The House on the Hill - Play
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The New Neighbor "Mystery
2 total reviews
Comment from Lindsey Russell
Again, a very good scene. Keep on writing. You have real talent. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next scene you post. Best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Again, a very good scene. Keep on writing. You have real talent. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next scene you post. Best wishes to you.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your kind feedback! I appreciate it.
-Tirzah
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Tirzah
Do you realize how long this is? I think a lot of people are going to skip it just due to its length. I almost did.
I suggest segmenting qthis act into multiple posts. Otherwise, you will not get many reviews.
I like Emmaline. I'm thinking that the guy next-door might be carrying body parts in his suitcases
So, Connie may be absolutely right that they have to move to be safe
At least, that is what she's thinking. I'm sure. I might think that way about it too.
Being a woman and being a man are totally different. Women don't run out of gas. They make sure they don't run out of gas by filling the tank before it's empty. A man might let it get empty because he feels that he's not in danger when he hast to walk to a gas station to get a can of gas
I enjoyed reading your script
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Hi, Tirzah
Do you realize how long this is? I think a lot of people are going to skip it just due to its length. I almost did.
I suggest segmenting qthis act into multiple posts. Otherwise, you will not get many reviews.
I like Emmaline. I'm thinking that the guy next-door might be carrying body parts in his suitcases
So, Connie may be absolutely right that they have to move to be safe
At least, that is what she's thinking. I'm sure. I might think that way about it too.
Being a woman and being a man are totally different. Women don't run out of gas. They make sure they don't run out of gas by filling the tank before it's empty. A man might let it get empty because he feels that he's not in danger when he hast to walk to a gas station to get a can of gas
I enjoyed reading your script
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your feedback. These are 1st rough drafts of two plays, so I'm more interested in does the story work? Do the characters make sense? The more detailed editing comes later. Thank you again!
Tirzah