Dark Storms
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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa.
This is a great description of a coming storm. I like the metaphor of wet cement for the color of the clouds. The short lines provide tension like the coming storm does.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy your day.
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Hi Melissa.
This is a great description of a coming storm. I like the metaphor of wet cement for the color of the clouds. The short lines provide tension like the coming storm does.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy your day.
Joan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you Joan... we have been having several storms recently and it seems appropriate :). Glad you liked it.
Melissa
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No problem, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I enjoyed your description of thunder & lightning! A summer storm is always... amusing, a spectacle. We can always use the rain.
But I especially loved your closing lines,
"assaulting
the earth
with
jagged
lances
of light" ... that's perfect! And nice alliteration with "lances of light". What a great way of describing a flashing bolt of lightning! We're expecting thunder & lightning later on today up here in New Brunswick. It's supposed to be quite hot & humid for the next couple of days.
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Hi Melissa,
I enjoyed your description of thunder & lightning! A summer storm is always... amusing, a spectacle. We can always use the rain.
But I especially loved your closing lines,
"assaulting
the earth
with
jagged
lances
of light" ... that's perfect! And nice alliteration with "lances of light". What a great way of describing a flashing bolt of lightning! We're expecting thunder & lightning later on today up here in New Brunswick. It's supposed to be quite hot & humid for the next couple of days.
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much, KB... I know that you are experiencing the remnants of H. Beryl, and I'm guessing you are gettin some of this storminess I wrote about. I appreciate you review and I'm glad you enjoyed 'jagged lances of light'. Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
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Where are you, Melissa? I hope not Vermont! I saw the news this morning where a six-unit apartment building in Plainfield was swept away. Residents had only 15 minutes to evacuate before the building was lifted off its base. And a man was swept away and drowned inside his car in Peacham. A bridge in Moretown was wrecked by flooding waters. They have to replace the only access to the town with a temporary steel bridge. The rain started on Tuesday and lasted through Wednesday. Over 100 residents had to be rescued. Vermont suffered a huge flood almost exactly one year ago. I guess mud is everywhere in the wake of the storm. We're getting the remnants of the storm here now in southern New Brunswick. There's some rumbling thunder, and the odd bolt of lightning, but nothing serious. We can use the rain. It fends off forests getting too dry. Tell me you're okay!
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Hello KB... yes, all is well in central VA... we could use more rain as well and thankfully, we are supposed to get soaking rains all day tomorrow and Saturday. Yeah! I hope you all don't have floods where you are!! hugs, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Daylily
This is an excellent free verse offering strong emotion and engaging our senses. It is a powerful posting that I enjoyed experiencing. I have always liked thunder storms, and one of my all time favorite songs is The Ballad of Thunder Road -- And there was thunder, thunder over thunder road; thunder was his engine and white lightning was his load....
Thanks for the memory!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This is an excellent free verse offering strong emotion and engaging our senses. It is a powerful posting that I enjoyed experiencing. I have always liked thunder storms, and one of my all time favorite songs is The Ballad of Thunder Road -- And there was thunder, thunder over thunder road; thunder was his engine and white lightning was his load....
Thanks for the memory!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much Lily for this wonderful review. Glad you enjoyed my stormy poem :)
Melissa
Comment from Paul McFarland
That's quite a picture, Melissa. I'm surprised that the tower was not hit. We are starting to get thunder storms this summer. They are really impressive when they are close by.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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That's quite a picture, Melissa. I'm surprised that the tower was not hit. We are starting to get thunder storms this summer. They are really impressive when they are close by.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you Paul. So appreciate your good review and thoughts on this one.
Melissa
Comment from poetwatch
Hope everything is well within the fiery sky of Virginia, Melissa. :) That is a nice looking picture. It appears that all storms are up north. Down here we are cooking without turning the stove on. All we do is place the food in the pan and place it outside. Everything is dry. Maybe we'll get water from the hurry canes. :) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Hope everything is well within the fiery sky of Virginia, Melissa. :) That is a nice looking picture. It appears that all storms are up north. Down here we are cooking without turning the stove on. All we do is place the food in the pan and place it outside. Everything is dry. Maybe we'll get water from the hurry canes. :) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thanks my dear Jose. I so appreciate your review. We are still experiencing storminess and will have more this afternoon. Hugs and stay safe!
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Dark Storms, funnels the terrible contents of a storm down this spinning spout which rips and pushes all things and beings to where the wind blows. Frightening.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This poem, Dark Storms, funnels the terrible contents of a storm down this spinning spout which rips and pushes all things and beings to where the wind blows. Frightening.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thanks so much Bill.
Melissa
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a great description of a thunderstorm Melissa. I particularly loved-churning the clouds into deeper shades of wet cement. I hate thunderstorms, I hope you fared okay in the storm.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This is a great description of a thunderstorm Melissa. I particularly loved-churning the clouds into deeper shades of wet cement. I hate thunderstorms, I hope you fared okay in the storm.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Hello Valda... please forgive my tardiness in responding. I really am delighted you liked the stormy poem. We are still having storms here in Virginia and look for more of them for the next three days. So appreciate you and thanks.
Melissa
Comment from June Sargent
We've been experiencing similar lightning storms up here in New Engkavd. Even had two small tornadoes touch down! So I can relate to the roiling and churning. You've painted a dark and dramatic picture of the storms perfectly with this free verse.
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We've been experiencing similar lightning storms up here in New Engkavd. Even had two small tornadoes touch down! So I can relate to the roiling and churning. You've painted a dark and dramatic picture of the storms perfectly with this free verse.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another great, succinct verse in your free form. This beautifully complements your amazing image with excellent imagery that is palpable and very pleasing. Well done Melissa! Debbie
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Another great, succinct verse in your free form. This beautifully complements your amazing image with excellent imagery that is palpable and very pleasing. Well done Melissa! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-We got the thunderstorm last night and
it was pretty wicked. Lots of thunder,
hard rain and wind.
-You do a great job describing it
with vivid imagery that paints a good word picture.
-You have a way of finding vivid words like
"roiling" and using cement to describe the darker clouds.
-Then you have the punch line with "jagged lances of light."
-Very well done.
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Melissa.
-We got the thunderstorm last night and
it was pretty wicked. Lots of thunder,
hard rain and wind.
-You do a great job describing it
with vivid imagery that paints a good word picture.
-You have a way of finding vivid words like
"roiling" and using cement to describe the darker clouds.
-Then you have the punch line with "jagged lances of light."
-Very well done.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024