Icy Memory
Not all memories are pleasant8 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A clever write and eye catching graphic choice.
Both facets combine well to create a poem in keeping with the guidelines.
All challenge words have been used, and well.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Shirley
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A clever write and eye catching graphic choice.
Both facets combine well to create a poem in keeping with the guidelines.
All challenge words have been used, and well.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm intrigued by this verse and have read it a few times! My enjoyment is your clear enjoyment, playing with these words and crafting them into your theme, together, of course, with the prompt words. It's imaginative, conveys a strong chill of past memories and is a pleasure to read. Well done and good luck! Debbie
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I'm intrigued by this verse and have read it a few times! My enjoyment is your clear enjoyment, playing with these words and crafting them into your theme, together, of course, with the prompt words. It's imaginative, conveys a strong chill of past memories and is a pleasure to read. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
Comment from Begin Again
When we are decieved or hurt badly, it is difficult to open your heart freely again. Your poem says it perfectly that one feels safer keeping their heart on ice. Good luck!
Smiles, Carol
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When we are decieved or hurt badly, it is difficult to open your heart freely again. Your poem says it perfectly that one feels safer keeping their heart on ice. Good luck!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
We don't always get a choice when it comes to memories, some haunt us and some please us. I think overtime we learn to filter out the bad and remember the good, a fine post, many will identify with this sentiment, love Dolly x
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We don't always get a choice when it comes to memories, some haunt us and some please us. I think overtime we learn to filter out the bad and remember the good, a fine post, many will identify with this sentiment, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
Comment from T.D. Hoitsma
Very unique I enjoyed the read very much. It honestly did give me the chills but still had a strong deliverance. my favorite over all was the last stanza it tied everything together for me.
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Very unique I enjoyed the read very much. It honestly did give me the chills but still had a strong deliverance. my favorite over all was the last stanza it tied everything together for me.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
In your poem, you effectively incorporate the challenge words "graphic," "joy," "death," and "spice" to convey a poignant narrative of loss and emotional turmoil. Your use of "graphic" and "death" intensifies the depiction of sorrow, while "joy" and "spice" add layers of metaphorical contrast to your exploration of grief and memory. The vivid imagery and emotional depth align well with the prompt, making your poem a compelling and insightful response.
Just some thoughts/ideas... either way, amazing!!
1. Line 2: "Ashes to ash" could be "Ashes to ashes" for grammatical consistency.
2. Line 3: The phrase "Decaying in death" might benefit from a slight rephrasing to enhance flow. Consider "Decaying in the wake of death" or "Decaying with death."
3. Line 4: The phrase "From a too trusted breath" could be clearer. You might rephrase it to "From a breath too trusted" for improved readability.
4. Line 5: "Thief of joy; Memories. Just destroy My reveries." This could be streamlined for rhythm. Consider "Thief of joy, memories destroy My reveries."
5. Line 7: "As if it wasn't quite traumatic" might flow better as "As if it weren't quite traumatic."
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In your poem, you effectively incorporate the challenge words "graphic," "joy," "death," and "spice" to convey a poignant narrative of loss and emotional turmoil. Your use of "graphic" and "death" intensifies the depiction of sorrow, while "joy" and "spice" add layers of metaphorical contrast to your exploration of grief and memory. The vivid imagery and emotional depth align well with the prompt, making your poem a compelling and insightful response.
Just some thoughts/ideas... either way, amazing!!
1. Line 2: "Ashes to ash" could be "Ashes to ashes" for grammatical consistency.
2. Line 3: The phrase "Decaying in death" might benefit from a slight rephrasing to enhance flow. Consider "Decaying in the wake of death" or "Decaying with death."
3. Line 4: The phrase "From a too trusted breath" could be clearer. You might rephrase it to "From a breath too trusted" for improved readability.
4. Line 5: "Thief of joy; Memories. Just destroy My reveries." This could be streamlined for rhythm. Consider "Thief of joy, memories destroy My reveries."
5. Line 7: "As if it wasn't quite traumatic" might flow better as "As if it weren't quite traumatic."
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
Comment from Lindsey Russell
This is amazing poem especially when you have given words you must utilize. Great job. You have quite a bit of talent. Thank you for sharing and happy writing!
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This is amazing poem especially when you have given words you must utilize. Great job. You have quite a bit of talent. Thank you for sharing and happy writing!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
As a surface level piece, I really enjoyed it, and could almost imagine it getting stuck in my head like a chorus from a song..................................
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As a surface level piece, I really enjoyed it, and could almost imagine it getting stuck in my head like a chorus from a song..................................
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
