Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

What an excellent poem for your club challenge- with a beautiful picture supporting- your poem's
Message is clear and very true in deed - in the end blind hate knows no bounds- well done! - Alan

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024

Thanks, Alan, for such and encouraging review.
Joan

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Your jisei haiku reminds me of school shootings. Great topic, very timely.

Thank you for participating in the Haiku Club event. Great entry with good syllable count and connection between lines. Good juxtaposition and satori. Beautiful presentation and imagery.

Good job,

Gypsy

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024

Thanks for the nice review, MariVal. Glad you liked it. You picked up the theme well Though any mass shooting at a public area that should be safe works.
Joan

Comment from Lindsey Russell

Excellent

This poem contains so much truth in so few words. I love that and every other aspect of it. Thanks for sharing and happy writing! Good luck with all of your writing endeavors!

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024

I am glad you liked it so much. Thanks for taking the time to read and review.
Joan

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is a good haiku. I hate the thought of violence in any place. Bullets are designed to cause pain and death. If not of a human for some innocent creature. I can't understand man need for violence.

 Comment Written 21-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024

I can't either, Beth. Thanks a lot for the review.
Joan