2024 Japanese Poetry
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8 total reviews
Comment from GWHARGIS
Oh, my goodness. This made me laugh. Poor fly. But the priest did the right thing and used the Word of God to smite his enemy. Very fun poem. Love a little humor in a poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Oh, my goodness. This made me laugh. Poor fly. But the priest did the right thing and used the Word of God to smite his enemy. Very fun poem. Love a little humor in a poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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LoL ... Thank you very much, Gretchen.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from shelley kaye
AHHAHAHAHAHA!!
i didn't see that "not seeing the light" line coming!
great fun gogyohka!!
smooth flow - cool surprise ending - cool pics and colours
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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AHHAHAHAHAHA!!
i didn't see that "not seeing the light" line coming!
great fun gogyohka!!
smooth flow - cool surprise ending - cool pics and colours
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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LoL... Thank you very much, Shelley.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Neonewman
Oh, man! Six-star worthy, but I'm out. Gypsy, this is an incredibly brilliant young lady. I've come to expect this from your work.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Oh, man! Six-star worthy, but I'm out. Gypsy, this is an incredibly brilliant young lady. I've come to expect this from your work.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, Steve.
Gypsy 😊
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My pleasure, Gypsey.
Comment from RJ Heritage
I like your use of metaphor in symbolism of light. Your use of the word 'taunt' and 'nap' perhaps allude to the pestering one undergoes by the enemy when one falls asleep in your walk as a Christian. Well written, and presented.
RJ
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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I like your use of metaphor in symbolism of light. Your use of the word 'taunt' and 'nap' perhaps allude to the pestering one undergoes by the enemy when one falls asleep in your walk as a Christian. Well written, and presented.
RJ
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much, RJ
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Haha! I can understand the priest losing his rag and then I felt sorry for the poor deceased fly. But my favourite line is the detailed and delightful weapon of choice:) Well done, Gypsy! Take care Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Haha! I can understand the priest losing his rag and then I felt sorry for the poor deceased fly. But my favourite line is the detailed and delightful weapon of choice:) Well done, Gypsy! Take care Debbie
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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hahaha.. I am happy you found it humorous, as it's meant to be.
Thank you very much, Debbie.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Ohhhh, now Gypsy...I walked right into that groaner!!! HAHAHAHA!! It's always you quiet ones who can deliver the knock-out punch, isn't it? Just like the fly, no one sees it coming. Absolutely hilarious, I have to admit. I was expecting you to write that the sermon was entitled "Live and Let Live" or "Always Show Compassion" or something...but I love what you did much more! I like this impish side of you!! xoxo
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Ohhhh, now Gypsy...I walked right into that groaner!!! HAHAHAHA!! It's always you quiet ones who can deliver the knock-out punch, isn't it? Just like the fly, no one sees it coming. Absolutely hilarious, I have to admit. I was expecting you to write that the sermon was entitled "Live and Let Live" or "Always Show Compassion" or something...but I love what you did much more! I like this impish side of you!! xoxo
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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LoL I am happy you found it humorous, as it's meant to be.
Thank you very much, Rachelle, I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and kind feedback.
Gypsy 😊
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You're welcome!! My pleasure!! xoxo
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem cleverly combines humor with a touch of irony. The image of the old priest trying to nap while battling a fly with his sermon draft is both amusing and vivid. The final line, "the fly didn't see the light," ties the poem together with a witty twist, suggesting the fly's fate was sealed by its own persistence and the priest's unconventional weapon. The juxtaposition of the mundane with the sacred adds depth to the poem, making it a memorable and engaging read.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Your poem cleverly combines humor with a touch of irony. The image of the old priest trying to nap while battling a fly with his sermon draft is both amusing and vivid. The final line, "the fly didn't see the light," ties the poem together with a witty twist, suggesting the fly's fate was sealed by its own persistence and the priest's unconventional weapon. The juxtaposition of the mundane with the sacred adds depth to the poem, making it a memorable and engaging read.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Exceptional review, thank you!
Gypsy 😊
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. And the fly with its many eyes didn't see what was coming! I like you pun of "didn't see the light" as he wasn't spiritually enlightened by the priest's sermon!
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Lol. And the fly with its many eyes didn't see what was coming! I like you pun of "didn't see the light" as he wasn't spiritually enlightened by the priest's sermon!
Comment Written 26-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Haha... yes, you got it. You always do. Thank you very much, big sister
Marival 😊