Dodie Rae
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "The toast"A young woman unwilling to submit to abuse.
16 total reviews
Comment from Gunner Lil
An easy read that is fast moving with all kinds of adventure.
Great sensory descriptions and excellent dialogue that moves the story along for the reader.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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An easy read that is fast moving with all kinds of adventure.
Great sensory descriptions and excellent dialogue that moves the story along for the reader.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Bunner Lil, for this excellent and motivating review my friend.
God bless
Steve
Comment from Jacob1395
This is a really intense chapter and I thought you did a brilliant job with the dialogue in this piece and with setting the scene as well. I really liked Dodie Rae, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take her next from here. An excellent piece, I'm looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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This is a really intense chapter and I thought you did a brilliant job with the dialogue in this piece and with setting the scene as well. I really liked Dodie Rae, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you take her next from here. An excellent piece, I'm looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Welcome aboard this crazy ride that is Dodie Rae. Thank you, Jacob, for this excellent review, my friend, and I look forward to seeing you in the next chapter.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
So, Dodie Rae believes she becomes a rougarou when she has punished an abusive husband. I thought she was going to get back with her husband, but he must have hit her one too many times. Now she is an avenger for other women with abusive husbands. I look forward to seeing where you are going with this.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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So, Dodie Rae believes she becomes a rougarou when she has punished an abusive husband. I thought she was going to get back with her husband, but he must have hit her one too many times. Now she is an avenger for other women with abusive husbands. I look forward to seeing where you are going with this.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Carol, for this excellent review. I always enjoy hearing your comments and look forward to seeing you for the next chapter.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from iDri.Luv.Jesus
Thanks goodness it's a fictional story because it sounds so alike like in reality. Your story telling is pretty common, and I have heard, and seen a similar abused going on in a real-life situation. I like your introduction in the background, and your title is pretty catchy. Good luck to your ongoing writing this story, and best of luck.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thanks goodness it's a fictional story because it sounds so alike like in reality. Your story telling is pretty common, and I have heard, and seen a similar abused going on in a real-life situation. I like your introduction in the background, and your title is pretty catchy. Good luck to your ongoing writing this story, and best of luck.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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Thank you for this excellent review, my friend. Abuse is all too common in this world.
God bless,
Steve
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You're so welcome and have a beautiful day!
Comment from Jim Wile
It's interesting how Dodie Rae is slowly learning about this beast inside her and what triggers it to come out. Sounds like a handy tool to have, IF you can control it, but as with an addiction, it often gets to controlling you instead. This is a really interesting story.
If I could make a suggestion about naming of characters. Unless there's a particular reason for it, it's easier on the reader to keep characters straight if names aren't too similar (Sadie and Sam, Carey and Riley).
I had that problem in my story that you're reading now. Some people mistook Artie, who is Tommy's friend with Archie, who is Alan's cat. In my second draft, I changed the friend's name to Vinnie, but then that rhymed with Ginnie, so I changed her name to Jenny. No one would mistake Vinnie for Ginnie, but it just seemed weird to have two names rhyming like that, so I made a slight change to Ginnie and called her Jenny for draft-2.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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It's interesting how Dodie Rae is slowly learning about this beast inside her and what triggers it to come out. Sounds like a handy tool to have, IF you can control it, but as with an addiction, it often gets to controlling you instead. This is a really interesting story.
If I could make a suggestion about naming of characters. Unless there's a particular reason for it, it's easier on the reader to keep characters straight if names aren't too similar (Sadie and Sam, Carey and Riley).
I had that problem in my story that you're reading now. Some people mistook Artie, who is Tommy's friend with Archie, who is Alan's cat. In my second draft, I changed the friend's name to Vinnie, but then that rhymed with Ginnie, so I changed her name to Jenny. No one would mistake Vinnie for Ginnie, but it just seemed weird to have two names rhyming like that, so I made a slight change to Ginnie and called her Jenny for draft-2.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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These are great suggestions, Jim. I never thought about it, but it makes a ton of sense. Poetry tends to slip into our works at times. Thank you for always being willing to help with your reviews.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Begin Again
Well, thanks to her abusive husband taking out a life insurance policy making Sam look like she has a motive, now the police think she is their suspect. Interesting to see how she proves that regardless of how she felt, she didn't do it.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Well, thanks to her abusive husband taking out a life insurance policy making Sam look like she has a motive, now the police think she is their suspect. Interesting to see how she proves that regardless of how she felt, she didn't do it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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This is where the story starts to take a turn. The police look at what they think is obvious motive and forget the possibilities this could be supernatural.
Thank you for this excellent review, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
no doubt they found out about the policy and think sam glommed onto the other man's demise as a way to off her own abuser. Guys better start behaving. Too bad this isn' t true. :-)
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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no doubt they found out about the policy and think sam glommed onto the other man's demise as a way to off her own abuser. Guys better start behaving. Too bad this isn' t true. :-)
Comment Written 31-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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You know, with the exception of Bay Lynn's husband, most of them won't change. Thank you for this excellent review, Karen.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Sadie, Sam, and Dodie Rae don't get in trouble with the law but it looks bad for sam because Keith took out a life insurance policy worth $250.000.
I like the books story line.
Well done
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Sadie, Sam, and Dodie Rae don't get in trouble with the law but it looks bad for sam because Keith took out a life insurance policy worth $250.000.
I like the books story line.
Well done
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy, for this excellent review, my friend. I'm enjoying the hell out of writing this story as Dodie Rae has complete control. I'm excited to see where this is going.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I am understanding that the Police think Sam possibly killed her abusive husband, Keith. Not at all good. Why am I not surprised? You're doing a very good job writing this. Thank you.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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I am understanding that the Police think Sam possibly killed her abusive husband, Keith. Not at all good. Why am I not surprised? You're doing a very good job writing this. Thank you.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Wow! Thank you, Barbara. I look forward to your reviews. Editing is exhausting for me, as I have dyslexia. I've fought my whole life, trying to stay ahead of it. The truth is, I don't see things like everyone else. I have to accept that, lol. I spend hours on a chapter trying to catch all the editing issues, yet they still evade me. Mostly quotations and capital letters.
God bless,
Steve
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I understand. I don't have dyslexia and still don't see all my errors.
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I wonder how editor's do it, lol.
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I have no idea, but my work, before it's published goes through three professional editors, and it still has small errors. I doubt any long writing can be perfect.
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Oh, cool. Well, I don't feel so abnormal after all, lol.
I am hoping to have a novel published one day.
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You will. Keep writing.
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Will do.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, unfortunately, this cowboy is already out of bullets so early in the week, but I'm not 70 reviews behind and trying to catch up like the last few weeks. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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Well, unfortunately, this cowboy is already out of bullets so early in the week, but I'm not 70 reviews behind and trying to catch up like the last few weeks. LOL. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
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It's always a pleasure reading your reviews, Ric. I'm fortunate to have folks like yourself reading my work.
God bless,
Steve
