Danger is my business
Viewing comments for Prologue "Rules of the road"Most everything Mickey did was dangerous.
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Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Liz, that car accident was tragic. Mickey, at age 40, had his whole life in front of him. So much to live for. That accident changed the life of so many people. I guess we will eventually learn what happened to the Pastor? I'm sure that caring for him had to be most demanding and difficult, but it must have been heartbreaking when he didn't recognize anyone. As your story progresses, we will learn what role his wife plays, or doesn't play, in his recovery. If only bike helmets were required at the time, Mickey might have had a better outcome.
A heartbreaking story of love and devotion.
I've not been on FS that much. I have lots going on, and I'm trying to get caught up. Your story is well done; well told. Xo. Margaret
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Hi Liz, that car accident was tragic. Mickey, at age 40, had his whole life in front of him. So much to live for. That accident changed the life of so many people. I guess we will eventually learn what happened to the Pastor? I'm sure that caring for him had to be most demanding and difficult, but it must have been heartbreaking when he didn't recognize anyone. As your story progresses, we will learn what role his wife plays, or doesn't play, in his recovery. If only bike helmets were required at the time, Mickey might have had a better outcome.
A heartbreaking story of love and devotion.
I've not been on FS that much. I have lots going on, and I'm trying to get caught up. Your story is well done; well told. Xo. Margaret
Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2024
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Mickey's wife stayed with him after his accident and recovery for 9 years. She lived with a stranger for 9 years. Finally she met someone else but I applaud her. She has still been very involved in coaching their son, Joey.
He finds has difficult as I do to adult. This is the most adulting I've ever done i go to see my brother other week stay with him for a week come home live my life here for a week it is a 2-hour drive. So I'm beginning to think ahead.As it gets Snowy and slippery I can't do it so I don't know what's going to happen maybe by then they'll have some people set up for him. Well just have to put it out into the universe.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Liz,
This is a very beautiful and poignant story about love, hope, and endurance.
I'm sorry this happened.
You write such that people can feel the emotional rollercoaster that you went through.
I'm slow at reviewing, Liz. But I want to read your other chapters too.
Have a nice Sunday,
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Liz,
This is a very beautiful and poignant story about love, hope, and endurance.
I'm sorry this happened.
You write such that people can feel the emotional rollercoaster that you went through.
I'm slow at reviewing, Liz. But I want to read your other chapters too.
Have a nice Sunday,
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 27-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jul-2024
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Oh my gosh thank you so much for the incredible review please feel free to read my other chapters. I also wrote my autobiography called A Particular Friendship, about the time during, before and after I was in the convent for 20 years. You are welcome to go to my portfolio and peek around and you don't need to write any reviews. This was wonderful what you just wrote. This whole thing will suffice for anything you might read.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The is well written, but so sorrowful. Did he ever recover to a more normal life? You said you celebrated his birthday the next year. Best wishes for you and yours. Karen
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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The is well written, but so sorrowful. Did he ever recover to a more normal life? You said you celebrated his birthday the next year. Best wishes for you and yours. Karen
Comment Written 12-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your compassionate review. He did recover for several years. He was doing very well which I'm writing about in maybe the third or 4th chapter. It is sad to watch the regression. He may be going back to some of the early stages of being inappropriate and explosive. I feel badly for his girlfriend who has been there for him for everything She's definitely his caretaker. We're working on trying to figure out what's going on with his brain. He is 76. That may be a factor. It is very sad though you are right Karen, very sad
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I imagine that dementia may be setting in. I have watched three of my relatives with dementia. They all behaved in a different way. My mother would get violent and hit my sister Lynda who was her main caretaker. Her mother was fairly happy and told us grand stories of being a race car driver in Le Mans who was also a secret agent. She was a huge reader like me, and probably cobbled some stories together and made herself the star. And, my Dad's Mom, saw people coming out of her TV to come rob her. We had to put her in a home because she would beat up the TV. She did much better there. My sisters and I follow all the suggestions on how to stave off dementia. We take our vitamins, do all kinds of puzzles and word games, learn new things. Try new and different food, etc. So far so good.:-)
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I'm wondering if my brother's regression to some of the original stages of violent son inappropriateness is related to his getting older his 76. The last WE worry about dementia the better off will beAll my friends forget wordsIt kind of laugh about it sometime. As mydowsing teacher of many years ago would say take THAT out of the air
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I wish you all well
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Comment from Lindsey Russell
This is a very good story. The only suggestion I would make is to increase the font size please. Thanks for sharing and good luck with this piece!!!!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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This is a very good story. The only suggestion I would make is to increase the font size please. Thanks for sharing and good luck with this piece!!!!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your insightful review. I did not notice that the font was too small I am going to make them as big as I can. I will check on that
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done. Your writing is so immersive. You capture the emotional turmoil surrounding Mickey's accident so well. . The way you describe the his inner thoughts and emotions is so well done. They way you do it makes it not just a story about a tragic accident, but a deeply human tale. I felt for him. Great job in getting me emotionally involved.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Nicely done. Your writing is so immersive. You capture the emotional turmoil surrounding Mickey's accident so well. . The way you describe the his inner thoughts and emotions is so well done. They way you do it makes it not just a story about a tragic accident, but a deeply human tale. I felt for him. Great job in getting me emotionally involved.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your powerful review and complimentary reflections.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Liz
Hmmmm i'm mulling the ending. I can't tell if he was in a coma and walking out in his dream. Because the ambulance was several days before it wasn't close to that event.
