The Woman on the Train
A woman takes the train to work34 total reviews
Comment from A.Z. Schott
This is a powerful poem. Some of the rhymes felt a little forced, but the message was clear. We are all blinded by our privileges to the needs of others. This was something we all need to hear. We, all of us, have passed a homeless person in need and have thought about helping them, but then we decide to ignore the problem and hope someone else takes care of them. Thanks for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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This is a powerful poem. Some of the rhymes felt a little forced, but the message was clear. We are all blinded by our privileges to the needs of others. This was something we all need to hear. We, all of us, have passed a homeless person in need and have thought about helping them, but then we decide to ignore the problem and hope someone else takes care of them. Thanks for sharing your work.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2024
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And in this one will you please tell me which rhymes seem forced?
Thank you for your excellent review and nice comment
Comment from Mintybee
This is a touching piece about how hard it can be to do the right thing, but how important it is to try anyway. It's far too easy to believe it's someone else's problem. Thanks for sharing this commentary on human nature and societal issues.
Mintybee
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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This is a touching piece about how hard it can be to do the right thing, but how important it is to try anyway. It's far too easy to believe it's someone else's problem. Thanks for sharing this commentary on human nature and societal issues.
Mintybee
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent story about the homeless. A sad commentary on our society that we can't take care of the homeless.
I agree that the Salvation Army does what they can and we should support their cause.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Excellent story about the homeless. A sad commentary on our society that we can't take care of the homeless.
I agree that the Salvation Army does what they can and we should support their cause.
Well done
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Shanbreen
Pam, this is one of your better ones. I love the flow and the story it tells. It is a sad story, but just the same it is a good reminder of what the homeless go through. Well done, Pam.
Yes, I too, am guilty of giving them a passing sympathetic look, but now depend more on organizations such as the Salvation Army.
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Pam, this is one of your better ones. I love the flow and the story it tells. It is a sad story, but just the same it is a good reminder of what the homeless go through. Well done, Pam.
Yes, I too, am guilty of giving them a passing sympathetic look, but now depend more on organizations such as the Salvation Army.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 07-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much for these six shiny stars and for your wonderful comments. You made my day.
Comment from gansach
Your poem tells a story that, sadly, happens too often~especially now when inflation and prices are high and people can't provide for themselves or families and end up homeless. Too many people ignore the situation when they have the ability to help, even a little. Well done!
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Your poem tells a story that, sadly, happens too often~especially now when inflation and prices are high and people can't provide for themselves or families and end up homeless. Too many people ignore the situation when they have the ability to help, even a little. Well done!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Erika Whittle
I have complicated feelings on this subject but I appreciate the advice in your notes. That is probably the most effective way. I like how you ended this poem; it effectively sums up your point.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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I have complicated feelings on this subject but I appreciate the advice in your notes. That is probably the most effective way. I like how you ended this poem; it effectively sums up your point.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Wendy G
Many or most of us would have been that woman on the train at one point or another, sadly. It's wise to give through a charity or to offer a meal rather than money which could be spent foolishly. But until we've walked in their shoes we will never fully understand or know their full story. A fine poem, well-written, thought-provoking and meaningful, worthy of a six, but I have none left, sorry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Many or most of us would have been that woman on the train at one point or another, sadly. It's wise to give through a charity or to offer a meal rather than money which could be spent foolishly. But until we've walked in their shoes we will never fully understand or know their full story. A fine poem, well-written, thought-provoking and meaningful, worthy of a six, but I have none left, sorry.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
And thank you for the virtual six stars
Comment from karenina
Excellent rhyming and story telling. I felt empathy for the woman and the homeless man. It is so difficult to discern the correct (and safe) way to approach these situations.
Your suggestion to help through a vetted charity is wise.
Karenina
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Excellent rhyming and story telling. I felt empathy for the woman and the homeless man. It is so difficult to discern the correct (and safe) way to approach these situations.
Your suggestion to help through a vetted charity is wise.
Karenina
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
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You are very welcome!
Comment from Crystal A Castaneda
Reading this I could see myself walking down a similar path but next time I will remember and do more to help. Very nice work bringing awareness to the homelessness in our country.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Reading this I could see myself walking down a similar path but next time I will remember and do more to help. Very nice work bringing awareness to the homelessness in our country.
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
You handled it well. Tough subject. When I was going home from getting groceries a while back, I saw a man up ahead panhandling. You could tell he was real, his sign said I will work for food. I was in slow traffic, so I emptied a bag, put in some tangerines, a loaf of bread, a jar of peanut butter, a couple foil packets of tuna, and some apples and my vitamins. When I held the bag out, he ran to get it and beamed and blessed me, I got as much joy from it as he did. It was a good day. I got my husband his peanut butter the next day. :-) Karen
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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You handled it well. Tough subject. When I was going home from getting groceries a while back, I saw a man up ahead panhandling. You could tell he was real, his sign said I will work for food. I was in slow traffic, so I emptied a bag, put in some tangerines, a loaf of bread, a jar of peanut butter, a couple foil packets of tuna, and some apples and my vitamins. When I held the bag out, he ran to get it and beamed and blessed me, I got as much joy from it as he did. It was a good day. I got my husband his peanut butter the next day. :-) Karen
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Good job with that homeless man you made his day and he made yours
Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
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We should always do what we can when we can. Karen
