Some May
Today's thought17 total reviews
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
So true, this poem is!
Our earthly humiliations don't matter at the Pearly Gates! I love how you get your message across! God knows you and your true worth. Maddy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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So true, this poem is!
Our earthly humiliations don't matter at the Pearly Gates! I love how you get your message across! God knows you and your true worth. Maddy
Comment Written 02-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2024
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What a wonderful reply. Thank you seems insufficient, but it's all I can offer.
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
I really enjoyed your poem! It strikes a chord with its exploration of life's ups and downs, and the idea that everyone's worth is ultimately measured beyond this life is both comforting and thought-provoking.
I love how you weave in different personal experiences, from the iconic Marilyn and Mickey Mouse to the struggles and successes people face. It feels very relatable and grounded. The line about "copping one on their arse" adds a bit of humor and authenticity, making the poem feel real and down-to-earth.
The closing lines are especially powerful, suggesting that despite life's challenges and injustices, there's a fairer way things are balanced in the end. It's a comforting thought and a nice way to wrap up the poem. Overall, it's a heartfelt and reflective piece that resonates well.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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I really enjoyed your poem! It strikes a chord with its exploration of life's ups and downs, and the idea that everyone's worth is ultimately measured beyond this life is both comforting and thought-provoking.
I love how you weave in different personal experiences, from the iconic Marilyn and Mickey Mouse to the struggles and successes people face. It feels very relatable and grounded. The line about "copping one on their arse" adds a bit of humor and authenticity, making the poem feel real and down-to-earth.
The closing lines are especially powerful, suggesting that despite life's challenges and injustices, there's a fairer way things are balanced in the end. It's a comforting thought and a nice way to wrap up the poem. Overall, it's a heartfelt and reflective piece that resonates well.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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What a truly fantastic review. In actual fact all this happened more than sixty years ago and I'm not sure if I really recall the incident or I just remember the many times the story has been told in the decades since.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Bob
Your poem hits me hard. I am a brand new Christian who do to disabilities can't go to church.
So, I pray by myself. I really feel close to God I mostly pray to help give me the strength to help my grandson who is really troubled. And I ask for blessings for my family and friends. I also ask that my own soul be blessed
Less than a year ago, I was an agnostic, which means I wasn't sure there was a God and I wasn't sure there was not a God
I had a death experience where my heart stopped 7 to 8 times and I had to be intubated as well. I don't remember any of that I was unconscious. But I think that's the reason I turned the guy because He saved me for some reason and He saved me many times before
I was very lucky in many ways, had a good job and a nice husband, liked to play chess and paint or writing poetry
In spite of all the blessings I have, I have a lot of curses too. My physical body is so bad as far as health issues. go
I'm sorry to be taking so much of this this review talking about myself.
I thought you did a really good job showing that people who are dealt a great hand in life need to also repent for their sins. Heaven's Gate is not going to admit them for the good job they had or the fact that they took every honor in high school. Those were some of your examples and you chose Mickey Mouse and Marilyn Monroe. I think that Mickey Mouse is due to the playful side of people which is again not anything that will count at Heaven's Gate.
Now, Marilyn was a really good example of someone who had it all. They put her death down to suicide, but I think it was murder because she slept with a president and his brother and they might've blabbed and then she was a security risk.
Here. Are you sure you didn't mean cupped or capped! Copped doesn't seem to be right here
"An' daily copped one on their arse'"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Hi, Bob
Your poem hits me hard. I am a brand new Christian who do to disabilities can't go to church.
So, I pray by myself. I really feel close to God I mostly pray to help give me the strength to help my grandson who is really troubled. And I ask for blessings for my family and friends. I also ask that my own soul be blessed
Less than a year ago, I was an agnostic, which means I wasn't sure there was a God and I wasn't sure there was not a God
I had a death experience where my heart stopped 7 to 8 times and I had to be intubated as well. I don't remember any of that I was unconscious. But I think that's the reason I turned the guy because He saved me for some reason and He saved me many times before
I was very lucky in many ways, had a good job and a nice husband, liked to play chess and paint or writing poetry
In spite of all the blessings I have, I have a lot of curses too. My physical body is so bad as far as health issues. go
I'm sorry to be taking so much of this this review talking about myself.
I thought you did a really good job showing that people who are dealt a great hand in life need to also repent for their sins. Heaven's Gate is not going to admit them for the good job they had or the fact that they took every honor in high school. Those were some of your examples and you chose Mickey Mouse and Marilyn Monroe. I think that Mickey Mouse is due to the playful side of people which is again not anything that will count at Heaven's Gate.