Unless the recovery center had sent people looking for him because he was gone. So when he walked in the front door, they said we found you we found you. I'm not sure.
Here friend is singular. So it should not be they. Why not she or he or friends (plural)
from work
" A friend from work sat with me for a while until they had to leave."
Here empath is not a word. Did you mean empathy?
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Hi, Liz
Hmmmm i'm mulling the ending. I can't tell if he was in a coma and walking out in his dream. Because the ambulance was several days before it wasn't close to that event.
Unless the recovery center had sent people looking for him because he was gone. So when he walked in the front door, they said we found you we found you. I'm not sure.
Here friend is singular. So it should not be they. Why not she or he or friends (plural)
from work
" A friend from work sat with me for a while until they had to leave."
Here empath is not a word. Did you mean empathy?
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your involved review. To explain: He kind of escaped a couple of times when he was in his treatment place as long as he had a wheelchair he could get to the next door nursing home. The other time he was out wandering, he had learned how to walk and he went to find his wife who was staying at some building on the property.
That's why when he got back the staff members said "oh we found you" and he said "no I found you"
He was trying to find his way back and he did.
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Ah. Ok. So my second theory was right. Thanks
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yes...thank you for you effort
Comment from Brett Matthew West
All too often drivers who are supposed to not only know the rules of the road, but follow them while behind the wheel of a motorized vehicle, are distracted by everything else. Cell phones are one of the biggest culprits of this offense.
What is an "empath"?
Should "sibling" be siblings?
Being in the ER all those months not good.
If this is a true story why is it marked General Fiction not Non-Fiction?
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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All too often drivers who are supposed to not only know the rules of the road, but follow them while behind the wheel of a motorized vehicle, are distracted by everything else. Cell phones are one of the biggest culprits of this offense.
What is an "empath"?
Should "sibling" be siblings?
Being in the ER all those months not good.
If this is a true story why is it marked General Fiction not Non-Fiction?
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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thank you for your alertness. I obviously did not label the genre yet. I only discovered this a couple of months ago in my autobiography. An empath is probably one of the new age words or something but it means that the person can just absorb all kinds of energy from all the people around them like I say to people sometimes I go in their house and they'll say oh did you notice what I did and I say "No but I can tell if you're upset or depressed or agitated today because I'm an empath. It is quite painful to be an empath because we kind of suck in all the people's emotions.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
How sad that his life is so totally changed, and his injury took so long to moderate until he could be on his own, more or less. Fortunately, he wore a helmet as he probably would not have survived at all. You have told this in an interesting way as time progresses. One correction: . . . dymanics (X) are when . . .
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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How sad that his life is so totally changed, and his injury took so long to moderate until he could be on his own, more or less. Fortunately, he wore a helmet as he probably would not have survived at all. You have told this in an interesting way as time progresses. One correction: . . . dymanics (X) are when . . .
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your compassionate review. He did not wear a helmet. They weren't even thought of for bikes back then. He wore a helmet with his motorcycle, they were required. With no helmet, he hit his head against the windshield as he flew back.
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You might check those few sentences with where the helmet was involved. I thought you said he wore a helmet on his motorcyle even though they were not required.
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I will check them out thank you
Comment from lyenochka
I know this is a hard task for you, Liz. I like how you show us this shocking, life-changing point in Mickey's life. (Wasn't his name Nike?) I know that others who have experienced such a shocking accident that affected their abilities will also be blessed by knowing how love can get people through such devastation.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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I know this is a hard task for you, Liz. I like how you show us this shocking, life-changing point in Mickey's life. (Wasn't his name Nike?) I know that others who have experienced such a shocking accident that affected their abilities will also be blessed by knowing how love can get people through such devastation.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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I named the Nike and my other but because the thank you for your compassionate review Names have been changed to protect the guilty. But he wanted to be called Nike at some point. I guess somebody called him that when he was a kid. As an adult, he changed it to Mike for the same reason I changed mine to Liz. Too much authority figure association.
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Okay! I thought "Nike" was cool because she's the goddess of victory and your brother was victorious over his tragic accident.
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Good metaphor in your insightful review. Growing up he's always been Mickey as I have always been Elizabeth. Might I use your metaphor and allusion in my book?
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I can't take credit for it - it's Greek mythology - one that the shoe company liked so much to name themselves after her. 😊 Glad you liked it!
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Yuh, I will work it in. Cool
Comment from patcelaw
This is very well written that reads very well when it is written loud I wish you the very best with all of your writing I also wish you a very wonderful week and may God bless you and you continue to write for him. Patricia
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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This is very well written that reads very well when it is written loud I wish you the very best with all of your writing I also wish you a very wonderful week and may God bless you and you continue to write for him. Patricia
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
thank you for your supportive review. The wishes full of joy go your way also
