Freedom - priced quite nicely...
A tale of woe, fo sho.5 total reviews
Comment from CornishChick
Wow. This is profound. A single reading is not enough. There's so much meat in this, one needs to pause and digest one line at a time. You reached deep for the emotion of this one. Very well done.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Wow. This is profound. A single reading is not enough. There's so much meat in this, one needs to pause and digest one line at a time. You reached deep for the emotion of this one. Very well done.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from Lindsey Russell
I love the word usage in this poem. The execution of this poem is almost perfect. My only critique would be that some of the words are not often used by the general public and therefore may prove difficult for some to understand. Still, great job and good luck
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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I love the word usage in this poem. The execution of this poem is almost perfect. My only critique would be that some of the words are not often used by the general public and therefore may prove difficult for some to understand. Still, great job and good luck
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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You're right and thank you!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem beautifully captures the deep sense of patriotism. I love it. Perfect for this contest. The way you share the colors of the flag with the sacrifices made by "rough men" and the weight of carrying their legacy is so powerful.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Your poem beautifully captures the deep sense of patriotism. I love it. Perfect for this contest. The way you share the colors of the flag with the sacrifices made by "rough men" and the weight of carrying their legacy is so powerful.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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I tried to capture just that. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Earl Corp
Your poem rhymed. But truthfully I had a hard time understanding what you're trying to say. Even after reading it three times I can't get the gist. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
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Your poem rhymed. But truthfully I had a hard time understanding what you're trying to say. Even after reading it three times I can't get the gist. Thanks for sharing. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
During the time of the two great wars, people stuck together. At least in the US because there was a lot of rationing so that the troops could get the best meats and sugar and anything else that was rationed.
People made sacrifices in every profession and business. My husband's father own a grocery store. Like a corner store in Boston. He was denied for service in the military because of his eyesight and they decided to leave him as a civilian providing meats to the military. He convinced his sons that hamburger was the better cut of meat than steak. I think that was because he was allowed to keep some hamburger but not any of the steaks.
Your poem is well thought out and well executed. I noted a loose rhyming scheme and no set meter
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
During the time of the two great wars, people stuck together. At least in the US because there was a lot of rationing so that the troops could get the best meats and sugar and anything else that was rationed.
People made sacrifices in every profession and business. My husband's father own a grocery store. Like a corner store in Boston. He was denied for service in the military because of his eyesight and they decided to leave him as a civilian providing meats to the military. He convinced his sons that hamburger was the better cut of meat than steak. I think that was because he was allowed to keep some hamburger but not any of the steaks.
Your poem is well thought out and well executed. I noted a loose rhyming scheme and no set meter
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024