Reviews from

Glory's Clouds

Club entry: 15-10 alternating

10 total reviews 
Comment from ESOSTINE
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I love reading your faith based work of poetry. You penned it well from a perspective of one who has sound Bible knowledge. Consider cross-checking the syllable count of the fourth line of the first verse. Well done, dear Erica.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    You were right! I fixed it
reply by ESOSTINE on 14-Jul-2024
    Beautiful.
reply by ESOSTINE on 14-Jul-2024
    Beautiful.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    Thank you :)
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Interesting perspective on God descendant on earth and how we have not met his expectations. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    Thank you for reading :)
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This looks like an interesting poem format. You did a nice job with it. I see you did the artwork as well. Beautiful. I wish I could do both. Thanks for sharing. Have a great weekend.

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
    Thank you do much :) you're actually the first person to notice that
Comment from Begin Again
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Welcome to Fanstory, Erika. I see you haven't been here long and it's the first I've had to read your thoughts. It's a very spiritual and moving poem.the Lord has paid for our sins and protects us from Satan's doings. If we have faith, one day we will be graced by his face and loving arms.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
    Thank your for welcoming me and foe your kind word
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

I haven't seen you before. Have you seen the notice for the "Dear God" contest? Seems right up your alley. You write strongly. Enjoy your weekend. Karen

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
    Thank you. I'm fairly new, I
    think I've been on the site for maybe two months? Most of my promotions have been stories. I did write something for the dear God contest but it was more like a letter than a poem. You as well :)
Comment from shelley kaye
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

this was a very thought-provoking and emotionally stirring poem
the imagery was nice and comforting and full of hope
the rhyme and meter flowed smoothly
all-around nice work!

thank you for sharing!
shelley :)

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
    Thank you, I appreciate it
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

What a beautifully written poem. I love the way you wrote it. You express a heartfelt longing for spiritual fulfillment so well. I love how you wrote about one day seeing God's face.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
    Yah, to be honest I could care less if there's an afterlife but I really would like to see God once
Comment from jim vecchio
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This was the best-yet entry for this event. Shelley should give you a gold star for this one! You told the story of personal redemption in this difficult poetic form just perfectly! Only one small concern: Second verse, first stanza: should be they?

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
    I'm glad you liked it. Thanks :)
reply by jim vecchio on 12-Jul-2024
    Always!
Comment from Pamusart
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

Hi, Erika

Good luck in the club contest

It sounds like you're searching for yourself spiritually. You're asking yourself to do things that nobody else can do. Nobody besides the Saints.

Very few people have flown beside Angels in the kind of clouds you're talking about. I take this with a grain of salt. I know you're religious. This means a lot to you. I'm a new Christian too

Here you know it should be stolen. I think I have a solution

'So take back once again what Satan stole'

What do you think?

" Take back once again what Satan has stole"

Here What do you mean by paying what you can't afford? Are you saying spiritually?

" Ascending on glory's clouds, paying what I can't afford"

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
    Thank you. Yes I meant spiritually. Since he died to pay for our sins
Comment from Earl Corp
Excellent
Not yet exceptional. When the exceptional rating is reached this is highlighted

This should have been a faith poetry contest entry.your poem rhymed, made sense, and was spiritual. Very nice job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
    Thank you :)