I'm Just An Old Cowboy
Snake River silliness2 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your funny take on the life of an unconventional cowboy from the Snake River is delightful and engaging. I love how he is a vegan and preferring root beer! You add fun twist to the cowboy persona. The poem's light-hearted tone and clever wordplay make it an enjoyable read. I had a smile on my face the entire time I was reading it! Keep up the fantastic work in crafting such amusing poems.
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Your funny take on the life of an unconventional cowboy from the Snake River is delightful and engaging. I love how he is a vegan and preferring root beer! You add fun twist to the cowboy persona. The poem's light-hearted tone and clever wordplay make it an enjoyable read. I had a smile on my face the entire time I was reading it! Keep up the fantastic work in crafting such amusing poems.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I thought your rhyming was stellar. And in some places, you had good meter where each line had the same number of syllables as each other line and there was a sequence of hard and soft sounds usually eight syllables with the first syllable having a soft sound, and then the next syllable having, a hard sound followed by repeating that order so that the line ends on a hard sound
It's not easy to do. Because at the same time you have to rhyme and you only have.eight syllables per line. You could have more. If you want to talk about it sometime, let me know the same time you're trying to rhyme and it gets frustrating because you have to rhyme using eight or ten syllables.
Not sure why I'm telling you all this. You probably think I'm insulting you but I'm actually complimenting you because your poem and your rhythm flow so well. The reason I am encouraging you to play with meter is because you're already pretty good at it
are you saying here that you don't want to taste the root beer?
" just plain root beer
I aint'a fixin to taste it here"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I thought your rhyming was stellar. And in some places, you had good meter where each line had the same number of syllables as each other line and there was a sequence of hard and soft sounds usually eight syllables with the first syllable having a soft sound, and then the next syllable having, a hard sound followed by repeating that order so that the line ends on a hard sound
It's not easy to do. Because at the same time you have to rhyme and you only have.eight syllables per line. You could have more. If you want to talk about it sometime, let me know the same time you're trying to rhyme and it gets frustrating because you have to rhyme using eight or ten syllables.
Not sure why I'm telling you all this. You probably think I'm insulting you but I'm actually complimenting you because your poem and your rhythm flow so well. The reason I am encouraging you to play with meter is because you're already pretty good at it
are you saying here that you don't want to taste the root beer?
" just plain root beer
I aint'a fixin to taste it here"
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
