The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from karenina
Good grief! What was I thinking? Of COURSE this would not be a smooth transition of spirits and a few mansion humans in search of a treasure...
This is Carol!
I had literary whiplash for a few seconds, but hey
You have the "goods" to bring in the Mafia--complete with hidden speak easy.
Oh boy.
And I thought the demons were gone?
Not so fast... Maybe?
Aargh!
I'm never getting to sleep tonight!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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Good grief! What was I thinking? Of COURSE this would not be a smooth transition of spirits and a few mansion humans in search of a treasure...
This is Carol!
I had literary whiplash for a few seconds, but hey
You have the "goods" to bring in the Mafia--complete with hidden speak easy.
Oh boy.
And I thought the demons were gone?
Not so fast... Maybe?
Aargh!
I'm never getting to sleep tonight!
Karenina
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2024
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I guess being married to an Italian for 23 years left its mark on me in so many ways...(secret- his family had deep ties) I am glad you liked this story and I hope what is to come. I can't believe you are up and still reading. Must be a sleep in day tomorrow...
Love ya
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Reading ONE chapter of this is like eating ONE peanut.
It's impossible! (But your words have NO calories!)
LOL...
Comment from LJbutterfly
You've added a new element of suspense. I especially enjoyed reading your description of the bar, the two guys at the bar, and Louie as he stopped near a mirror to check his hair. As always, your dialogue was realistic. Now, there will be competition for the treasure in the mansion. i hope the gangsters encounter ghosts. How funny would that be?
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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You've added a new element of suspense. I especially enjoyed reading your description of the bar, the two guys at the bar, and Louie as he stopped near a mirror to check his hair. As always, your dialogue was realistic. Now, there will be competition for the treasure in the mansion. i hope the gangsters encounter ghosts. How funny would that be?
Comment Written 23-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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thank you...thankyou... thank you. Can't wait to see how you feel about the next two chapters I've posted. It was a crazy twist to bring in the gangsters but one I think can play out in so many ways. Glad you enjoyed.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a well-constructed chapter, Carol, getting me right into your fabulous mafiosi story! The bar is beautifully described and you have great skill in bringing these characters to life through excellent and very credible dialogue. So the moral of the story is: always believe a woman's instincts. And never belittle Maria. Also watch that Marco who's obviously not quite as he seems! Nicely done and thank you for sharing! Debbie
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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What a well-constructed chapter, Carol, getting me right into your fabulous mafiosi story! The bar is beautifully described and you have great skill in bringing these characters to life through excellent and very credible dialogue. So the moral of the story is: always believe a woman's instincts. And never belittle Maria. Also watch that Marco who's obviously not quite as he seems! Nicely done and thank you for sharing! Debbie
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thanks so much for stopping by to read another chapter of my story, Debbie. I appreciate your time and comments. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That's a twist in the plot, now things are going to hot up. I don't think they believe there are ghosts in the mansion, this is going to be very interesting! I'm wondering if Maria's premonition regarding their safety? And not about the treasure. I like this twist, Carol, I like the way you have easily turned the story around. I think I have another chapter to read now. Loving this, my friend. :) Sandra xxxxx
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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That's a twist in the plot, now things are going to hot up. I don't think they believe there are ghosts in the mansion, this is going to be very interesting! I'm wondering if Maria's premonition regarding their safety? And not about the treasure. I like this twist, Carol, I like the way you have easily turned the story around. I think I have another chapter to read now. Loving this, my friend. :) Sandra xxxxx
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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I'm so glad that you loved the twist to the story. I couldn't have a bland ole treasure hung, now could I? Thank you as always.
Love ya, Carol
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Just what the ghosts and few humans need, a gang planning to rip them off. Are Madeline and Sandra the only living humans in the house? I thought there was a guy. This chapter is a great addition to the story although it is going to make the treasure hunt more difficult.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Just what the ghosts and few humans need, a gang planning to rip them off. Are Madeline and Sandra the only living humans in the house? I thought there was a guy. This chapter is a great addition to the story although it is going to make the treasure hunt more difficult.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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As always, I am running behind on my reviews. Trying to paint my house and still stay active on the site. I'm getting to old for this juggling. LOL A big thank you for your time and comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Teri7
Another great chapter you have penned. You always used great dialogue and great descriptive words. I feel as if I am right there with you in the chapter. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Another great chapter you have penned. You always used great dialogue and great descriptive words. I feel as if I am right there with you in the chapter. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2024
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Thank you again for another great review on my story. I always appreciate your comments and time.
Have a great day!
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You are so welcome!!!
Comment from Wendy G
An unexpected thread here with the introduction of these new characters. This will cause a lot more complications for the residents of the mansion, both human and ghostly. No idea what will happen next.
Wendy
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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An unexpected thread here with the introduction of these new characters. This will cause a lot more complications for the residents of the mansion, both human and ghostly. No idea what will happen next.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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William was once the kingpin of the gangs and even so sophisticated he served as a well-reknown Judge while doing it. Maybe he still has a few tricks up his sleeve. I guess we wait and see.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from royowen
I wonder if you are mixing the living with the deceased, and I'm sure you have plans for this, it will be interesting to see how Frankie and Narco will become once they are dead, you've made a very interesting venture into the living and the dead, well.done, Carol, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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I wonder if you are mixing the living with the deceased, and I'm sure you have plans for this, it will be interesting to see how Frankie and Narco will become once they are dead, you've made a very interesting venture into the living and the dead, well.done, Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Good morning, Roy. William was a kingpin in the gangster world at one time and now these newcomers think they can waltz in an claim the fortune. Should be interesting to see who can outsmart whom. And must must not forget that all the "bag guys" inside aren't gone either. A battle goes on.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment from BethShelby
Now we have some people that aren't ghosts about to get involved. I'm thinking the way rooms keep imploding, there want to a mansion for Sandra to inherit. I don't think she wanted it anyway.I'll be waiting to find out what happens at the mansion
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Now we have some people that aren't ghosts about to get involved. I'm thinking the way rooms keep imploding, there want to a mansion for Sandra to inherit. I don't think she wanted it anyway.I'll be waiting to find out what happens at the mansion
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Ues, we have people now and I can't wait to see how the ghosts and the gangsters hit if off. LOL should be interesting. Thanks for the review.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Well, we know that greedy mobsters don't fare well in your novels so I'm guessing they will have a scary encounter with the ghosts of the mansion. But I was a bit confused about the bar. Was there an inside bar which was completely hidden and felt like a different time/place?
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Well, we know that greedy mobsters don't fare well in your novels so I'm guessing they will have a scary encounter with the ghosts of the mansion. But I was a bit confused about the bar. Was there an inside bar which was completely hidden and felt like a different time/place?
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Yes, there was. Out front it was a regular bar, but behind closed doors was the speakeasy. When prohibition was around, the bar was hidden and the mobsters thought it was classy to carry on the trend. And yes....gangsters tend to pay the price in most of my novels. Thanks so much, Helen.
Smiles, Carol