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A Mysterious Inheritance and Murders

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Comment from prettybluebirds
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This was an action-filled, dramatic conclusion to your story. It deserves a six, so here it is. Your descriptions were so vivid that I could picture each scene. Excellent work.

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
    How awesome, April, that you dropped in and were able to catch up on the chapters. You have been a staunch supporter since the beginning, and I can't thank you enough. Even when I doubted myself, you didn't. Thank you!
    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Excellent
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Oh, Carol, I can see that I have totally missed this chapter. I have been to busy writing the last few days. I'm sure you know why. I so enjoy this story. I have read it through and now am up to date. Hugs, Ulla xcx

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
    Now don't be mixing up the chapters and getting the ghosts going in every which direction. LOL Appreciate you catching up!
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
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Wow, now there is some mighty fancy action writing to wipe out some bad guys, but as you've proved, nobody really gets killed off, they just come back as ghosts. :-) Thanks for sharing. Sorry I don't have a well deserved six, as does everything you write.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
    Liked my car chase and shoot'em up action did you? Thanks for continuing to read even when it's difficult at times. I appreciate you so much.
    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
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This was perfect timing to read tonight with the fireworks going off all around us and I'm reading about the fireworks and shootout right in this chapter! Glad that the bad guys have been arrested and well, sadly, for the unrepentant Louie and Marco, their end.

 Comment Written 05-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
    Funny how that happened! Fireworsa exploding everywhere. Thanks as always, Helen. Glad you enjoyed the excitement.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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Their plan had worked better than expected as Louie and Marcos have permanently left the house. The rest of the bad guys have been captured and the "treasure" can mostly be reclaimed. Now for the search for the real treasure. This is a good chapter with lots of excitement and you added in the hunt for the real treasure to keep the reader reading.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
    i always hope to leave a morsel or hook to encourage the reader to continue. Thanks for enjoying the story and for your kind review.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
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Wow! TERRIFIC CHAPTER!

I was so caught up in the action I found myself reading faster and faster!

You put me right THERE, to witness the demise of Marcos and Louie! I could almost feel the flames...

And the "Boot" book has been found!

Holey Moley, your beginning to tie the ribbon around this one!

Karenina

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
    My sweet Karenina, I hope you had a nice 4th of July. And of course, I am overjoyed by your response to this chapter. I've really been enjoying writing them. though it will be sad as we move toward the end. Maybe this one is the one I try to publish...if only for me and you!
    Smiles, Carol
reply by karenina on 05-Jul-2024
    Well -- I suspect you would sell many copies, Carol. Mark me down for the first!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
    If I figure this out, you'll have an autographed copy, my friend.
reply by karenina on 05-Jul-2024
    Wow...I'll buy it if you'll sign it and send it to me!
Comment from BethShelby
Exceptional
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This was a great chapter. You have done a wonderful job with so many things going on at the same time. I can imagine any way it could have gone any better.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
    Wow! Glitter all over the page! Thanks Beth...Sorry it took me a little time to get back to answering my reviews. I appreciate your thoughtfulness and the review.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
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I've waited for the grand showdown between the ghosts and gangsters, and you did not disappoint. Your skillful and detailed description of Marco's and Louie's demise was brilliant, as Louie regretted his life choices and Marcos accepted his fate.

I have enjoyed every minute spent reading this novel. I am amazed at your creativity, writing skill, and imagination, not to mention your ability to pump out chapters.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
    I've fallen so much in love with this story (after hating it in the beginning) that I find myself getting up in the middle of the night and writing. I think better in the still of the night, and the story just unfolds. I'm glad I didn't disappoint with Louie and Marcos's attempt to escape. For some reason, I always want to give these characters more dimension than just bad guys or ghosts. Now, we move on to the search and finding the treasure. I hope it's not a letdown. LOL

    Thank you so much, Lorraine, for sticking with me and all the support and kindness you have given me.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I can't wait to learn of everybody's fate, especially the ghost. I am wondering if Michael and Sandra may have a future together. Why not? You did a great job with the descriptions of the escape and shootout.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
    Thank you so much, Barbara. I keep trying to wrap this story up, but then I think of something else and just have to put it in there. Thanks again for always helping and supporting me.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
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Nicely done again! I'm enjoying your book. The sudden upheaval with the mansion adds a dramatic turn. Your writing continues to skillfully blend mystery and emotion. You keep me engaged and eager to uncover the next twist in this intriguing tale.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Michael. I doubt you could have said anything nicer than your review. I write not only for myself but also to know others enjoy my efforts. I am thrilled by your thoughts. Thank you so much for following the story.
    Smiles, Carol