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Tough assignment this oneThe sky a vivid hue, its companion
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Comment from
Patty Mazzurco
You did a clever job in conveying colors without naming them outright. You use rich imagery, like "the sky a vivid hue" and "daffodils in the flower bed wave," to paint a colorful picture. Descriptions like "the grassland melts in a soft array" and "the gorgeous bride dressed in lace and veil" are evocative and give readers plenty to visualize. The comparisons of the attendants to "peacocks" and "swanlike" add a nice touch of elegance and movement.
If I had to make a suggestion (I guess that's kind of our quest here lol), it would be to refine the imagery even more, so each description feels more distinct and layered.
The final lines cheekily acknowledge the challenge of the prompt, which adds a playful twist.
Overall, you've done a solid job of making readers imagine colors through detailed descriptions, and your humor about the difficulty of the task adds personality to the piece.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
Patty, thank you for that wonderfully encouraging review. The contest was a challenge
Comment from
Dolly'sPoems
Our eyes are keen to see all the pleasing scenes that inspire us to write and I enjoyed your enthusiasm here in your descriptions, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
Ah, Dolly. You are a magnificent encourager thank you
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