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Comment from Pamusart
Hi thoughtgame2
You present a lot of interesting issues. When I read this, I think of AI computers. Taking over the world, causing wars and pestilence.
I thought you did a very good job here
Here it should be too
"I'm trying to shout!, Without being to loud"
Here. Mines should be possessive with an apostrophe mind's
"magnets I see from my minds eyes "
Here. I think you wanted the? After that.
"it...why? Is that. The killers are still "
Here it should be their
"hibernate with there loved ones...who dare seek salvation"
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Hi thoughtgame2
You present a lot of interesting issues. When I read this, I think of AI computers. Taking over the world, causing wars and pestilence.
I thought you did a very good job here
Here it should be too
"I'm trying to shout!, Without being to loud"
Here. Mines should be possessive with an apostrophe mind's
"magnets I see from my minds eyes "
Here. I think you wanted the? After that.
"it...why? Is that. The killers are still "
Here it should be their
"hibernate with there loved ones...who dare seek salvation"
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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thank you. its been corrected.i really appreciate the peek in (smile)
Comment from jim vecchio
Sorry I have no sixes. In their place, rather than comment on your excellent writing, I offer this passage from Ecclesiastes:
"Because sentence against an evil work is not executed speedily, therefore the heart of the sons of men is fully set in them to do evil.
Though a sinner do evil an hundred times, and his days be prolonged, yet surely I know that it shall be well with them that fear God, which fear before him:
But it shall not be well with the wicked, neither shall he prolong his days, which are as a shadow; because he feareth not before God."
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Sorry I have no sixes. In their place, rather than comment on your excellent writing, I offer this passage from Ecclesiastes:
"Because sentence against an evil work is not executed speedily, therefore the heart of the sons of men is fully set in them to do evil.
Though a sinner do evil an hundred times, and his days be prolonged, yet surely I know that it shall be well with them that fear God, which fear before him:
But it shall not be well with the wicked, neither shall he prolong his days, which are as a shadow; because he feareth not before God."
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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very grand way to explain (our) gifts, thank you for sharing.
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Thank you for your writing.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done. Your writing shares concern about the state of the world. I like how you share your personal thoughts when writing this. It makes it personal and more touching.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Nicely done. Your writing shares concern about the state of the world. I like how you share your personal thoughts when writing this. It makes it personal and more touching.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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thank you sir, im really trying to find my lane.
