Stop the Boat.
A rescue with a difference.19 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I was hoping Dad would end up in the drink not Auntie. This was fun nonetheless, The folks could always take turns being out of the water while holding on to the boat. Problem solved. Karen
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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I was hoping Dad would end up in the drink not Auntie. This was fun nonetheless, The folks could always take turns being out of the water while holding on to the boat. Problem solved. Karen
Comment Written 17-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2024
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Thanks for your review and practical solution lol. Glad you thought it was fun. I still remember it clearly.
Cheers
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I was a Girl Scout. I can also cook under the ground! Talents just ooze out of me :-)
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There is no doubt about that at all. do you bake cookies as well?
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I can. my favorite cookie is coconut macaroons. My second sand tarts. You?
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Choc Chip. What are sand tarts? I imagine it is a flavor.
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Sand tarts are lind of like sugar cookies to sratr with then you add some butter and lots of chopped pecans. You rolls them to have them look like boney fingers. When they are done you ahve a bowl set aside with Powdered sugar in it, and roll them in that a while (the sand). they are super delicious. Karen
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Wow, they do sound delicious. Can almost taste them now.
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After I settle in, I will find you the recipe. If you live in Texas I could mail you some. Karen
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Thanks for that but the recipe would be fine. I am in Australia.The trip may do them no good. Have a great day.
Comment from lyenochka
Poor Auntie Betty traded places with Trixie in the water. Hope she was dressed for swimming. I can appreciate her kind heart and wanting to bring the dog into the boat. A fun story. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Poor Auntie Betty traded places with Trixie in the water. Hope she was dressed for swimming. I can appreciate her kind heart and wanting to bring the dog into the boat. A fun story. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed the read. There were quite a few adventures with both Trixie and Aunty Betty. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from tfawcus
A well-told tale with a hilarious twist at the end. It is to Auntie Betty's credit that she was able to see the funny side, too. The ability to laugh at yourself is rare and precious.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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A well-told tale with a hilarious twist at the end. It is to Auntie Betty's credit that she was able to see the funny side, too. The ability to laugh at yourself is rare and precious.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. You are correct about the ability to laugh at yourself. Trixie and Aunty Betty have left me with many golden memories.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
This will cause any reader concern especially readers who love dogs. ""Ernie, Trixie is swimming after us. We do not want her to drown."
"There are already six in the boat. We cannot fit her in. As a Labrador she is bred to swim. She will go back."
"Ern, stop the boat."
after this tension there was need for hey comedy relief.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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This will cause any reader concern especially readers who love dogs. ""Ernie, Trixie is swimming after us. We do not want her to drown."
"There are already six in the boat. We cannot fit her in. As a Labrador she is bred to swim. She will go back."
"Ern, stop the boat."
after this tension there was need for hey comedy relief.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the review, Liz. Sorry the first part was a bit concerning but all came good in the end. Trixie and Auntie Betty left me with many golden memories. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from LJbutterfly
I enjoyed the way this story flowed, with introductory details in the beginning, and dialogue between your Dad and Auntie. Your ending was clever in that you told us Trixie was safely in the boat before disclosing Auntie was in the water. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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I enjoyed the way this story flowed, with introductory details in the beginning, and dialogue between your Dad and Auntie. Your ending was clever in that you told us Trixie was safely in the boat before disclosing Auntie was in the water. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Steve Foreman
Great! Well told and descriptive. Lots of good dialogue. A funny story that I enjoyed reading, I love auntie Betty... I am sure I know her! Lol!
Good job well, done!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Great! Well told and descriptive. Lots of good dialogue. A funny story that I enjoyed reading, I love auntie Betty... I am sure I know her! Lol!
Good job well, done!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the review, Steve. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, a lot of good memories generate from this incident. Taker care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry.
