Heart's Aflame
When two heart's are afire with desire2 total reviews
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I really like this phrase because a serenade is not normally not silent. So, kudos to you for writing that line
" Timeless
silky clouds silently
serenade high above,"
I wonder if this post should have a warning for sexual language. Because it's pretty heated sexually. I'm not gonna say anything. I'm just telling you and only you.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
I really like this phrase because a serenade is not normally not silent. So, kudos to you for writing that line
" Timeless
silky clouds silently
serenade high above,"
I wonder if this post should have a warning for sexual language. Because it's pretty heated sexually. I'm not gonna say anything. I'm just telling you and only you.
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Nicely done! The progression from innocence to ecstasy and finally to climax is skillfully woven through each stanza. For me your poem was about the intensity and intimacy of a fleeting passionate liaison. Your poem is beautifully crafted with excellent imagery and a gradual buildup of emotions.
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Nicely done! The progression from innocence to ecstasy and finally to climax is skillfully woven through each stanza. For me your poem was about the intensity and intimacy of a fleeting passionate liaison. Your poem is beautifully crafted with excellent imagery and a gradual buildup of emotions.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024