Colors So Bright
True Colors contest entry2 total reviews
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
Your poem captures the vibrant and ever-changing beauty of nature with evocative imagery. Here's some feedback:
Strengths:
1. Imagery: The vivid descriptions of colors, such as "varicolored rainbow" and "twinkling starlight," create a strong visual impact and bring the scenes to life.
2. Rhythm: The poem has a rhythmic flow that enhances the lyrical quality, making it pleasant to read and hear.
3. Contrast: The juxtaposition of colors in various settings--day and night, snowflakes and sunlight--adds depth and richness to the imagery.
One area for improvement is structure. To enhance the poem's flow and impact, consider varying the line length or stanza arrangement. This could create a more dynamic rhythm and keep the reader's attention more effectively.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Your poem captures the vibrant and ever-changing beauty of nature with evocative imagery. Here's some feedback:
Strengths:
1. Imagery: The vivid descriptions of colors, such as "varicolored rainbow" and "twinkling starlight," create a strong visual impact and bring the scenes to life.
2. Rhythm: The poem has a rhythmic flow that enhances the lyrical quality, making it pleasant to read and hear.
3. Contrast: The juxtaposition of colors in various settings--day and night, snowflakes and sunlight--adds depth and richness to the imagery.
One area for improvement is structure. To enhance the poem's flow and impact, consider varying the line length or stanza arrangement. This could create a more dynamic rhythm and keep the reader's attention more effectively.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Dear Patty, thank you for your comments and review.
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
You did a very good job of talking about colors with actually naming any! What a unique contest. I really enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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You did a very good job of talking about colors with actually naming any! What a unique contest. I really enjoyed reading this. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Dear Jodi Ann,thank you for your comments, review. and good luck wishes.