Comment from nomi338
A person with compassion for all life is a delight and a challenge to get along with. If you choose to try and get along with them by putting up the least amount of opposition, your life will be greatly improved and pretty much devoid of stress.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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A person with compassion for all life is a delight and a challenge to get along with. If you choose to try and get along with them by putting up the least amount of opposition, your life will be greatly improved and pretty much devoid of stress.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from F. William Lester
Poor Auntie Betty. I bet the look on her face was priceless as the dog passed her on the way out of the boat. LOL! Great story. One that should keep you laughing for many years. Thanks for sharing it. Brightened my day. Stay well.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Poor Auntie Betty. I bet the look on her face was priceless as the dog passed her on the way out of the boat. LOL! Great story. One that should keep you laughing for many years. Thanks for sharing it. Brightened my day. Stay well.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, this incident has provided us with many laughs over the years.Glad it brightened your day. Take care.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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You're welcome. Have a great day.
Comment from GoWiSt
Oh, wow, this was a wonderful story. It was so noble and humane of Auntie Betty to not want to leave a soul--even a doggie soul--struggling in the water. So caring and selfless. And yes, it was funny that as she rescued Trixie out of the water, she happened to fall in herself. Wonder if anyone took pictures.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Oh, wow, this was a wonderful story. It was so noble and humane of Auntie Betty to not want to leave a soul--even a doggie soul--struggling in the water. So caring and selfless. And yes, it was funny that as she rescued Trixie out of the water, she happened to fall in herself. Wonder if anyone took pictures.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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No there were no pictures unfortunately. But it was so funny. Thanks for the review and I am glad you enjoyed the read. I can inform you that Trixie went along to have a long and happy life.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Natureschild
Hi Barry,
I find your story to be a light-hearted and engaging account of a family outing. The narrative builds up to a funny and satisfying conclusion, effectively capturing family dynamics and the love for a pet.
Here are some suggestions for improvement:
Phrasing: 'All five foot of Auntie' could be revised to 'All five feet of Auntie'. Consider clarifying that Auntie is five feet tall to avoid potential confusion of Auntie having five feet.
Tense consistency: The narrative generally maintains past tense but occasionally slips. For example, 'The boat continued to glide through the water, but was slowing quite quickly' could be 'The boat continued to glide through the water but slowed quickly.'
Dialogue formatting: Some dialogue lacks proper punctuation and tagging, which can affect clarity. Each speaker should begin with a new paragraph for better readability.
Natural dialogue: Some lines of dialogue could be more natural. For instance, 'Anyway, she is used to swimming. As a Labrador, she is bred to swim.' seems unnecessarily explanation for a family that knows Trixie well. To inform the reader about Trixie's breed while maintaining natural dialogue, Dad could simply say, 'Labradors are bred to swim.'
Minor punctuation and spacing issues: There are a few instances periods or commas are misplaced in dialogue.
Overall, your story is enjoyable and well-paced. These minor revisions could enhance its readability and natural flow, making it even more engaging.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Hi Barry,
I find your story to be a light-hearted and engaging account of a family outing. The narrative builds up to a funny and satisfying conclusion, effectively capturing family dynamics and the love for a pet.
Here are some suggestions for improvement:
Phrasing: 'All five foot of Auntie' could be revised to 'All five feet of Auntie'. Consider clarifying that Auntie is five feet tall to avoid potential confusion of Auntie having five feet.
Tense consistency: The narrative generally maintains past tense but occasionally slips. For example, 'The boat continued to glide through the water, but was slowing quite quickly' could be 'The boat continued to glide through the water but slowed quickly.'
Dialogue formatting: Some dialogue lacks proper punctuation and tagging, which can affect clarity. Each speaker should begin with a new paragraph for better readability.
Natural dialogue: Some lines of dialogue could be more natural. For instance, 'Anyway, she is used to swimming. As a Labrador, she is bred to swim.' seems unnecessarily explanation for a family that knows Trixie well. To inform the reader about Trixie's breed while maintaining natural dialogue, Dad could simply say, 'Labradors are bred to swim.'
Minor punctuation and spacing issues: There are a few instances periods or commas are misplaced in dialogue.
Overall, your story is enjoyable and well-paced. These minor revisions could enhance its readability and natural flow, making it even more engaging.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much for your informed review. I note your suggestions and agree with them. I will get to some editing asap. Glad you enjoyed the read. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.