Love is in the air
A poem about the aversion to love16 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Very cute. I liked the flow of the poem.I review one for one. You reviewed me, but I am still unpacking boxes. So, I am slow returning the review. I have lots of different styles and categories, so you can poke around to find something you like. Karen
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Very cute. I liked the flow of the poem.I review one for one. You reviewed me, but I am still unpacking boxes. So, I am slow returning the review. I have lots of different styles and categories, so you can poke around to find something you like. Karen
Comment Written 28-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
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Ouch. Cute means I have a lot of work to do. Actually, it should be yes, I have a lot of work to do. I wrote it in eight minutes, so there was no real effort. Sorry to disappoint.
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Aha, now all is revealed. sweetie pie I have written stuff
in minutes that everyone ooh and ahhed over like I was all that. And then slaved for days over something I thought was perfection and no one wanted to read it. Fate is fickle and so is any artistic endeavor. Cute also means clever. Karen
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Aha, me thinks the lady is too smart for her own good. Thank you for the honest perspective. I worked for weeks on "For I Had Known Her". The grammar and punctuation still isn't right to me.
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I will check that out. Read "lorelie" that was me being bloody.
Comment from Neonewman
You have delivered a well-crafted, romantic piece. Relationships allude me; I simply no longer have the time. Thank you for sharing, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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You have delivered a well-crafted, romantic piece. Relationships allude me; I simply no longer have the time. Thank you for sharing, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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You are the man,Steve.
Comment from jessizero
I'm not sure, but should "shutter" be "shudder"? I really enjoyed your poem and its rhymes. Thank you for sharing this poem, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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I'm not sure, but should "shutter" be "shudder"? I really enjoyed your poem and its rhymes. Thank you for sharing this poem, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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See.
Comment from Boogienights
Im so glad youre not really that way! Seriously, love is probably the most wonderful feeling in the world, and yes, you do give up a part of yourself, but you also gain something. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Im so glad youre not really that way! Seriously, love is probably the most wonderful feeling in the world, and yes, you do give up a part of yourself, but you also gain something. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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What do you gain?
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A lifetime of someone being your best friend.
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Or break your heart and be a lifetime enemy.
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Oh that stuff. Lol. Boogie nights I saw that movie. Not a lot of best friend scenes. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This poem captures the delicate balance between vulnerability and independence with striking clarity. The imagery of the heart and soul navigating an uncertain path creates a vivid sense of emotional journey. The tension between the desire for connection and the fear of losing one's autonomy is poignantly conveyed, particularly in lines like "My autonomy will be erased." The repetition of "Noooooo" at the end adds a powerful, personal touch, highlighting the speaker's deep-seated apprehension. For a touch more depth, consider expanding on how the speaker's autonomy plays a role in their emotional landscape or adding a contrasting moment of hope or resolution.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This poem captures the delicate balance between vulnerability and independence with striking clarity. The imagery of the heart and soul navigating an uncertain path creates a vivid sense of emotional journey. The tension between the desire for connection and the fear of losing one's autonomy is poignantly conveyed, particularly in lines like "My autonomy will be erased." The repetition of "Noooooo" at the end adds a powerful, personal touch, highlighting the speaker's deep-seated apprehension. For a touch more depth, consider expanding on how the speaker's autonomy plays a role in their emotional landscape or adding a contrasting moment of hope or resolution.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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So a poem is like a story, I should try a little harder.
Comment from Sally Law
Hello, Eean! I so enjoyed your free-flowing love poem. One cannot be in love without falling headlong into it. My view of love anyway.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sally :))
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Hello, Eean! I so enjoyed your free-flowing love poem. One cannot be in love without falling headlong into it. My view of love anyway.
Sending you my best today as always.
Sally :))
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you. I agree.
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
Haha. I detect the 'tongue in cheek' in this!
'The light of my feet
Ne'er scorched by love's heat' - very original.
Some good, natural rhyming. See - you ARE a poet.
One little observation. In your description, should it be 'aversion', as opposed 'eversion'.
Overall, I enjoyed reading. Please write more poetry :)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Haha. I detect the 'tongue in cheek' in this!
'The light of my feet
Ne'er scorched by love's heat' - very original.
Some good, natural rhyming. See - you ARE a poet.
One little observation. In your description, should it be 'aversion', as opposed 'eversion'.
Overall, I enjoyed reading. Please write more poetry :)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Will fix and thank you. I will.
Comment from Barry Penfold
I quite liked this. Something different as a love poem and image also was different but relevant. Thanks for sharing and I hope you have a most wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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I quite liked this. Something different as a love poem and image also was different but relevant. Thanks for sharing and I hope you have a most wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you.
Comment from nomi338
As a young man in the early 70s I had an overwhelming crush on Florence Ballard of the Motown Group the Supremes. On a blind date I was introduced to a beautiful young woman who could easily have been MS Ballard's twin. While we were dancing she spontaneously kissed me, and I was immediately transported. I wound up marrying someone else, but a large piece of me heart will always belong to her.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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As a young man in the early 70s I had an overwhelming crush on Florence Ballard of the Motown Group the Supremes. On a blind date I was introduced to a beautiful young woman who could easily have been MS Ballard's twin. While we were dancing she spontaneously kissed me, and I was immediately transported. I wound up marrying someone else, but a large piece of me heart will always belong to her.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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I get that. Thank for Sharing
Comment from Dawn Munro
I'm smiling. I cheated and read your notes before I read the poem. :)) Methinks your notes are fabricated. << vast understatement.
I enjoyed this very much.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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I'm smiling. I cheated and read your notes before I read the poem. :)) Methinks your notes are fabricated. << vast understatement.
I enjoyed this very much.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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You think?
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:)