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Boss Bill's Pen-cils

a poem

12 total reviews 
Comment from teafor2
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Bill, no matter how many times I read this fascinating/engrossing piece, I only come up with some egomaniac and/or egocentric persona that has
done all he can to destroy all within his reach, and when that failed, he got bored and stopped...The picture w/split community, your hyperbole of mass destructions was relevant in theme...I am sorry if I have misstated
your intentions. Great puzzle!

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
    No need to worry. The first stanza is Bill sitting to write with few expectations. The second third and fourth stanzas are the direction his mind went next. The final stanza finds him back to the mundane.
reply by teafor2 on 03-Jul-2024
    I was no where near what you are saying, but I did enjoy what I read:-)
Comment from Nicki.B
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Wow what an explosion of imagination there. I liked how the you've written a poem about someone writing themselves, there was great imagery within. I wasn't sure where it was going forst I thought it might be some mad man on the loose or something! But then it transpired. Well done, an enjoyable read

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Nicki. I'm glad it came out right.
Comment from Chrissy710
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Bill
your mind must run at 100 mikes an hour at times however your unique entertaining writing keeps us all guessing. Keep writing with that pen - cil
Cheers Chris

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Chris. : )
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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We see injustices in the world and we want to change things but somehow those people seem to naturally get their just desserts in time. We all pay for our bad deeds eventually. As poets we are the reporters of such incidents as we don't miss anything and our pen or pencil works the magic. A poignant post, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 02-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Dolly. Graphite justice.
Comment from QC Poet
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Hello Mr. Schott, it reads like a poets struggle to write revenge, catastrophe, or child works a issue all writers will face sometimes. This is a good read about the elements a writer will face at some point in their writing endeavors
Thanks always for Sharing your skill set

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
    Thank you, QC
Comment from Teri7
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Bill, This is a very interesting and six star poem in my eyes. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the art work you chose. A very enjoyable read my friend. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Teri, for the great review. Bill
Comment from jim vecchio
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As writers, the entire world of words and imagination are open to us. You could give three writers the same cue (as they do in some creative writing classes) and each work will differ greatly.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Jim
reply by jim vecchio on 01-Jul-2024
    You're welcome, Bill!
Comment from Liliana Tricks
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Your poem truly navigates the intricacies of justice and consequences, merging seriousness with whimsical imagery. It's a piece that provokes thought by juxtaposing the gravity of past actions with the surreal elements that emerge later in the poem.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
    Thank you, Liliana, for the great review. Bill
Comment from nomi338
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What a deadly combination. A talented maniac, armed with pen, paper and the talent to create a nightmare scenario. Destructive mayhem must ensue. What is a lad to do?

"Destroy with glee, everything that offends me!"

Put the paper down Bill, put the paper down.

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
    Paper!!!!
Comment from karenina
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Sounds to me like Bill's muse was either on serious overload or possessed by "A I" -- although if I get a vote, I'd go with the talking bear playing a tamborine!

Karenina

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
    I may have to pursue that idea.
reply by karenina on 01-Jul-2024
    Smiles...............