Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi

This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!

I was going to say how interesting it was that you start and stop with the same light.

Then, I realized what a doofus I am because that is one of the requirements of the contest. I just reviewed another one. I didn't know that was a requirement of the contest.

I think at the bottom you were trying to say that somebody's shedding their shell and transforming presumably into something better

Here shed outgrown shell makes no sense. Did you mean she'd?

If you want to keep
shed, then you should make it sheds because the subject is singular. Unless babe, teen, mother of three are not all one person you can leave as is

"Babe, teen, mother of three
Shed outgrown shell"

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2024

---

reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024

Thank you for your review and your advise. It's shed like a hermit crab

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Your lovely rictameter poem is of the few that have followed the strict ruls of this form. A beautiful butterly offering for the contest and shaped just right. Sublime! Sending along my best today as always and my good wishes in the vote.
Sally Law :))

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2024

---

reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024

Thank you for such a kind review

reply by Sally Law on 06-Jul-2024

My pleasure! Fingers crossed for a blue ribbon! .sal :))