Trapped Together
Keep Us Locked In4 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The picture says it all pretty much. Well, except you did not mention in your authors notes where it came from. The darkness set off the quandry they now felt trapped in. Good writing. Karen
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
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The picture says it all pretty much. Well, except you did not mention in your authors notes where it came from. The darkness set off the quandry they now felt trapped in. Good writing. Karen
Comment Written 10-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2024
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Thanks.
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:-)
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Yes, you never know when a contest lures you into entering with a promise of romance! I think your two are very brave to venture here as they may be trapped forever! Nicely done with your 5-7-5 clearly expressed in dialogue form. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Yes, you never know when a contest lures you into entering with a promise of romance! I think your two are very brave to venture here as they may be trapped forever! Nicely done with your 5-7-5 clearly expressed in dialogue form. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This 5-7-5 romance poem effectively uses humor and playfulness to convey a sense of romantic adventure. Your work is impressive in the following ways:
1. Creative Concept: The idea of a contest being a "trap" and the playful invitation to "get caught together" is both clever and charming. It injects a sense of fun and spontaneity into the poem, which aligns well with the romantic theme.
2. Engaging Tone: The tone is light-hearted and flirtatious, effectively capturing the spirit of romance. The playful dialogue between "Honey" and "Babe" creates an intimate and engaging atmosphere.
3. Concise Expression: The brevity of the 5-7-5 format works well to deliver the message succinctly. The poem's compact structure forces you to distill the essence of the sentiment into a few impactful lines.
**Review of "Honey, This Contest"**
This 5-7-5 romance poem is both playful and engaging. Your work shines in the following ways:
1. **Creative Concept**: The metaphor of the contest as a potential "trap" adds an intriguing twist, and the invitation to "get caught together" brings a romantic and adventurous touch.
2. **Engaging Tone**: The light-hearted, flirtatious tone effectively captures the essence of a romantic relationship, making the poem feel personal and lively.
3. **Effective Use of Format**: The 5-7-5 format is used well to convey a compact, yet impactful message, fitting perfectly with the playful theme.
**Suggestion**: To enhance the imagery slightly, consider replacing "contest" with "challenge" for a more dynamic metaphor. For example:
**Honey, This Challenge**
Could be a trap! Well, Babe, let's
Get caught together!
This change might offer a more vivid and adventurous image, aligning with the playful tone of your poem and make it stand on its own, even without this particular contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This 5-7-5 romance poem effectively uses humor and playfulness to convey a sense of romantic adventure. Your work is impressive in the following ways:
1. Creative Concept: The idea of a contest being a "trap" and the playful invitation to "get caught together" is both clever and charming. It injects a sense of fun and spontaneity into the poem, which aligns well with the romantic theme.
2. Engaging Tone: The tone is light-hearted and flirtatious, effectively capturing the spirit of romance. The playful dialogue between "Honey" and "Babe" creates an intimate and engaging atmosphere.
3. Concise Expression: The brevity of the 5-7-5 format works well to deliver the message succinctly. The poem's compact structure forces you to distill the essence of the sentiment into a few impactful lines.
**Review of "Honey, This Contest"**
This 5-7-5 romance poem is both playful and engaging. Your work shines in the following ways:
1. **Creative Concept**: The metaphor of the contest as a potential "trap" adds an intriguing twist, and the invitation to "get caught together" brings a romantic and adventurous touch.
2. **Engaging Tone**: The light-hearted, flirtatious tone effectively captures the essence of a romantic relationship, making the poem feel personal and lively.
3. **Effective Use of Format**: The 5-7-5 format is used well to convey a compact, yet impactful message, fitting perfectly with the playful theme.
**Suggestion**: To enhance the imagery slightly, consider replacing "contest" with "challenge" for a more dynamic metaphor. For example:
**Honey, This Challenge**
Could be a trap! Well, Babe, let's
Get caught together!
This change might offer a more vivid and adventurous image, aligning with the playful tone of your poem and make it stand on its own, even without this particular contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Wow, this is probably the most comprehensively detailed review I've ever got here. Thank you so very much!
Comment from Jodi Ann Anderson
This is a very clever poem! Haha! It works very well for this short 5-7-5 poem contest. You include a bit of romance with being "trapped" together.
This is a good one!
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This is a very clever poem! Haha! It works very well for this short 5-7-5 poem contest. You include a bit of romance with being "trapped" together.
This is a good one!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you so very much!
