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a collection of poetry and experience

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Comment from Bill Schott
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This 4x5 poem, Bloom, has the proper formatting and suggests the pressure of love will perform a revelation of heartfelt appreciation in the future. ...................

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 30-Jun-2024
    Thank you so much, Bill!
Comment from jessizero
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I liked your use of "old" language here. Your message about love being like a flower was lovely. Thank you so much for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
    Thank you very much! Everyone else seems to think I've made spelling errors by using the archaic Skakespearean versions of words. I appreciate your review.
Comment from patcelaw
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A very nicely written and presented poem and I enjoyed very much listening to it I wish you the very best for the weekend and I also wish you a very happy week. Patricia

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
    Thank you, Patricia--have a lovely weekend!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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I enjoyed the sentiments here and I have just one suggestion for you:

(is (pressed) tightly closed;)

A fine nature write and these blooms are so pleasing, love Dolly x x x x

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
    Thank you so much!
Comment from royowen
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I love the different analogies of the heart, as different metaphors, but the heart is different expressions, but yet can be also be an expression of a belief of nothing in particular, well done, blessings Roy
Typo : tightly (prest) pressed? (Clos'd) closed?

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2024
    Using the archaic Shakespearean language of the old English theater. Thanks for your review.
reply by royowen on 29-Jun-2024
    I like it too
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, gansach. I hope you are well

This is a beautiful poem. It equates your heart with a flower. That flower may not open up in spring. It may only open up after you meet the right significant other I hope that happens for you soon. If this is you in the poem, maybe whoever it is is fictitious.

I'm curious why you wrote prest for pressed. They both sound the same but only one is a word. Guess which one. I would just use pressed

I have the same question about clos'd. Why not just say closed. Sounds the same and is actually a word.

I enjoyed reading your poem

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2024


reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
    Thanks for your review and comments. When I wrote this, many years ago, I felt it had an Olde English feel to it so I went with the Shakespearean spellings. He often used "t" or an apostophe in place of the "e" in words ending in "ed" since those were pronounced as two syllables--close-ed, press-ed--in the English theater. In American English, those archaic spellings became obsolete, but may still be used in poetic writings.
reply by Pamusart on 28-Jun-2024
    Ok.
    That?s fine. Thank you for the explanation