, sunk, or slunk.
Bunt, brundt, bundt, hunt, nut, punt, and stunt.
Karen
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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There is no internal rhyme in the first line. You have time to correct. Bunk,clunk,dunk,funk,gunk,hunk, junk, lunk, plunk, stunk, spunk, sunk, or slunk.
Bunt, brundt, bundt, hunt, nut, punt, and stunt.
Karen
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Runt and punk rhyme.
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They don't in the known universe. The clue is one ends in t one ends in k. In our world that matters. Now, tell me why I am wrong. Karen
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Near rhyme appears only in internal rhyme, as every example shows.
The contest is over and I think I'm last.
Thanks for your help.
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I did my best and tried to help.
I do not know a whole lot of stuff. I do not know what near rhymes are. Please explain how and why they work. Thank you, Karen
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nice essence poem about a punk finding out he is now a dad and changing his punk ways and become a responsible adult now that he has a son he can't go back to being a punk
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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nice essence poem about a punk finding out he is now a dad and changing his punk ways and become a responsible adult now that he has a son he can't go back to being a punk
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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...or can he?
Comment from Sally Law
Bill,
Very few get this poem and the requirements. The internal, external rhyme in the short line doth trip the rhyme! Stellar offering in a most difficult form.
Sending along my very best today as always, and my good wishes for the contest.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Bill,
Very few get this poem and the requirements. The internal, external rhyme in the short line doth trip the rhyme! Stellar offering in a most difficult form.
Sending along my very best today as always, and my good wishes for the contest.
Sal :))
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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It is different than others I wrote, but it doesn't matter --last place.
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I'm sorry. I thought it great. I don't get to all the contests these days. Too many. Sal :))
Comment from jessizero
I liked the "story" told in this poem. You got the internal and ending rhymes correct for the contest. I also liked the picture you chose to share. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I liked the "story" told in this poem. You got the internal and ending rhymes correct for the contest. I also liked the picture you chose to share. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Jessizero
Comment from mermaids
Excellent two line poem that tells a story here. A son is born and the gun goes away. You did well creating a short poem which is not easy to do. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Excellent two line poem that tells a story here. A son is born and the gun goes away. You did well creating a short poem which is not easy to do. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Thanks, M
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This has perfect meter and has rhymes
I am being overly analytical here, but was he pointing the gun at Nell?
All the more reason for gun control.
At least you called attention to it in someway and he peaceably put it down. It's kind of against the NRA.
Runt and punk is a near rhyme
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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Hi
This has perfect meter and has rhymes
I am being overly analytical here, but was he pointing the gun at Nell?
All the more reason for gun control.
At least you called attention to it in someway and he peaceably put it down. It's kind of against the NRA.
Runt and punk is a near rhyme
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 03-Aug-2024
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I guess the key word in near rhyme is rhyme. Thank you, Pam
Comment from Neonewman
This is an excellent entry for this Essence poem contest. You hit all the requirements asked of you. Also, I love that he dropped his gun for Nell and his son.
Great piece.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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This is an excellent entry for this Essence poem contest. You hit all the requirements asked of you. Also, I love that he dropped his gun for Nell and his son.
Great piece.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Neo
Comment from royowen
Well done with this post, the only problem is the example shows a lack of inner rhyme, but the rules say that there must be an inner rhyme, so I'm confused, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Well done with this post, the only problem is the example shows a lack of inner rhyme, but the rules say that there must be an inner rhyme, so I'm confused, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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I think that runt and punk rhyme and swell and Nell rhyme. With which do you disagree, Roy?