Dodie Rae
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Support"A young woman unwilling to submit to abuse.
12 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'd already read and reviewed the first chapters, but I've read them again so it's all fresh. This is really good, Steve. I can just imagine what is going through Dodie Ray is thinking. She is now a new avenger! I hope she is careful and heeds her grandmother's warning. But somehow, I doubt she will. Loved this chapter. I'm off to read the next chapter. :) Sandra
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
I'd already read and reviewed the first chapters, but I've read them again so it's all fresh. This is really good, Steve. I can just imagine what is going through Dodie Ray is thinking. She is now a new avenger! I hope she is careful and heeds her grandmother's warning. But somehow, I doubt she will. Loved this chapter. I'm off to read the next chapter. :) Sandra
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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This has been a fun journey for me. I have at least a three book series in mind, probably more. Thank you for reviewing, Sandra.
God bless.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Dodie Rae the Avenger. I see the male population in that town dwindling down. Dodie doesn't give second chances. You beat on your family That can't defend itself? She makes sure you can't either. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
Dodie Rae the Avenger. I see the male population in that town dwindling down. Dodie doesn't give second chances. You beat on your family That can't defend itself? She makes sure you can't either. Karen
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2024
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Yeah! I'm loving this character, she tells me where to go with this story. Thank you for another excellent review, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
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I will eventually read all your stuff. Sometimes the story just borrows my fingers, and I have little awareness of what I am writing. Weird huh? :-)
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It's not weird at all; I love that part of the craft. Dodie Rae takes the reigns, and I write what she tells me. Lol. Not that I'm scared of her or anything. lol
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Mentioning coffee in our chapters is a crowd pleaser. There's also some wonderful things that happen within us even with just the smell of coffee. They said we don't even need to drink coffee You just need to smell the grounds hey does something to our brain. I think the reader needs to be filled in here we're hanging on: "give him one. I'm going to have him cremated as soon as I get home.
He deserves to burn for what he did, don't you agree, Mama?" "Sure, Cher." The issues addressed here are important. well done
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
Mentioning coffee in our chapters is a crowd pleaser. There's also some wonderful things that happen within us even with just the smell of coffee. They said we don't even need to drink coffee You just need to smell the grounds hey does something to our brain. I think the reader needs to be filled in here we're hanging on: "give him one. I'm going to have him cremated as soon as I get home.
He deserves to burn for what he did, don't you agree, Mama?" "Sure, Cher." The issues addressed here are important. well done
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Liz, for the excellent review. I am having a great time with this book and all the great comments.
God bless,
Steve
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I'm happy for you
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's good to be back, and now I just need to review a hundred plus stories to catch up. But my priority list has to be yours with reference to the Rougarou. I once wrote about him in the Louisiana swap. Thanks for sharing and I hope things are getting back to normal for you after the storm.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
It's good to be back, and now I just need to review a hundred plus stories to catch up. But my priority list has to be yours with reference to the Rougarou. I once wrote about him in the Louisiana swap. Thanks for sharing and I hope things are getting back to normal for you after the storm.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
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Welcome back, Ric, and thank you for the excellent review. I am honored. Yes, the Rougarou is a terrifying thing they say, I think Dodir Rae begs to differ, lol.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Steve,
An intriguing story with suspenseful plot and good character development.
I'm having a hard time figuring out who is who. I know Dodie Rae is the protagonist. Is she also called cher?
Is grandma bay lynn grandma?
Who is mama?
is the Rougarou a spirit inside dodie?
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
Hello, Steve,
An intriguing story with suspenseful plot and good character development.
I'm having a hard time figuring out who is who. I know Dodie Rae is the protagonist. Is she also called cher?
Is grandma bay lynn grandma?
Who is mama?
is the Rougarou a spirit inside dodie?
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Gypsy, for the excellent review. I'm sorry about the confusion. Bay Lynn is Dodie Rae's grandmother. Dodie Rae calls her Mama. Bay Lynn is cajun, and Cher is an endearment meaning Dear. I should put this in my Author notes. I think I will use Mama from now on.