Now, Marilyn was a really good example of someone who had it all. They put her death down to suicide, but I think it was murder because she slept with a president and his brother and they might've blabbed and then she was a security risk.
Here. Are you sure you didn't mean cupped or capped! Copped doesn't seem to be right here
"An' daily copped one on their arse'"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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Allow me to explain. In this text, 'copped' is derived from Australian slang. It means received. So copping possibly implies a 'strapping from Dad across the bum.' Parental disciplining. As a perfect child it never happened of course. The one exception being the time my twin brother and I were caught in the midst of an egg fight. We had a poultry farm and my brother, and I were at opposing ends of the shed throwing eggs at each other. I think we threw dozens of eggs. At each other. Dad wasn't pleased. And on that day, we sure 'copped one, or more accurately, plenty across the arse. Don't quite remember if it was a strap, or Dad's bare hand. And I'm sure it hurt. We didn't ever have another egg war.
Comment from Neonewman
Yep! This line was me-An' daily copped one on their arse.
This is a well-thought-out piece with a great message, my friend. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Yep! This line was me-An' daily copped one on their arse.
This is a well-thought-out piece with a great message, my friend. Thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you for reading. Think those smacks made me who I am today.
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My pleasure, Bob, and I know mine did. They need to bring them back.
Comment from Boogienights
Your very well written poem gives me a lot of hope. Honestly, im not sure what my score will be at heavens gate, but l hope its better tgen the one l give myself. Thanks fir sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Your very well written poem gives me a lot of hope. Honestly, im not sure what my score will be at heavens gate, but l hope its better tgen the one l give myself. Thanks fir sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Don't be too hard on yourself. A conscience suggests you follow a set of guidelines. Maybe it's time you relaxed them a little.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed reading your poem. I like the way you set up the poem with different situations and what God wants of us, love, kindness and compassion. Great job.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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I enjoyed reading your poem. I like the way you set up the poem with different situations and what God wants of us, love, kindness and compassion. Great job.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Thank you for such a delightful and kind review. I really appreciate your comment.
Comment from nomi338
Once you learn the rules of conduct for living a fairly blame free life, the ball is in your court. How you dribble the ball and shoot your shot will determine the major arc of the rest of your life. What you choose to do will be your choice and yours alone, so the praise or the blame will also be yours exclusively.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Once you learn the rules of conduct for living a fairly blame free life, the ball is in your court. How you dribble the ball and shoot your shot will determine the major arc of the rest of your life. What you choose to do will be your choice and yours alone, so the praise or the blame will also be yours exclusively.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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I think this may well be the best constructed reply I've ever received. Your words, phrasing and advice carry all the hallmarks of the Marist Brothers of my schooling days. Any chance you're Brother Anselm reincarnated. He had two great talents, offering advice and wielding the cane. Truly a great reply. Thank you.
Comment from Natureschild
The informal, conversational tone makes your poem accessible and engaging. Phrases like "copped one on their arse" add a touch of authenticity and rawness. The consistent rhyme scheme (ABCB) lends a musical quality to most of the of poem. 'Some may be disillusioned, life hasn't quite flowed their way' is inconsistent with the other stanzas and broke the rhythm for me. Despite this, I enjoyed reading it. - Terry
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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The informal, conversational tone makes your poem accessible and engaging. Phrases like "copped one on their arse" add a touch of authenticity and rawness. The consistent rhyme scheme (ABCB) lends a musical quality to most of the of poem. 'Some may be disillusioned, life hasn't quite flowed their way' is inconsistent with the other stanzas and broke the rhythm for me. Despite this, I enjoyed reading it. - Terry
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Terry, your review is greatly appreciated. In the next couple of days, I'll go back over it. I'll attempt to adjust the line you pointed out. Again I repeat my gratitude for such good criticism.
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It's my pleasure, I hope it helps.
Comment from tfawcus
No matter what successes or failures we perceive in ourselves or in others, the only tally that really matters is the one that you succinctly sum up in these lines:
"Just remember your worth ain't determined
Till you arrive at Heaven's front gate"
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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No matter what successes or failures we perceive in ourselves or in others, the only tally that really matters is the one that you succinctly sum up in these lines:
"Just remember your worth ain't determined
Till you arrive at Heaven's front gate"
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Terry, it's always good to get reviews from the better writers on site. You certainly fall into that category. Another really great review.
Comment from Barry Penfold
Very good indeed. I had a smile on my face as I read your entertaining lines. Thanks for sharing and I hope you go well in the competition.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Very good indeed. I had a smile on my face as I read your entertaining lines. Thanks for sharing and I hope you go well in the competition.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2024
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Barry, your kind words are appreciated. I'm delighted to see you found it entertaining. As a writer, that is always my aim. Thank you again
