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hey girl

what's on your mind tonight

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Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
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Congratulations on your win of the Light and Sweet contest. The poem definitely needs to become a song at some point! The AI picture is amazing and I love the colors of the background and text. Good job

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
    Thank you Marilyn. A song is very much in progress! Copilot is pretty great when I can get it to not censor me.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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It would have to be sung by an Elvis impersonator, though, right? In a banana yellow jumpsuit, of course.

Well, I did find the rhythm and rhyme a-PEAL-ing!!! (I bet you just love what I did there, didn't you, Simian.)

Your creativity is a fascinating commodity. No two ways about that xo

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
    Thank you so much. Better yellow than orange, for sure. Then we'd have to call it "black is the new orange", at least if it was a gorilla doing the singing. I showed this one last night to married gay couple and now I'm wondering if I went too far. LOL.
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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I am already out of sixes. I would have offered them up to your nimble use of words to convey naughtiness. Never overstepping all the way. And thanks for the additions. I am still laughing. Karen

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thanks very much Karen, and glad you liked Banana Elvis. I suspect The King will be back for an encore.
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Comment from Shanbreen
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I like this rhyming poem and the sweet naughtiness that goes with it. it's good to know that writers with your sense of humor exist at FanStory. Yes, I would like to hear a song come out of this. Well done and congratulations for winning the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thank you. A song has been started within the last 24 hours! And it may turn out to be a good one.
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Comment from gramalot8
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Loved the photo. Worth a big chuckle. I loved the tongue in cheek humor in your love story. Crazy to think how in so many ways, this could be a true story. Thanks for sharing this with us and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thanks -- it is indeed a real photo of "The King" Banana Elvis, and the song he is writing based on this poem is very real! Coming soon...
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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I wouldn't mind betting you could intrigue us with your banana theme in just about any prompt suggested. You've, certainly, imaginatively turned that otherwise rather prosaic fruit into something almost romantic and sexy, but for the 'mandible' reference and, perhaps, the 'fanny' one (ruder connotations in the UK - perhaps a note?). But original, fun and eye-catching! Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 30-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jul-2024
    LOL I just looked up "fanny" in UK English slang and was shocked. Here it's just an old-fashioned name for, in fact the least possibly expensive way to refer to, one's posterior. Wow. Good to know! One of these days someone ought to host an American vs UK English contest. Thanks for your detailed and kind review!
reply by Debbie D'Arcy on 30-Jul-2024
    Yes, I know the meaning in the US but I've never heard it used in the UK in that context, even though we adopt a great deal from you. I'm amazed by how much things vary between the two languages, especially in spelling. Although I stick with the English spellings I hate seeing all those wiggly red lines appear on a regular basis!
Comment from QC Poet
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Light with a funny and a bit naughty themed vibe to your posting for this contest this mix will do well for your entry lots of luck to you with this entry

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much QC
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Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi
This is a funny poem.
It seems the banana is trying to get its eater to enjoy eating it.'
Good luck with the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy the rest of the day and week.
Joan

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much Joan, and glad you got a laugh out of it
    : )
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reply by dragonpoet on 31-Jul-2024
    You are most kindly welcome, SS.
    Joan
Comment from Bill Schott
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This poem, Hey Girl, presented with a varied rhyme scheme, gives the readers a chance to see Elvis Peelsly make a couple sexual overtures to some young nana fanana.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    lol thank you Bill. Banana Elvis knows no bounds.
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Comment from Brenda Strauser
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Lol. I love this poem. The picture goes great with tge poem. The poem is so funny, I'm still laughing. Good luck in the contest. Great job. Clever and creative.

 Comment Written 29-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 31-Jul-2024
    Thanks so much, Brenda! Glad you liked Banana Elvis. I might have to make him a recurring character.
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