DUEL with the DEVIL
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Stalker much? I am busier than a one armed paperhanger at a wallpaper convention. I do not have time to review each one in order to catch up. Good theme. Good work. Karen
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Stalker much? I am busier than a one armed paperhanger at a wallpaper convention. I do not have time to review each one in order to catch up. Good theme. Good work. Karen
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
Comment from T B Botts
Hey Jim,
it might seem creepy now, but there was a time when it was considered romantic I think. Being a teen boy, and dealing with all the desires of a man and none of the ability to realize those desires is so frustrating. To be rejected is one of the most humiliating experiences one can have, even if you're not a teen boy. Well done Jim.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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Hey Jim,
it might seem creepy now, but there was a time when it was considered romantic I think. Being a teen boy, and dealing with all the desires of a man and none of the ability to realize those desires is so frustrating. To be rejected is one of the most humiliating experiences one can have, even if you're not a teen boy. Well done Jim.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 26-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2024
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You know, you're right. Back in our day, this would have seemed okay, but today it's considered stalking. I feel for this kid.
Thanks for your great review and for the 6 too, Tom.
Comment from Thesis
With a fourteen year old's hormones raging, I'm not surprised that he would conceive of such a plan to stalk Sandi for the identity of her boyfriend. You've captured his hurt and resolve to continue his quest.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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With a fourteen year old's hormones raging, I'm not surprised that he would conceive of such a plan to stalk Sandi for the identity of her boyfriend. You've captured his hurt and resolve to continue his quest.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2024
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Yep, it's hard to rein those hormones in. They made us do silly things in our youths.
Comment from BethShelby
I does seem girls feel awkward dating your guys. That doesn't stop the younger guy having crushes on older girls. Getting disappointed and rejected is all a part of growing up. This guy almost acts as though he might bevcome a starker to find out who she might be dating. I enjoyed reading this post.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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I does seem girls feel awkward dating your guys. That doesn't stop the younger guy having crushes on older girls. Getting disappointed and rejected is all a part of growing up. This guy almost acts as though he might bevcome a starker to find out who she might be dating. I enjoyed reading this post.
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Good word for it: stalker. That's what he's doing, although at least he's keeping himself hidden. He seems awfully desperate for this girl. Ah, what young love (lust?) will do to a teenage boy.
Comment from Teri7
Jim, This is a very well written chapter. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery with the picture you used and with your words. I look forward to the next chapter. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Jim, This is a very well written chapter. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery with the picture you used and with your words. I look forward to the next chapter. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 21-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2024
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Thanks so much, Teri. I'm so glad you're enjoying this. I'll keep writing if you keep reading!
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It's a deal! I wish some more people would read Christian work too. It is very sad. Blessings, Teri
Comment from lyenochka
I hope Brian doesn't work too hard trying to get a date with Sandi. It is clear she likes him but apparently, she'd lose her social status if she dated him. I hope Brian doesn't get hurt in the process of trying to win her over. I was hoping he'd also say something to encourage his sister who has had her own romance dreams crushed.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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I hope Brian doesn't work too hard trying to get a date with Sandi. It is clear she likes him but apparently, she'd lose her social status if she dated him. I hope Brian doesn't get hurt in the process of trying to win her over. I was hoping he'd also say something to encourage his sister who has had her own romance dreams crushed.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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You may be disappointed in this, Helen. Unfortunately, Brian has somewhat of an addictive personality, and he tends to get carried away with things. It becomes all or nothing with him, and he tends to do things with a gusto that sometimes sees him go too far. We saw this a little at the beginning when all he wanted to do was eat and play chess online following his parents' death. And, of course, there was that scene in the Prologue.
My own personality is something like Brian's. I tend to get on kicks and I go full-bore with them, often for long periods. Golf and bridge were interests I pursued quite heavily when I was younger. Playing computer chess lately has gotten me hooked. Writing novels too, I guess you could say. These sound like fairly healthy obsessions, but I was also quite heavily into marijuana in my late teens and 20s. The thing that really prompted me to give it up was a persistent case of bronchitis and the birth of my children. Fortunately, marijuana is not physically addictive, so it was easy to go cold turkey.
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Oh-oh. But have noticed that addictive personalities do better on Fanstory? Lol. You have a healthy balance here.
Comment from royowen
I think what Brian is doing is obsessive, and it could be called stalking, which is funny considering how immoral people are today, and yet we would call obsessive crushes as something less than savoury. There are rules emerging which is really Pharisee-ical in essence, in other.words not mosaic law, what Jesus condemned laws made by 'white washed tombs' welll dine Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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I think what Brian is doing is obsessive, and it could be called stalking, which is funny considering how immoral people are today, and yet we would call obsessive crushes as something less than savoury. There are rules emerging which is really Pharisee-ical in essence, in other.words not mosaic law, what Jesus condemned laws made by 'white washed tombs' welll dine Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Absolutely right you are, Roy. Obsessive and stalking, although she is not aware of it. This tendency to obsess is a trait of his that will plague him through his life, and he will have to learn how to channel it in healthy directions if he is to be successful in life.
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That?s true
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh to be this young again Jim and only worry about these kind of romantic connections and this guy is not giving up easily and so the fun begins, another fine chapter in this romantic game love and infatuation, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Oh to be this young again Jim and only worry about these kind of romantic connections and this guy is not giving up easily and so the fun begins, another fine chapter in this romantic game love and infatuation, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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You've got it, Dolly. There will be ups and downs in this game of love and infatuation. In Brian's case, it may become a little more than he bargained for.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm sure you're aware females at about the same age do dumb things too. LOL Thank you for sharing this with us. I do enjoy reading. This is vey well written. My heart is going out to Brian.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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I'm sure you're aware females at about the same age do dumb things too. LOL Thank you for sharing this with us. I do enjoy reading. This is vey well written. My heart is going out to Brian.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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No! Really? They can't be as dumb as what guys do, can they? LOL.
Thanks so much, and so glad you're enjoying this, Barbara.
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To be honest after raising four boys and hearing some of the stunts my husband did growing up, I'm surprised males make it to adulthood.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very good story about coming of age. Yeah, it is a little creepy that he has a plan to get her attention, but guys who try harder are usually more truly interested in the girl of their dreams.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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This is a very good story about coming of age. Yeah, it is a little creepy that he has a plan to get her attention, but guys who try harder are usually more truly interested in the girl of their dreams.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2024
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Yeah, he's interested alright to the point of obsession, but that's part of his personality, as he tends to go overboard with things.
Thanks so much for those 6 stars, Carol. Very much appreciated.