Venus
a tanka19 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Bill,
I hope you keep this up for the rest of the planets in our little solar system. Anything to do with space, and you've got my attention. When I was in Grade 7, my prize at school closing ceremonies in June for the highest Math marks was a large book about the planets. I always treasured that book.
Venus is much too hot and humid for us earthlings. We'd fry like trout over a campfire, if the acid didn't kill us first. I think we'd do much better on Mars. But really, I don't think the USA, India, Russia, or China should waste any money on an outpost in this solar system. They need to be searching one of the recently discovered exoplanets as a possible base for humans. We are quickly ruining our planet Earth, that's for sure.
I especially like the rhyme of "sister/blister", both great comments for Venus. You also mention that it rotates the opposite way a normal planet does. Just goes to show you there's always a prankster in the mix.
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Hi Bill,
I hope you keep this up for the rest of the planets in our little solar system. Anything to do with space, and you've got my attention. When I was in Grade 7, my prize at school closing ceremonies in June for the highest Math marks was a large book about the planets. I always treasured that book.
Venus is much too hot and humid for us earthlings. We'd fry like trout over a campfire, if the acid didn't kill us first. I think we'd do much better on Mars. But really, I don't think the USA, India, Russia, or China should waste any money on an outpost in this solar system. They need to be searching one of the recently discovered exoplanets as a possible base for humans. We are quickly ruining our planet Earth, that's for sure.
I especially like the rhyme of "sister/blister", both great comments for Venus. You also mention that it rotates the opposite way a normal planet does. Just goes to show you there's always a prankster in the mix.
Nicely penned!
Cheers,
Kimbob
Comment Written 15-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Kimbob
Comment from gansach
This is a very nice Tanka poem with a good presentation. It has the correct format and is informative in its few lines, letting us know it's probably not a place we'd want to visit. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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This is a very nice Tanka poem with a good presentation. It has the correct format and is informative in its few lines, letting us know it's probably not a place we'd want to visit. Nicely done!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Venus reminds me of one of my sisters.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Well done. Do you know how to remove people from your fanned list? I have folks who load up my mailbox but never read me. Sniffle sniffle. Good picture too.
I still don't understand about poor little Pluto. :-)
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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Well done. Do you know how to remove people from your fanned list? I have folks who load up my mailbox but never read me. Sniffle sniffle. Good picture too.
I still don't understand about poor little Pluto. :-)
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024
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I think I do. I will research and report back.
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Thanks for the answers I alreadt gave 2 the heave ho! "Karen
Comment from BOO ghost
Hey, Bill! Been many moons, pal. Sister and blister rhythm and rhymes. Venus must have a liquid core of nickel and iron to cause a magnetic field to spin, Nice looking presentation! Levon song by Elton John comes to mind, When Jesus goes to Venus and leaves Levon behind! And another Venus song comes to mind? Okay, a Tanka, I see. Did a few of them back in the old days. Nicely done! BOO!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Hey, Bill! Been many moons, pal. Sister and blister rhythm and rhymes. Venus must have a liquid core of nickel and iron to cause a magnetic field to spin, Nice looking presentation! Levon song by Elton John comes to mind, When Jesus goes to Venus and leaves Levon behind! And another Venus song comes to mind? Okay, a Tanka, I see. Did a few of them back in the old days. Nicely done! BOO!
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, BOO. Good to see you're back.
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You too! Bill.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Does Venus really rotate backwards? I think it would leave a heck of a lot more damage than a puny, wee blister too, sister or not (lol.) I am not entirely up-to-snuff on all this stuff... (*grin*)
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Does Venus really rotate backwards? I think it would leave a heck of a lot more damage than a puny, wee blister too, sister or not (lol.) I am not entirely up-to-snuff on all this stuff... (*grin*)
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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I haven't ridden on Venus but that's what Google says.
Comment from jessizero
I liked that you ended this poem with a rhyme. You did a great job describing Venus. I didn't remember that it rotated backwards. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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I liked that you ended this poem with a rhyme. You did a great job describing Venus. I didn't remember that it rotated backwards. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Jessizero
Comment from jim vecchio
Another interesting five-liner. Are you planning to do a series on all the planets? Or did you PLANET yet? If Venus is my sister, how come she never gives me Christmas presidents?
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Another interesting five-liner. Are you planning to do a series on all the planets? Or did you PLANET yet? If Venus is my sister, how come she never gives me Christmas presidents?
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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She may have lost your address.
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I'll try to catch up with her in the morning.
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
Hey, Bill! Just love this poem. Beautiful picture, too! So, it's a hot one, huh?! Well, I can visit it in my mind with no injury, thanks to your wonderful space poem and image! Maddy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Hey, Bill! Just love this poem. Beautiful picture, too! So, it's a hot one, huh?! Well, I can visit it in my mind with no injury, thanks to your wonderful space poem and image! Maddy
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thanks, Madeleine
Comment from nomi338
Wow Billy! I am beginning to wonder if you might be star struck. All of a suddenly, you have become an expert on planets, their movement and their placement in the galaxy. I am being educated and entertained at the same time. I hate that. LOL. No not really. I thank you actually. You are reminding me of how important our solar system is to our very existence.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Wow Billy! I am beginning to wonder if you might be star struck. All of a suddenly, you have become an expert on planets, their movement and their placement in the galaxy. I am being educated and entertained at the same time. I hate that. LOL. No not really. I thank you actually. You are reminding me of how important our solar system is to our very existence.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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I still count Pluto as a planet. I'm sure that soon it will be welcome back.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation, Bill.
-You wrote a good tanka with a good topic.
-Good description of Venus in the opening lines.
-A good pivot line.
-Good concluding lines describing Venus
as our sister with rhyme to go with it.
-An enjoyable read.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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-Good artwork and presentation, Bill.
-You wrote a good tanka with a good topic.
-Good description of Venus in the opening lines.
-A good pivot line.
-Good concluding lines describing Venus
as our sister with rhyme to go with it.
-An enjoyable read.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you, Pam
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You are welcome, Bill.
