The Tainted
Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Recognition"A fantasy story following hunter Taya
2 total reviews
Comment from jim vecchio
Your story continues its course as your characters evolver and progress. Very good. There were two minor needs for revision: Derek, Brandy and Dave, went to the market to gather additional supplies, and the check on the horse and buggy the left at the boarding house. should be "and to check" and "they left".
We came to check in and so goodbye. should be "say goodbye."
Also: Their vigor was a but overwhelming. should be " a bit overwhelming"
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Your story continues its course as your characters evolver and progress. Very good. There were two minor needs for revision: Derek, Brandy and Dave, went to the market to gather additional supplies, and the check on the horse and buggy the left at the boarding house. should be "and to check" and "they left".
We came to check in and so goodbye. should be "say goodbye."
Also: Their vigor was a but overwhelming. should be " a bit overwhelming"
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Oops thank you
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You should seed all the typos I must go over, even in a small box like this.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This continues to be enjoyable. It seems like your story is building towards an emotional climax! You do a great job of balancing the seriousness of the situation with moments of friendship between the characters. Keep up the good work!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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This continues to be enjoyable. It seems like your story is building towards an emotional climax! You do a great job of balancing the seriousness of the situation with moments of friendship between the characters. Keep up the good work!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Sure is! Or at least that's the goal. Thank you so much for your Continuously uplifting reviews :) I greatly appreciate it