A Good Girl
An old dog tries to please her master.13 total reviews
Comment from Aiona
Very good 100-word flash fiction. I didn't see any typos. Good scene setting. The twist at the end, albeit sad, makes a good flash fiction, as there's always a hope-fear-hope-fear dynamic going on in a good story.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Very good 100-word flash fiction. I didn't see any typos. Good scene setting. The twist at the end, albeit sad, makes a good flash fiction, as there's always a hope-fear-hope-fear dynamic going on in a good story.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Neonewman
Awe! Poor Ginger. What a heartwrenching story in only 100 words. I hope Ginger's new owner will treat her well. Maybe the other man was sick and dying or just unable to take care of her. You've created so many emotions for your reviewing audience.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Awe! Poor Ginger. What a heartwrenching story in only 100 words. I hope Ginger's new owner will treat her well. Maybe the other man was sick and dying or just unable to take care of her. You've created so many emotions for your reviewing audience.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for your review!
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My pleasure.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your story. I was surprised by the ending. The story was interesting and well written. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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I enjoyed reading your story. I was surprised by the ending. The story was interesting and well written. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from phill doran
Hello AZS,
This is a clever piece; a different take on things, or at least a different point of view. You have created a very open space for a back story of the reader's choosing, and managed a full picture with plenty of emotion too.
I am sure you have counted, but I make it 100 on the (wet) nose.
Great writing - I hope you are rewarded for your efforts with this piece.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Hello AZS,
This is a clever piece; a different take on things, or at least a different point of view. You have created a very open space for a back story of the reader's choosing, and managed a full picture with plenty of emotion too.
I am sure you have counted, but I make it 100 on the (wet) nose.
Great writing - I hope you are rewarded for your efforts with this piece.
I wish you well with your continued writing.
cheers
phill
Comment Written 29-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from LJbutterfly
I love dog and cat stories, but this one almost has me in tears. That means it was well developed and written and your primary point was made. An owner could no longer care for his "good girl" and handed her off to someone who might find a good owner. An engaging story, told in only a few succinct words. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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I love dog and cat stories, but this one almost has me in tears. That means it was well developed and written and your primary point was made. An owner could no longer care for his "good girl" and handed her off to someone who might find a good owner. An engaging story, told in only a few succinct words. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from jessizero
This almost made me cry. Okay, strike the "almost." This made me cry. I am glad this is fictional, though I know things like this happen every day. Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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This almost made me cry. Okay, strike the "almost." This made me cry. I am glad this is fictional, though I know things like this happen every day. Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from jmdg1954
Noooooooo.
I'm sure it's not the dogs fault! But people/families get a dog and do not realize the effort it takes to train/raise/care/feed etc etc a dog properly. And if you cannot do it properly you shouldn't do it altogether.
In your stories case the man hopefully gave Ginger to a loving family.
Ugh... such a heartbreaking story with a key last line!
Cheers,
John
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Noooooooo.
I'm sure it's not the dogs fault! But people/families get a dog and do not realize the effort it takes to train/raise/care/feed etc etc a dog properly. And if you cannot do it properly you shouldn't do it altogether.
In your stories case the man hopefully gave Ginger to a loving family.
Ugh... such a heartbreaking story with a key last line!
Cheers,
John
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from iDri.Luv.Jesus
Hi, I'm not sure about you listed as a general fiction, but your writing is so nonfictional because I'm a dog owner, and I've spent time with my fury baby like the way you've described in your writing. Your writing is good, but a 5 star take a step more work, like give a nice artwork of a dog and you or something to it, just because reader(s) like myself appreciated some sort of artwork, and not just only words to bring the story across. I wish you all the best!
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Hi, I'm not sure about you listed as a general fiction, but your writing is so nonfictional because I'm a dog owner, and I've spent time with my fury baby like the way you've described in your writing. Your writing is good, but a 5 star take a step more work, like give a nice artwork of a dog and you or something to it, just because reader(s) like myself appreciated some sort of artwork, and not just only words to bring the story across. I wish you all the best!
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Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
Comment from Wendy G
A very sad story. But it happens, and people don't realise how dogs don't understand being abandoned or given to new owners. So confusing for them, and you captured this very well. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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A very sad story. But it happens, and people don't realise how dogs don't understand being abandoned or given to new owners. So confusing for them, and you captured this very well. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Bill Schott
This short story, A Good Girl, has the proper word count and hits an emotional mark with me. I had to put our dog down and it destroyed me. If I were to consider my pet's thoughts, or heard them, I don't think I would have ever recovered. Powerful!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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This short story, A Good Girl, has the proper word count and hits an emotional mark with me. I had to put our dog down and it destroyed me. If I were to consider my pet's thoughts, or heard them, I don't think I would have ever recovered. Powerful!
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much!