Immersed
Immerse yourself in the river.13 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. As I read, I felt as if I were sitting the bank and watching the river flow by. I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. As I read, I felt as if I were sitting the bank and watching the river flow by. I enjoyed reading. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 15-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for the nice review!
Comment from June Sargent
I do love the sound of water - a bubbling brook, a flowing stream, a waterfall, crashing waves - or even raindrops on a roof. The picture you painted of sutting by a river is serene and relaxing. A lullaby from nature . Lovely entry for the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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I do love the sound of water - a bubbling brook, a flowing stream, a waterfall, crashing waves - or even raindrops on a roof. The picture you painted of sutting by a river is serene and relaxing. A lullaby from nature . Lovely entry for the contest.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much June! I really appreciate your review!
Comment from zanya
Yes Nature soothes our spirits -its impact so effectively portrayed here in this poem narrated in beautiful imagery 'Immersed in nature's lullaby,'and a great pic
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Yes Nature soothes our spirits -its impact so effectively portrayed here in this poem narrated in beautiful imagery 'Immersed in nature's lullaby,'and a great pic
Comment Written 25-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2024
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem! I really appreciate it!
Comment from gansach
I love rivers. Your photo is great and illustrates your poem nicely. It has a good presentation, a relaxing, easy lilt to the words, so descriptive and soothing. Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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I love rivers. Your photo is great and illustrates your poem nicely. It has a good presentation, a relaxing, easy lilt to the words, so descriptive and soothing. Well done!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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I love the way you describe my poem! Thanks for the wonderful comments!
Comment from Neonewman
I enjoyed this peaceful piece you have crafted, my friend. I agree, as mountain streams are my favorite. Thank you for sharing your talent.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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I enjoyed this peaceful piece you have crafted, my friend. I agree, as mountain streams are my favorite. Thank you for sharing your talent.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 24-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much Steve! I really appreciate it!
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My pleasure, Jodi.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Between the poem and the photo I am ready to find a river to dip my toes into! This is an excellent entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Between the poem and the photo I am ready to find a river to dip my toes into! This is an excellent entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thanks Marilyn! I really appreciate your review and kind comments!
Comment from Begin Again
Ever since I was a young girl the water has been a constant lure for me where I can sit peacefully and think. A place to let my sorrows go or a place to lift up my prayers to the heavens. Your poem takes me there. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Ever since I was a young girl the water has been a constant lure for me where I can sit peacefully and think. A place to let my sorrows go or a place to lift up my prayers to the heavens. Your poem takes me there. Well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much for the nice review Carol! It means a lot!
Comment from Patty Mazzurco
This poem creates a serene and immersive experience through its evocative imagery and soothing rhythm. Your work shines in the following ways:
1. Imagery and Atmosphere: The imagery of the river as a lullaby and its "calming rhythm" effectively establishes a peaceful and tranquil atmosphere. The descriptions of the "blissful crystal water" and "peaceful trickles" enhance the sensory experience, drawing the reader into the scene.
2. Engaging Language: The use of phrases like "zen encasing lingerings" and "natural euphoric high" conveys a deep sense of relaxation and connection with nature. The language is both elegant and vivid, contributing to the poem's overall calming effect.
3. Emotional Resonance: The poem captures the essence of finding solace and rejuvenation by the water, with lines like "Immersed in nature's lullaby" beautifully summarizing the emotional depth of the experience.
Suggestion: To enhance the flow and cohesion, consider slightly adjusting the rhythm or structure to create a more seamless reading experience. For example:
A Lullaby, the River Sings
The calming rhythm soothes the mind,
A zen encasing gentle winds,
The blissful crystal water winds,
It lures me with its soothing rush.
At water's edge, my toes will brush,
The flowing water closes eyes,
My body breathes the water's breath,
A natural euphoric high.
Enticing life, repelling death,
Immersed in nature's lullaby.
Your poem beautifully evokes the tranquility and rejuvenation found in nature. The lyrical quality and vivid imagery create a powerful sense of calm and immersion, making it a truly soothing and reflective piece.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This poem creates a serene and immersive experience through its evocative imagery and soothing rhythm. Your work shines in the following ways:
1. Imagery and Atmosphere: The imagery of the river as a lullaby and its "calming rhythm" effectively establishes a peaceful and tranquil atmosphere. The descriptions of the "blissful crystal water" and "peaceful trickles" enhance the sensory experience, drawing the reader into the scene.
2. Engaging Language: The use of phrases like "zen encasing lingerings" and "natural euphoric high" conveys a deep sense of relaxation and connection with nature. The language is both elegant and vivid, contributing to the poem's overall calming effect.
3. Emotional Resonance: The poem captures the essence of finding solace and rejuvenation by the water, with lines like "Immersed in nature's lullaby" beautifully summarizing the emotional depth of the experience.
Suggestion: To enhance the flow and cohesion, consider slightly adjusting the rhythm or structure to create a more seamless reading experience. For example:
A Lullaby, the River Sings
The calming rhythm soothes the mind,
A zen encasing gentle winds,
The blissful crystal water winds,
It lures me with its soothing rush.
At water's edge, my toes will brush,
The flowing water closes eyes,
My body breathes the water's breath,
A natural euphoric high.
Enticing life, repelling death,
Immersed in nature's lullaby.
Your poem beautifully evokes the tranquility and rejuvenation found in nature. The lyrical quality and vivid imagery create a powerful sense of calm and immersion, making it a truly soothing and reflective piece.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much for the lovely review and suggestions! I really appreciate it!
Comment from Lindsey Russell
I love poetry regarding the beauty of nature. This is so well written as well. Thanks for sharing and happy writing! Best wishes and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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I love poetry regarding the beauty of nature. This is so well written as well. Thanks for sharing and happy writing! Best wishes and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind comments! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review!
Comment from Daylily
This is lovely. We used to have property with ten acres of woods where we had winding trails to ride our horses plus a stream that flowed through it. Thank you for prompting the memory!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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This is lovely. We used to have property with ten acres of woods where we had winding trails to ride our horses plus a stream that flowed through it. Thank you for prompting the memory!
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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I really appreciate the six stars! Thank you so much for the exceptional review!