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2024 Japanese Poetry

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Comment from dragonpoet
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi MariVal,
This is a well done cinquain that seems inspired by the artwork. If not, you are lucky to find such a perfect illustration of your words.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Enjoy the day.
Joan

 Comment Written 11-Aug-2024


reply by the author on 11-Aug-2024
    Thank you very much, Joan. I appreciate your exceptional six stars review.

    Gypsy 😊
reply by dragonpoet on 11-Aug-2024
    Don't mention it, MariVal.
    Joan
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. Crescent moons surely do look like they rock and balancing on an ocean wave would cause it to rock. I know it would be very soothing. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Ohh! VERY, very cool!! The crescent moon DOES look like something that could be rocked, and when it's above the ocean, it looks exactly as if that's happening. What a clever slant on something the rest of us see every day and never think of in that way. You are so artistic and clever!! xoxo

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much, Rachelle

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from RJ Heritage
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You have written a beautiful Cinquain poem and have expressed the words so well. The overall presentation is well made and lovely as moon and ocean seem to whisper to each other.
Thank for sharing, and good luck in the contest.
RJ

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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The visual is beautifully captured in your cinquain verse. There is a sense of peace and tranquility as the waning silver moon is gently rocked. My only thought is that I would love to have seen 'cradled' instead of 'cuddled'? But this is, of course, excellent. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Debbie, I like cradled better.

    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
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that pic is so cool -- it totally does look like the water is rocking the moon...
nice w and s alliteration
great imagery and smooth flow

thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest
shelley :)

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Colorado Owl
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I enjoyed reading your beautiful poem, and the picture perfectly displays the moon, as if being rocked by the waves. The colors of your words also reflect the night, ocean and moon. Well done!

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
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This is the perfect cinqain Gypsy, and you've added that perfect touch of class that you have, of perfection in your presentation, I think this is a winner, well dine, dear girl, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
reply by royowen on 10-Jul-2024
    Bless you
Comment from lyenochka
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Beautiful! I love how you crafted your cinquain to describe that peaceful moonlit picture and then you draw us to a sense of being "cuddled" which brings us to a new level at the end. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
    Thank you very, big sister.

    Love

    Marival