The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from LJbutterfly
Great action. Hopefully the ghosts are smarter than the mortal, and the ghost's plan works. Tony and Terrence are temporary heroes for now. How will Louie feel about them after the loot is removed from the mansion?
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Great action. Hopefully the ghosts are smarter than the mortal, and the ghost's plan works. Tony and Terrence are temporary heroes for now. How will Louie feel about them after the loot is removed from the mansion?
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Well, Michael is a mortal and he came up with the plan so he gets a little credit. Though without the ghosts to build the fire ring, it would have been difficult to accomplish. Team work!! Tony and Terrance are two young boys who just don't know how to stay out of trouble. They don't belong in the gangster world. I wouldn't trust Louie for a second!!!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Sounds like the plan is going very well. The bad guys now know where the "treasure" is and think taking it is no problem. Tony and Terrance are probably not long for the living world once they get the trucks called in. The climax nears and everyone thinks they know what will happen. But do they?
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Sounds like the plan is going very well. The bad guys now know where the "treasure" is and think taking it is no problem. Tony and Terrance are probably not long for the living world once they get the trucks called in. The climax nears and everyone thinks they know what will happen. But do they?
Comment Written 01-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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Poor Terrence and Tony are too young for the crime scene. They left the neighborhood, thinking they were hot stuff. Now I bet they wish they were home. Remember...this is one of my stories...I never know what's happening until it does. LOL Thanks so much.
Smiles, CArol
Comment from royowen
So the baddies have found the loot, heaven knows what they'll do if they discover the ghosts as well, just loved this story, theft is theft whatever the se ne'er do wells call it, perhaps this uneasy feeling that Marcos feels could ghostly figures, well done Carol, , blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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So the baddies have found the loot, heaven knows what they'll do if they discover the ghosts as well, just loved this story, theft is theft whatever the se ne'er do wells call it, perhaps this uneasy feeling that Marcos feels could ghostly figures, well done Carol, , blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2024
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I'm so glad that you are enjoying the story because I am too. It must show because I can't seem to end it. LOL Thanks as always, Roy.
Smiles, Carol
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That?s true, they have a mind of their own
Comment from BethShelby
The gang is really ansious to get this treasure out of mansion hefore the guys upstairs gdt it. I the pant the others have set up should work if their exit. All those diamonds have their eyes popping
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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The gang is really ansious to get this treasure out of mansion hefore the guys upstairs gdt it. I the pant the others have set up should work if their exit. All those diamonds have their eyes popping
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Diamonds are a girls best friend and gangsters too it seems. In a way, Victoria might be responsible for saving the day...it's her expensive diamond. lol Hopefully, the gang can out smart the bad guys!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ulla
Hmm, Carol, this all sounds too good to be true..I doubt they will get away with. So much is bound to go wrong. But, of course, I could be proven wrong. A hug, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Hmm, Carol, this all sounds too good to be true..I doubt they will get away with. So much is bound to go wrong. But, of course, I could be proven wrong. A hug, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Hi Ulla...Hope you are doing okay and thanks for enjoying my story. I am having fun with these ghosts now. Mischievious guys! Appreciate the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
I don't think they will last too long as the boss is unlikely to want to share the treasure. He'll dispose of them once he knows the details of the location. But the plan has worked - they've been lured in. Now we'll see who wins!
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I don't think they will last too long as the boss is unlikely to want to share the treasure. He'll dispose of them once he knows the details of the location. But the plan has worked - they've been lured in. Now we'll see who wins!
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Yes, poor Terrence and Tony are wanna-be gangsters from the neighborhood, thinking they've got the best of life. Hopefully, they get out with their skin intact.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
I do my best to never miss anything you write, but unfortunately, for the last few weeks I've gotten so far behind that I'll never be able to catch up. But it's good to be back. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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I do my best to never miss anything you write, but unfortunately, for the last few weeks I've gotten so far behind that I'll never be able to catch up. But it's good to be back. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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OH, Ric....I am so happy to see you. I was so worried about you because I know you do read my dribbling. I pray you haven't been away because of illness or something bad. Maybe just taking a break from our craziness? Of course, your return is fabulous and you come bearing gifts.....I am blessed. Thank you! Hugs, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Glad the ghosts got an opportunity to put on a show and lure the gangsters. I think Tony and Terrence's victory on getting on their boss's good side will probably be short-lived! (Poor guys didn't even get on the characters' list. ð???)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Glad the ghosts got an opportunity to put on a show and lure the gangsters. I think Tony and Terrence's victory on getting on their boss's good side will probably be short-lived! (Poor guys didn't even get on the characters' list. ð???)
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
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Thanks for pointing out my error on the character list. Of course, Terrence and Tony deserve their moments of glory as well. Thanks again.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from karenina
As exciting as this is I love the interjections of humor along the way--
Lines like: "Raising his voice, Billy shouted, "You trying to get us caught? You're making enough noise to raise the dead."
Get a chuckle out of me as I think yes, indeed! More spirits than anyone bargained for!
It's feeling like we're coming to a wild faceoff!
(But you'll not do that in one more chapter ~ this isn't my first "Carol" masterpiece!)
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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As exciting as this is I love the interjections of humor along the way--
Lines like: "Raising his voice, Billy shouted, "You trying to get us caught? You're making enough noise to raise the dead."
Get a chuckle out of me as I think yes, indeed! More spirits than anyone bargained for!
It's feeling like we're coming to a wild faceoff!
(But you'll not do that in one more chapter ~ this isn't my first "Carol" masterpiece!)
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I think you are right...Not able to do anything in one chapter. Every time I think it's close to wrapping up another idea pops into my head. I hope it's make the story enjoyable so that when it ends everyone says oh no! I want more!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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I'm on team "MORE PLEASE!'
:)
Comment from prettybluebirds
It sounds like things are moving forward nicely. Each succeeding chapter is more exciting than the last. I'm immensely enjoying your story and look forward to the following writing.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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It sounds like things are moving forward nicely. Each succeeding chapter is more exciting than the last. I'm immensely enjoying your story and look forward to the following writing.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
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I am glad that you don't think the story is getting boring as it winds down to the end. I hope it remains interesting until the last page.
Smiles, Carol