Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This contest entry is fun to read, and I can imagine children having a lot of fun with it. The repeating words and the rhyming scheme add to the fun. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2024

Thank you, Barbara. I'm glad you think children would have fun with it. I'll try it out on my 4-year-old great grandson when I see him.

Comment from gansach

Excellent

This is a very nice entry for the Poem for a Child competition. I once wrote a book of children's poems called I Will Not Go To Bed and other poems of naughtiness. This reminded me of writing those. A child could easily relate to the feelings expressed in your poem. I like the rhymes and the rhythm along with the repetition. Nicely done!

 Comment Written 13-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 13-Jul-2024

Thank you for great review. This was especially nice to receive since you've written a book of this type of poetry.

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Wonderful entry for the Poem For A Child contest. I think my grandson will like it. It has a good rhythm... like a song. Good luck!

Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024

Thanks so much, Gypsy, for the review. I hope you can share it with him.

Comment from Rachelle Allen

Excellent

Exactly what children love: a simple rhyme, lots of repetition, and a perky meter. You delivered everything necessary for the perfect children's poem, so I bet this will do great for you in the contest! Good luck at the polls!! xo

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024

Thank you very much, Rachelle, for your encouraging review and wishes for luck at the polls. ; ) Hugs, Verna

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a fun post for children and I can just hear them singing this song and I enjoyed the sentiment here as children want to please their parents, a great entry for the contest Verna, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024

Thank you so much for a sweet review, Dolly. Hugs, Verna

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This is a cute poem for a child. It could be a song with a catchy little tune to go with it. There are so many things I child can think fo they don't want to do. Most children don't really want to be bad ane I think most of them try to be good.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024

Thank you, Beth, for your excellent review. I thought of a number of other things, too, but didn't find a good rhyming word for the last line. ; ) I don't want to brush my teeth, wash my face/hands, take a bath, take a nap, comb my hair. etc, etc, etc,

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

The perfect song to teach a child, It starts with things they dislike and would certainly love to sing and rhyme about and eases them into what things would make their lives better. I love the flow and the repeat of phrases.
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024

Thank you for your delightful review, Carol.

Comment from Cindy Decker 3

Excellent

Verna,
Great poem for children.little kids can relate to your words.
(Sounds like me when I was younger eons ago).
Good luck with this sweet poem, Verna.
Cindy

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024

Thanks so much, Cindy, for continuing to be an encourager for me with this review.

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Verna dear,
I can see my three boys jumping on their beds singing this song. I had a flash back with this precious poem and I suppose you know of this too, especially the going to bed stanza. Just adorable! Sending you my best today as always and my best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal Xoxo

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024

Thank you so much, Sal, for a great review and continuing to be an encourager for me.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Yes, this will delight a child for sure. My nearly three-year-old grandson was particularly difficult one day and my daughter asked him, "What are you saying? What do you want?" and the answer came back very clearly, "Chocolate cake and ice-cream!" I'm not convinced he wants to try to be "real good" though, even though he knows he should. I enjoyed this fun and whimsical piece. Well done.
Wendy

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2024

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024

Thank you so much, Wendy, for your sweet review. Our young ones inspire us, don't they?