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Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear! This is way too hormonally charged for me. But that's what we can expect from teens. You got me feeling sorry for Wayne and then he becomes the hero. Yay. Great dialogue which is what I hope for in a script.
The formatting is probably off because you chose the Short Story option, not the Post a Script option under the Write Menu. Once I paste into the Posting area, I always do a Shift-Ctrl-Paste to not carry any odd characters into it from my document. Then I have to reformat and add spaces and blank lines.
Hope you can get it fixed. Maybe you can ask Tom to move it into the Script category.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Oh dear! This is way too hormonally charged for me. But that's what we can expect from teens. You got me feeling sorry for Wayne and then he becomes the hero. Yay. Great dialogue which is what I hope for in a script.
The formatting is probably off because you chose the Short Story option, not the Post a Script option under the Write Menu. Once I paste into the Posting area, I always do a Shift-Ctrl-Paste to not carry any odd characters into it from my document. Then I have to reformat and add spaces and blank lines.
Hope you can get it fixed. Maybe you can ask Tom to move it into the Script category.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thanks
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I can tell you that FanStory messes with my sentences, my spacing. And chops stuff up just for fun. Copying entirely ready from another site works best. Interesting start. Karen
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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I can tell you that FanStory messes with my sentences, my spacing. And chops stuff up just for fun. Copying entirely ready from another site works best. Interesting start. Karen
Comment Written 01-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2024
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It was formatted using industry software. I then copied it to there site and @&$)) there it is.
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
Hi Eean. Sorry I've not been too active of late. There's been a couple of bereavements lately (not close family).
Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your script. I found it lively, engaging and authentic, leaving the reader eager to know how the various relationships develop. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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Hi Eean. Sorry I've not been too active of late. There's been a couple of bereavements lately (not close family).
Anyway, I really enjoyed reading your script. I found it lively, engaging and authentic, leaving the reader eager to know how the various relationships develop. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
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You were who I was hoping to hear from. Thank you and keep your head up.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I'm sorry, I'm useless with computers but it's a shame because the dialogue desperately needs to be properly spaced and more legible. The work that's gone into this is impressive and the characters emerge realistically and engagingly. But the tightness of the format, sadly does no favours. I found one edit below:
the shadows (recede) to the tree line
Nevertheless an excellent, fun screenplay. Catherine is my favourite. Well done! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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I'm sorry, I'm useless with computers but it's a shame because the dialogue desperately needs to be properly spaced and more legible. The work that's gone into this is impressive and the characters emerge realistically and engagingly. But the tightness of the format, sadly does no favours. I found one edit below:
the shadows (recede) to the tree line
Nevertheless an excellent, fun screenplay. Catherine is my favourite. Well done! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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After my third attempt I gave up because, after saving it, nothing changed. Thank you for your review.
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After my third attempt I gave up because, after saving it, nothing changed. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi,EeanBlack
How the heck are you?
Even though it wasn't formatted the way you wanted it to be, I thought it was fine. I could always tell who was talking and what the situation was. You made that clear
I found no errors. I look for them so congratulations on that.
I guess Bobby cheated on Olivia and he's paid his price. But I have a feeling he's not done with her.
Is there going to be another chapter this or a sequel? Because it sounds like Olivia and Wayne are going to get together. Which Wayne has been pining for
You finished before Catherine got together with Steve I think it was towards the end that I saw some inkling of that.
The characters seemed real to life, very lively. I would say this whole write is kind of cheerful. Even though you know they went through hell at the beginning or at least Olivia did.
I enjoyed reading your script
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Hi,EeanBlack
How the heck are you?
Even though it wasn't formatted the way you wanted it to be, I thought it was fine. I could always tell who was talking and what the situation was. You made that clear
I found no errors. I look for them so congratulations on that.
I guess Bobby cheated on Olivia and he's paid his price. But I have a feeling he's not done with her.
Is there going to be another chapter this or a sequel? Because it sounds like Olivia and Wayne are going to get together. Which Wayne has been pining for
You finished before Catherine got together with Steve I think it was towards the end that I saw some inkling of that.
The characters seemed real to life, very lively. I would say this whole write is kind of cheerful. Even though you know they went through hell at the beginning or at least Olivia did.
I enjoyed reading your script
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Keeping it cheerful is a challenge considering where I want to go with it. I want to show something impossible, true love. Which characters? You are right on all of your assumptions. Bobby is not finished. Thank you very much. To be a true screenplay, it must end up to between 90 to 120 pages. It won't be a sequel, but more of a continuance.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
A great descriptive setting. The relationship between the sisters is precious wouldn't we all love to have a relationship with our sister like that? I like how she stood up to Bobby, another good example.
Well done.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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A great descriptive setting. The relationship between the sisters is precious wouldn't we all love to have a relationship with our sister like that? I like how she stood up to Bobby, another good example.
Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thanks
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Good topic
Comment from Gunner Lil
A very good storyline. Young adult theme with good action and emotion.
An easy read that does read more like a chapter from a novel than a screenplay but that's just this reader.
Could Steve really put a hole in the wall with his fist?
Most High Schools, even built in the 1950's would have cider block walls for their hallways.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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A very good storyline. Young adult theme with good action and emotion.
An easy read that does read more like a chapter from a novel than a screenplay but that's just this reader.
Could Steve really put a hole in the wall with his fist?
Most High Schools, even built in the 1950's would have cider block walls for their hallways.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Read it as a stupid comedy. My brother is Steve and yes he did. It was plaster and built in 1936. The school was closed in 1997. Thank you for you review.
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Read it as a stupid comedy. My brother is Steve and yes he did. It was plaster and built in 1936. The school was closed in 1997. Thank you for you review.
Comment from F. William Lester
I liked this. I've never written a screenplay but had someone who did in a writing group I was part of. She wrote very good screenplays and from reading hers, this looks good to me. As far as the software is concerned, you might try the "advanced" setting for editing instead of the basic. It works for me with Word. Of course, script writing software is more specialized than this software, so my best guess is cut and paste, select review (I think that's what it's called - where you can submit it, but no one else can see it), and see what it looks like. Then go back and fix it manually. Good work. I thought the interaction and dialogue was well done, spot on. Thanks for sharing it. Have a great day and stay well.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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I liked this. I've never written a screenplay but had someone who did in a writing group I was part of. She wrote very good screenplays and from reading hers, this looks good to me. As far as the software is concerned, you might try the "advanced" setting for editing instead of the basic. It works for me with Word. Of course, script writing software is more specialized than this software, so my best guess is cut and paste, select review (I think that's what it's called - where you can submit it, but no one else can see it), and see what it looks like. Then go back and fix it manually. Good work. I thought the interaction and dialogue was well done, spot on. Thanks for sharing it. Have a great day and stay well.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Did all that with no luck. I fixed it manually and when saved it went back to this. ?????? Lol
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Grin and bear it, I guess. It's well beyond my skill level. As you've shown here, a good sense of humor may be all we have to rely on. Hope things eventually work out. Have a great day.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
This made me laugh: "Oh my god, today is going to be the worst day of my life.
MRS. JOHNSON
I thought that was yesterday sweetie.
Catherine sticks her head out from the kitchen.
CATHERINE
No mother. The day before." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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This made me laugh: "Oh my god, today is going to be the worst day of my life.
MRS. JOHNSON
I thought that was yesterday sweetie.
Catherine sticks her head out from the kitchen.
CATHERINE
No mother. The day before." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you. I hope I figure out the formatting issues.