God bless,
Steve
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Thank you very much, Steve that helps a lot.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This turned out very good. It segues well from the last chapter and moves us ahead to what's coming up. All in all, a very good job with moving the story ahead.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
This turned out very good. It segues well from the last chapter and moves us ahead to what's coming up. All in all, a very good job with moving the story ahead.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle, for the excellent review. I'm looking forward to the next chapter myself, lol.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Jim Wile
This was great, Steve. A well written chapter showing us that the addiction to "the beast" has now taken hold of her, and to what end we don't yet know, although you left it that apparently she does.
It's frightening how quickly some substances can become addictive and grow far beyond what they were originally intended for. That's a subject I'm currently writing about in my novel as well.
You learned the lesson very well about speech marks. This chapter read perfectly naturally with just the right number and in the right places. Well done, my friend.
Jim
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
This was great, Steve. A well written chapter showing us that the addiction to "the beast" has now taken hold of her, and to what end we don't yet know, although you left it that apparently she does.
It's frightening how quickly some substances can become addictive and grow far beyond what they were originally intended for. That's a subject I'm currently writing about in my novel as well.
You learned the lesson very well about speech marks. This chapter read perfectly naturally with just the right number and in the right places. Well done, my friend.
Jim
Comment Written 16-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Jim, for the excellent review, my friend. I see how well chapter five read after removing a few of the speech tags. Addiction can ruin ones life as well as their families, however, Dodie Rae doesn't see the beast as an addiction I fear.
God bless,
Steve
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That is the problem. They don't see themselves as addicted. It's always someone else who is addicted, but not them. They can stop whenever they want to.
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Right!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Abuse can leave traces of revenge for a long time as justice is often not served on the abuser. The anger and torture of living with evens like these must be tormenting. In the end the victim has to let go and forgive to move on, but not until they have come to terms with these situations can they step back and more forward and not let their future be destroyed by the past. A poignant post. I hope you survived the hurricane without much damage, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
Abuse can leave traces of revenge for a long time as justice is often not served on the abuser. The anger and torture of living with evens like these must be tormenting. In the end the victim has to let go and forgive to move on, but not until they have come to terms with these situations can they step back and more forward and not let their future be destroyed by the past. A poignant post. I hope you survived the hurricane without much damage, love Dolly x
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Dolly, and yes, we made it through with minor damage. Thank you for the excellent review and your wisdom on abuse. Abuse is a destructive thing, and many don't get out; they just live with it. What a shame this is.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Abuse is prevalent in our society. This story needs to be told.
"Yes," she lowered her head. ("Yes." She lowered her head.)
Dodie Rae lifted her head, took the coffee, and said. "Sadie?" (said,)
Sadie offered her a tissue and said. "You're not alone, Dodie Rae." (said)
"I see that," she reached for the tissue. (that." She)
Sadie clapped her hands and said. "Alright, ladies (said,)
You have a great story here, please review the rules for writing dialogue. I've copied a few areas down, but there are many more.)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
Abuse is prevalent in our society. This story needs to be told.
"Yes," she lowered her head. ("Yes." She lowered her head.)
Dodie Rae lifted her head, took the coffee, and said. "Sadie?" (said,)
Sadie offered her a tissue and said. "You're not alone, Dodie Rae." (said)
"I see that," she reached for the tissue. (that." She)
Sadie clapped her hands and said. "Alright, ladies (said,)
You have a great story here, please review the rules for writing dialogue. I've copied a few areas down, but there are many more.)
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Barbara, for the excellent review and insight. I need to slow down a bit when editing. With dyslexia I don't see things they way they are to most. Period's and comma's look the same to me at times. Your coaches are always welcome and appreciated, I respect those who are willing to help.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from GWHARGIS
Take your time. We all play catch up here when life throws a curve ball. Dodie Rae is definitely in denial. It reminds me of someone who is an alcoholic but hasn't admitted it to themselves yet. The meeting stirred up some unresolved anger. For some reason I think that Dodie Rae is going to think of herself as an avenger of sorts. This continues to entertain me. Gretchen
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
Take your time. We all play catch up here when life throws a curve ball. Dodie Rae is definitely in denial. It reminds me of someone who is an alcoholic but hasn't admitted it to themselves yet. The meeting stirred up some unresolved anger. For some reason I think that Dodie Rae is going to think of herself as an avenger of sorts. This continues to entertain me. Gretchen
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Gretchen, for another excellent review. Dodie Rae had a hard time seeing other victims, maybe she thought she was the only one. Also, I believe she feels the other women's pain and anger.
God bless,
Steve