Liberation
A Free verse poem about the constraints of freedom7 total reviews
Comment from samantha0930
Sometimes having the freedom to do anything is too open ended and undefined to know where to start thinking of what to do next, and then you're mind wants to try to create rules for yourself to make it more comfortable and give you something to follow. This is a nice poem :) There's a lot of blank lines after the end of your poem, but I suppose you could have done that on purpose because you wanted to because you had the freedom to do so, considering the context of the poem and the formatting of your written lines.
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Sometimes having the freedom to do anything is too open ended and undefined to know where to start thinking of what to do next, and then you're mind wants to try to create rules for yourself to make it more comfortable and give you something to follow. This is a nice poem :) There's a lot of blank lines after the end of your poem, but I suppose you could have done that on purpose because you wanted to because you had the freedom to do so, considering the context of the poem and the formatting of your written lines.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
Comment from mrsmajor
Congratulations on your first post! I wish you well with your writing.
I happen to enjoy, writing, and yes reading, poetry using the free verse form...It doesn't allow one to scribble down anything and call it a free verse form poem, but I do feel free to ignore the mechanics of forms that require specific rhyming and structure.
Such a writer isn't any better than one that prefers forms like the Sonnet, which I also happen to enjoy using.
There are many poetry forms that are difficult, and yet they give the writer the chance to speak, through their pen, and I enjoy doing all of that.
Somehow, though, I am myself, no matter what the form is that I might use when creating a post that some might enjoy reading...I am who I am all the time, that's what makes me free...Thanks for sharing your thought with us...Have a Wonderful Day!
Warmly,
Victoria
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Congratulations on your first post! I wish you well with your writing.
I happen to enjoy, writing, and yes reading, poetry using the free verse form...It doesn't allow one to scribble down anything and call it a free verse form poem, but I do feel free to ignore the mechanics of forms that require specific rhyming and structure.
Such a writer isn't any better than one that prefers forms like the Sonnet, which I also happen to enjoy using.
There are many poetry forms that are difficult, and yet they give the writer the chance to speak, through their pen, and I enjoy doing all of that.
Somehow, though, I am myself, no matter what the form is that I might use when creating a post that some might enjoy reading...I am who I am all the time, that's what makes me free...Thanks for sharing your thought with us...Have a Wonderful Day!
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
Comment from royowen
It's only an imposition if one finds meter and rhyme difficult, and you're right, it doesn't stop one from writing, Some find writing in rhyme and structured meter relatively difficult, but there are some really good free writers write great poetry, and this is good, welcome to FS, good luck, blessings Roy
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It's only an imposition if one finds meter and rhyme difficult, and you're right, it doesn't stop one from writing, Some find writing in rhyme and structured meter relatively difficult, but there are some really good free writers write great poetry, and this is good, welcome to FS, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on your first milestone post! I liked your free verse for the poetry contest. Your author's notes were great, as well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Congratulations on your first milestone post! I liked your free verse for the poetry contest. Your author's notes were great, as well. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you! I really appreciate the feedback!
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Jonny. I hope you are well
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Yes, people who ride in Freeverse either can't right and made her rhyme or they're so brilliant they make it work
I used to write Freeverse, but now I have trouble writing it and sometimes even reading it. Now, my mind thinks in rhyme and meter.
This contest is fun because some of the story and novelist writers can just put a little story together, Call it a poem and post it into this contest.
You didn't do that Your poem is fine and humorous and is appropriate for this contest
Here I think it's clearer to say forcing my mind
I think you were trying to say that no rules and no structures are forcing you to conform
" No rules, no structure,
Forces my mind to conform. "
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Hi, Jonny. I hope you are well
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Yes, people who ride in Freeverse either can't right and made her rhyme or they're so brilliant they make it work
I used to write Freeverse, but now I have trouble writing it and sometimes even reading it. Now, my mind thinks in rhyme and meter.
This contest is fun because some of the story and novelist writers can just put a little story together, Call it a poem and post it into this contest.
You didn't do that Your poem is fine and humorous and is appropriate for this contest
Here I think it's clearer to say forcing my mind
I think you were trying to say that no rules and no structures are forcing you to conform
" No rules, no structure,
Forces my mind to conform. "
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the feedback. I believe you are correct, it should have read, forcing my mind to conform. That has a much better flow to it. Thanks again
Comment from RJ Heritage
This is so true, much so about life in general. It forces you to step away from a structure to which you have become accustom. Very well put and cleverly written poem. Than you for sharing.
RJ
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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This is so true, much so about life in general. It forces you to step away from a structure to which you have become accustom. Very well put and cleverly written poem. Than you for sharing.
RJ
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Congrats on your first post! I love this. Your poem beautifully captures the liberation from traditional poetic forms! I like that you seem to enjoy the freedom to write without constraints. The way you structured this seems to add to the theme of liberation! Well done!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Congrats on your first post! I love this. Your poem beautifully captures the liberation from traditional poetic forms! I like that you seem to enjoy the freedom to write without constraints. The way you structured this seems to add to the theme of liberation! Well done!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you Michael.